|Reviews for Whirling Sands|
| DetectiveTective chapter 5 . 8/18/2007
Hey, I just wanna point out, your fighting scene was NOT bad! (It's better than what I could ever do!) It could use some work here and there, but it's still very good! Though I will say that your chapter was WAY too short. You got too many ideas in your head to make short chapter such as these! Take your time... as a matter of fact, don't take your time...write down ideas of what you want in the next chapter. Then try to stretch it out in a long-enough chapter. Hang in tough, gal. I know how it feels when you take a vacation and you take too long writing stories. Don't panic! It helps. TRUST ME! I spent a MONTH trying to write the third chapter of MY story! All in all, this was one of the best stories in MY eyes...and favorites list. hahaha
| DetectiveTective chapter 3 . 8/18/2007
Great chapter! This one was really funny. Me likey likey! That's it...
| DetectiveTective chapter 1 . 8/18/2007
This first chapter is astonishing. I love it. You DEFINITELY can write something really good! I'm gonna look at your other chapters too! I hope you finish this story soon. By the way, what's a cliffhanger? Is that like, something suspenseful at the end? If so, I sorta like them too! P.S. It would kinda help describe the places a bit more. Not to get into too much detail, but enough to have the reader get a good understanding. Like, for example, Tsunade's office. The description was good, but you could probably put something funny in there, like, paperwork stacked 6 feet high, or, possibly, she had a lot of bright light coming in the room, etc
| Maki-Zushi chapter 3 . 6/27/2007
This is good! Continue!
| UtawarerumonoXanime chapter 2 . 6/20/2007
Great Story, can't wait for the next chapter. My cat loved it too! lol 8)
| Vince from Shamwow chapter 2 . 6/14/2007
Very cute. Update!
| Vince from Shamwow chapter 1 . 6/14/2007
sounds cute. update.