Reviews for Version of Fate Series
immortal7 chapter 7 . 6/20/2007
its sad to see tragedy destroy everything becasue no parties talk to each other since they blame themsleves. i like how you bring the distict redrawing of the lines between everyone. post soon later
twillight chapter 7 . 6/20/2007
christ.. wow.. wow! .. man can u write.. everything is so flawlesly done here.. so so beatiful written and so mergh! its just so great! i a pplade u! and continal on ur legacy!
PrincessDushku chapter 7 . 6/20/2007
heart now fully broken.

I actually cried.

Please give Shego that extra courage, this HAS to have a happy ending!... doesn't it?
Chikiko chapter 6 . 6/19/2007
oh wow that chapter came out of left field and spun me for several loops! talk about an emotional chapter. i was thinking that maybe some good might have come from that last chapter but instead got worse. i know they say it gets worse before it gets any better but that was just a disheartening chapter.

oh and after going back and checking the scene i was talking about in my earlier review was in chapter 4 not chapter 3. so i think you probably took care of it already.
Punk Rock Princess chapter 6 . 6/18/2007
This actually made me tear up a little. Just a little. It's very well written and I'm pretty sure I want to add it to my favourite. I'm definitely looking forward to the next chapter.
time2change chapter 6 . 6/17/2007
wow, this chapter was just full of angst and i loved every word of it...i feel so bad for all the players involved and can only wonder what you have in store for them...
immortal7 chapter 6 . 6/17/2007
That was sad. I wonder how the rest of the world will take it becasue i don't see Kim staying with Ron know. ANy way love the chapter and can't wait for the next later
immortal7 chapter 5 . 6/17/2007
Its a beautiful story i only wish i would have started reading it sooner. I like how you have Shego and Kim slowly giving in to themselves even if they won't admit it. The confrontation between the three was beautifully writtne and i can't waitfor the rest. I wonder how Lanica and everyone else will act when they find out Saline is Shego? any way post soon later
Chikiko chapter 5 . 6/15/2007
Wow that last bit was between kim, shego and lanica was good. i especially liked what lanika said "Not end this, end this." also it was something to see how jaded kim had gotten when she was thinking about karen & andy.

one thing though, there were a couple of places where you have the someone say actually say shego when she should be saying saline. the two i remember were in chapter 3 when Kelli was talking to Lanika and she says shego and in chapter five when Lanica says "Shego why don't you grab Darion and join us. You too Kim."

other than those two slips everything is rather good. i can't wait to see what comes next.
PrincessDushku chapter 5 . 6/15/2007
oh god, you're breaking my heart! They're so beautiful together but well done Lanica for finally putting an ultimatum on them! I love your writing style, it's absolutely gorgeous, really emotional without being overtly sentimental. please update soon- I'm on tenter-hooks! x
time2change chapter 4 . 6/13/2007
oh wow, i'm a little worried about wat kelli may have in mind...i don't know whether i want her to tell or not...but yeah, loving this fic and the angle you're taking with kim and shego's relationship
Daryl chapter 4 . 6/13/2007
i can tell future chapters of this story are going to be very interesting. but only if they are well written. but i have no worries about that since everything i've read so far is well written. incredible story. going straight to my favorites list
Daryl chapter 1 . 6/13/2007
a very tragic, incredible first chapter. if i had a favorite chapter list this would be on it
iluvdomokun chapter 3 . 6/11/2007
such a beautiful story ] keep up the good work its realy touching ]
Chikiko chapter 2 . 6/10/2007
Sad and sweet at the same time. It was really good. quite the lose/lose situation. Makes me wonder how things will work itself out.
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