this was a good story

This story was so adorable, with twists and turns I wasn’t expecting! I love the way the characters were characterized as being mature young adults and not just “teens” or “kids” there was a depth to this story that others wouldn’t really take a second to think about, and I love how they just had normal mundane conversations along with the more heavy and serious ones as well. I’m still upset that nurse didn’t face any consequences for her actions, but this is a fictional story about two superheroes falling in love so I’ll look way past that and focus on how well you made this story flow and how well the dynamic between the team was.

This story is so cute, although after reading that nurse part where she leaks the story about Raven’s medical examination was just horrifying, like I know this is fiction and you wrote her to be sympathetic, but yikes, how could a nurse do that to two minors? And their response is that they don’t care? Good for them, but that was still a crime, a clear violation of HIPPA, and gosh honestly if the nurse did it once she’s likely too again. Idk I still have half the story to go, and I really am enjoying it so far. That nurse is the clear villain to me though imo.

I know you'll never read a comment 17 years later, but whatever. I favorited this story because there was some dialogue that absolutely had me ROARING with laughter. But I felt like it was also lacking in areas. I would have liked more descriptors of character expressions, body language, and thoughts during dialogue. As far as the story line, I wish there had been a conflict between Raven and Beast Boy. They just have the perfect relationship the whole time and the only conflict is from Mike which has almost zero impact on their relationship, and as this is a romance story, it really needs romantic conflict. Also the infertility thing was completely disconnected from the rest of the story. I expected it to be visited again but it wasn't which made it awkward and extremely out of place. Anyway. The dialogue was great. You're obviously very funny.

oh wow, thank you so much for sharing this

I so badly want to give this fic more likes

oh wow, I'm seriously loving how natural and sweetly this is progressing

oh gosh this is so cute. you got me actually giggling out loud. amazing job

I loved this! How cute they're~
I hoped it was longer, but I see there's a sequel so I'm off to reading it!
Thanks for writing this lovely fic!

YES!
Beast boy is adorable and you have no idea how RELIEVED I am that we are NOT getting a makeover.
That trope is tired and old-fashioned, and Raven knows who she is and Beast Boy loves her for it— RESPECT!

Also you have so many funny parts!
I love the part about the little girl sending Beast Boy fan mail lol

-Emma

Okay but the DIALOGUE?
Five stars, man! So good!

I feel like this was written very realistically and all the characters make perfect sense!
Well done, truly. ;)

Also you write great humor.

And Raven? She’s EPIC in this. I absolutely love that she takes the initiative and the WAY she does it is so her!

So many people write her in a way that changes her character or makes her more “palatable” for most people, and to me that’s such a BORE. *snooze*

I love that you keep her cool and intimidating and a chill friend when it comes down to it, and not some emo schoolgirl.

All the characters felt true to the show and act realistically and practically to the situation. Agh, it’s so nice!

Great job, man.

-Emma

This is insannnne! I was actually looking for an old fic about how raven’s dead and turned into a ghost (btw if anyone knows this fic please hmu) but i came across this and realised that this is THE VERY FIRST FIC I READ ON FFNET! I didn’t have an acc at the time so i defo forgot to save this. Omg my mind is blOwn!

This was such a sweet story! I loved the growth in Rae and Gar’s relationship as well as the growth of the team as a whole. The awkwardness of starting a relationship with another friend in same same friend group, especially when said friend group lives together, was on point and all the quiet moments of friendship and relationships were awesome. I also really loved how the story’s POV and how you would use the official names during outside moments and the nicknames during private moments. Thank you so much for sharing!

Nice ending. You should add a part 3.

A follow up review:

I've wondered, would human doctors and nurses know what to do with Starfire? Are veins in the same places? Is a saline solution good or bad for her?