Reviews for Once Aflicted
dizzydani666 chapter 3 . 11/28/2012
Evenos Cross chapter 4 . 1/6/2008
nice i like it so far especially ur OC
SS-lover06 chapter 2 . 10/26/2007
Wow! This is exciting both Itachi and Kakasho love Ayama.
DiscoUnicorn chapter 9 . 7/15/2007
No, that's not why he's always reading those dirty books. I hate your OC. *nods* Yeh, but I kinda think I know where you're going with this story. So, I'll try to hang around until it's done.
DiscoUnicorn chapter 7 . 7/13/2007
If this woman is a skinny as you made her out to be in the previous chapter, I doubt she would have an hourglass figure. Or maybe it's just me. And thanks for leaving me waiting with my mouth open. ;)So... you gonna leave us hanging there or finish this up in the next chapter? I'm referring to the lemon. I actually have no idea where the story is going.
DiscoUnicorn chapter 6 . 7/13/2007 your OC like a god or something?
Orennjii chapter 2 . 6/1/2007
ITACHI! NO...SERIOUSLY! that's cool...lolz great story by the way...PLZ UPDATE!
butterfly.bones chapter 1 . 5/27/2007
You need to WRITE BETTER. It's a good idea, but the way you say

"The woman stands up and puts the picture in their pocket. But unknowing to her she only put it in half way and a twig catches the picture and pulls it out of her pocket. The picture floats down and lands next to a exhausted Naruto who doesn’t even notice it until he rolls over…." is too obvious. You can say it like this:

She stood up, placing the picture in HER pocket. As she launched herself from the branch, a twig caught a corner of the photograph, pulling it from its alcove. It floated down and landed next to the exhausted Naruto.

Said boy rolled over panting. A small piece of paper caught his eye, and he reached for it, examining it quietly while resting.

Oh, and...not to sound evil bitch or anything, but way to name her