Reviews for What Went Wrong?
Laughing Rain chapter 1 . 5/8/2010
{My warrior, my master, my ruler, my self}

Wow... That was really deep...

I'm pretty sure deep is the word for it...

Laughing Rain
Silverclaw chapter 1 . 1/24/2009
That was great. I thought it was about Tigerstar, with a few cats thinking about him in every verse. I think the first verse was Bluestar (my loyal deputy), Redtail, and maybe Lionheart or Whitestorm. The second verse I think was FIreheart (my rival), Dustpelt or Longtail (my idol), and his brother and mother or father. I think the last one was him talking to himself and/or possibly Hawkfrost. Over all a great poem.
the pumpkin'd murderer chapter 1 . 6/2/2007
i think the 1st verse is bluestar to tigerclaw/star, the 2nd one i have absolutely no clue at all, and the 3rd one either hawkfrost, tigerclaw/star, or some completely self obsessed crazily ambitious cat. I do suppose all could be to hawkfrost (leaporedstar[i have no idea if that was spelled right]to hawkfrost, brambleclaw(except the son part) to hawkfrost , and himself. hm
Rabbitstorm chapter 1 . 5/31/2007
I liked that poem.
Brightfang chapter 1 . 5/30/2007
Very nice! I liked this poem a lot, espceially the subtle rhyming. I'm wondering who it's about, though i do have one idea...

Anyway, keep writing! (Hopefully poetry/stories as nice as this).

~Brightfang
Akasuna no Rin chapter 1 . 5/30/2007
Bluestar thinking about Tigerclaw/star. I like your rhyming, for I can't rhyme to save my life. At least not good.
wolf with panther eyes chapter 1 . 5/30/2007
Nice, but which cat is it talking about?
YesterdaysPast chapter 1 . 5/30/2007
that was a grat poe...but who was it to? my first impression was that it was about Firestar and Brambleclaw. it was great though!
TalksLikeACat chapter 1 . 5/29/2007
Great poem, yet again! I wish I could write poetry like you... ;) And Spottedstar, I thought at first that it was talking through Bluestar's eye point of view towards Tigerstar, but now I'm starting to change my mind. Maybe Tawnypelt to Brambleclaw? After all, it did say, 'My brother...' But then it said... my son! Err... confusing! Keltena, maybe clear this up for us, eh?

-NN
Spottedstar106 chapter 1 . 5/29/2007
Who's it talking about?Hawkfrost?Tigerstar?Mudclaw?Jaggedtooth?I liked it!

Spottedstar, leader of windclan