Reviews for The Party
starwoods chapter 16 . 10/23/2010
I really liked this story, especially how you did the bonding between BA, EO and MC :) And I love the bets!
kateBA chapter 16 . 6/23/2007
I liked the ending, especially the discussion about the children. At first this seemed like a simple premise to me but it was a great story. The length was just the right length too. I think in your next story you should narrow the scope of the events and work on doing more detailed scenes.
RPM Shadow chapter 16 . 6/23/2007
I loved it!
I-am-LMR chapter 15 . 6/21/2007
Very cute. Sappy is good. I have to say on a personal note that Bobby would never, and I stress *never* allow himself to have a biological child with his schizophrenia genes. But it's a nice thought and adorable. For next time, try to use more descriptions around your dialog, they give you more control over the tone of the story. Thanks.
kateBA chapter 15 . 6/21/2007
I think the same day thing for the proposals was a little rushed. It didn't have to be elaborate for each of them but at least on different days would have been good. The pregnancies were not exactly realistically timed either.
Neverwinternightsgirl777 chapter 14 . 6/19/2007
Ouch for Bobby and Alex. Perfect one for Mike and Carolyn. Eliot and Liv gettin' married? Ya got my attention!
RPM Shadow chapter 14 . 6/18/2007
Getting good. Getting good!
I-am-LMR chapter 14 . 6/18/2007
Only Bobby would make a blunder like that! Thanks for the cute!
noro chapter 14 . 6/18/2007
keep going great chapter update soon
Serienjunkie 91 chapter 13 . 6/18/2007
Great chappie!

The Mominator chapter 13 . 6/17/2007
Thanks for the Sunday afternoon read. I enjoyed it.
I-am-LMR chapter 13 . 6/17/2007
Funny, thanks.
kateBA chapter 13 . 6/17/2007
I liked the premise of this story, it's very nice and lighthearted. I liked the idea of planning a party. I thought that you rushed through the party scene. You were building the reader up to this party and then we hardly got to see anything. The basketball game was nice, but I seriously doubt that even with underhanded play the girls would have won against the guys. I think they had a more likely chance of winning at pool. I loved the bets that they were placing on each other. This isn't the only story where the captains seem to be having fun at the detectives' expense. As for the document and Carver, I don't know if involving Carver is the right way to go. He is obviously an expert in legal matters but it's strictly an NYPD situation. It would have been more realistic if Deakens went to the Chief of D's himself. Just a quick note, you should check over your chapters after you spell check them. The spellchecker is picking the wrong words defiantly instead of definitely.
Serienjunkie 91 chapter 11 . 6/17/2007
First I thought: Please don't let her get them all together in on chapter, because these are often weird but you did it really good.

Great chapter.
Serienjunkie 91 chapter 8 . 6/17/2007
That's really bad to make fun of them because of their height. I think I'm as short as Alex or Caar, but I don't really know how great 5'2 means.

Loved as Alex said to Bobby that she could easily run through his legs.
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