this is very interesting produce more soon

I like it interesting concept.

Lisa

Very interesting idea. I hope you write a long story.

Hard to find anything to improve here. You've laid out an astonishing amount of background information without the Reader feeling lectured at (except briefly in one sentence of par.3.). You've taken two strong characters with knowledge and secrets, and left both of them puzzled and one troubled, so you've set something into motion, even though the Reader doesn't know what yet.

Your prose somehow succeeds in conveying the difference in maturity between Jake and Methos. Jake is a mature adult pretending to be a kid. Methos has the much deeper confidence in his own untouchability of a very experienced immortal. Of course, because of this it will be hard to introduce any tension on Methos' part without bringing in another immortal. Can you do it?

This story looks like it's got potential. Both are older than they look and generally odd men out. And Jake may have a bit more understanding than the Boy Scout about having a dark past.

I'd like to see more.

This is a very open-minded curious version of Methos. Can't wait to see how this fic develops.

Interesting start - a very original idea, and I'm looking forward to more, when you get around to writing it.