Reviews for Coyote Ugly: The New Girl
catherine55555 chapter 3 . 2/10/2008
Good story i really love hope that you will continu soon
Raging Raven chapter 2 . 8/13/2007
I want more, this story seems really interesting so please UPDATE.
and.she.waits chapter 2 . 7/16/2007
:) i loved this movie... plus your main character has my name, so i'll be back for more :)

good job so far! watch some of your spelling though (sense for since) it's not a huge deal it just distracts me a bit
miss.quixotic chapter 2 . 6/11/2007
I like where this is going; I loved the movie Coyote Ugly because of its strong characters and I really think you captured Lil's personality well.

Some constructive criticism: The beginning of the first chapter is a bit confusing. I missed the transition from "she thought" to "I said." If you're in first person, just make sure everything stays in first person. And at the end of Chapter 2, make sure dialogue is on different lines instead of in one paragraph.

Other than that, it's great: I love Melissa's character, and I like how you're not going overboard with descriptions so that you can keep the audience interested. It's well written, kudos!