Reviews for Choices
Guest chapter 1 . 12/19/2014
Very good. The emphasis on dialog I feel really shows the tragedy of the situation, because their actions in the room don't really matter.
Qoheleth chapter 1 . 8/7/2010
Dear SuGaRLiLy:

Well, it's official. The strain of coming up with a new one of these every month has loosened my grip on reality, to the point where I genuinely thought it would be entertaining to divide my latest upload into 111-word segments, take the 108th word from each one, and string them together to make your reminder. Mad, I know, but, since I don't have anything more intelligent to suggest, I guess I'll have to go with it.

«of left the I nice more Most the found with in," of over gave eyebrow.»

There. If that doesn't inspire you to finish "Flos Florum", I don't know what will.


q.thews chapter 1 . 1/3/2009
You know, i think it went that way (or something very similar) too.

Reader-Writer chapter 1 . 12/10/2008
The dialouge was well-written, and I actually didn't find it confusing at all. Harry is so cute with his 'SEARUS' thing...

Hmm, with all those 'Serious' jokes out, there could be some jokes about Sea-Sirius too (though that would be kind of... annoying... ahem...)

The ending was kind of quick, but nevertheless good.

So, all in all, you did a good job with this! Congrats, you've won... um, a review?

lilyre chapter 1 . 10/30/2008
wow... ya, that was really wow, because we know what is going to happen... it seemed so carefree, i like the way it is just dialogue it really gives the reader a chance to bend it the way they want it to be, but not in a bad way...
mosco chapter 1 . 8/3/2008
Nice story. It showed a great way of how things could've happened that night. It was written well. Well done.

Moscardini X
riseofafallenangel chapter 1 . 7/1/2008
I liked this. I like how its so brief and casual even though we know what happens after.

I also like how you had James say that he thought Peter would do anything for them. That made it kind of sadder.
Nickasaur chapter 1 . 6/6/2008
Absolutely amazing.

You've molded a conversation to be casual, light-hearted, amusing, and yet so serious and dark.

Combined the horrible outcomes of the war with the laughter and light that daily life still brought about.

You win.

*sticks gold star on forehead*
MyLifeWouldSuckWithoutHeroes chapter 1 . 11/18/2007
aww, this is sweet, sad too tho, can u review my stories pls?

luv ya

Avindara Nirvene chapter 1 . 11/4/2007
Tis lovely - no/dialogue are both good! hehe.

Wonderful description anyway - so sad once you think about it -sniffle-

searus! searus!

Shot in Sarajevo chapter 1 . 10/23/2007
I love stories that are just dialogue. (Unless they're done badly, which this one isn't.) You've done a great job of characterizing everyone; you know exactly who is talking.

“It’s alright, I’ve got him.”

That line just killed me.

Great work.
fragilestrength chapter 1 . 10/6/2007

The perfect way to find out you can do all dialogue perfectly? when a reader reports to you, saying she didn't even notice it was all dialogue until you mentioned it...Which is exactly what I'm about to tell you. D

THAT WAS FANTABULOUS! Such a perfectly done sense of fore-boding; and it DOES make sense. I look your explanation for why Sirius, James and Lily chose Peter over Remus a lot better then J.K's (or at least your implied explanation; that first Voldyshorts would go after Sirius, then REMUS, THEN Peter).

And the dialogue was spot-on, by the by. D

The Happy Eggplant chapter 1 . 7/10/2007
I adore the way Harry says Sirius's name.
The Choco-Holic chapter 1 . 7/6/2007
I don't think it's a good idea to stop the description completely.

In later chapters it'll probably become hard to know who's speaking. Know, it's fine, as the speaker is obviously, but it won't always be. Just say who's speaking.
InkandPaper chapter 1 . 7/5/2007
Whoa, I'm amazed how well you communicated this through just narrative. You can always tell who is speaking, too, which is impressive!

I agree that the implications are much darker and tragic because of what we know; and that's why the style you've chosen works so well. Lighthearted, just like they might organise one of their pranks. Jokey, humorous in parts...and all along we know it was the wrong choice :(

I loved the Cauldron Cakes and tap water line, by the way!
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