|Reviews for Kindred Spirits|
| LoS chapter 13 . 8/21/2015
Uuuh too bad you interrupted this story :( it's really amazing
| Ylaya chapter 13 . 1/30/2014
This fanfic is nothing short of wonderful and I really got into it, the way you captured Zaknafein is just so... perfect, fitting. Seeing that the last update for this story was uploaded in 2009 I kind of doubt it that you'll even read this but if you do I hope, with all my heart, that you will continue writing it and, possibly, finish it. It hurts to be left hanging like this you know, especially when it simply drives you crazy to learn more about a story as good as this one.
| san-san chapter 13 . 10/23/2010
Wow what a great story! Please continue this! It was so easy to get sucked into the story and the characters are great! The Artemis/Zak pairing is better than I anticipated. They are indeed so much much alike - and so beautiful and sensual :) I hope Jarlaxle's plan works out for them. They deserve more happiness. As for the wicked Kimmuriel... Well, he is kind fun. He's soooo sooo very evil. HAHA. I especially like how Jarlaxle enjoys out-thinking him :) Like a sport! Please please please continue this!
| Aiqy chapter 13 . 6/1/2010
I only just realized that I never wrote a review here, even after I had discovered that here’s a chapter more than on LE…
So I do it now, just to let you know that there’s still someone out here waiting for you to continue :)
I can’t wait to know what Jarlaxle is planning this time!
~Aiqy (alias Melee)
| Fantomefumee chapter 1 . 5/18/2010
Okay, usually I'm an awful lurker, and my english is ugly, but I think the whole afternoon I spent reading your fic deserves a comment .
If someone had said me I would love a ZakXEntreri fanfiction, I wouldn't have believed it : I don't really like Entreri, and I despise Zak but... Well... I just love the way you write Zak, and you made me love him...
So... Well, I'm not good at comment, but, just to say, I loved this one, and thanks .
| Lessiehanamoray chapter 13 . 8/28/2009
I love your fun orientated Jarlaxle and you did a marvelous job of making me want to smack Drizzt. The fact that Zak didn't means he has more control than he lets on.
| amlugwen chapter 13 . 8/20/2009
awesome! again and still :)
Zak behaving like Drizzt, creepy... if only imagination (Artemis has a weird imagination)
yes, Drizzt would have had a heartattack *evil snicker*
oh no, what will they do? but i like the tension you brought into the lovestory now what will they do? there is nothing between surface and underdark - they won't part ways, will they? does Jarlaxle have a plan? (me clueless)
if Zaknafein knew Drizzt is now target of his 'friends' and Jarlaxle has a plan, oh no... again ;9
| RonCN chapter 13 . 8/5/2009
I'm so glad to see a new chapter!
Again, I think it is great. I liked the "crisis management" done by our two guys: they can't do fluff, but you still managed to portray a really tender moment by focusing on their determination to be together. And you took the chace to poke some "fun" at Drizzt - Zaknafein trying to live like him, indeed... Highly enjoyable.
My favorite part though must be the "behind the scenes: plotting" You trio of lieutenants is so deliciously devious and twisted and drow, while at the same time being coherent and driven and... and... well, I think you get the point :) I really admire your dark Kimmuriel!
And what can I say about your Jarlaxle? I could almost see him pacing about and then grinning manically while the light bulb went off on his head... It is amusing and it is Jarlaxle through and through, and I am really, really curious to know just what brilliant plot he has come up with now!
Please, keep the story in progress; and thanks for sharing!
| Neo-anon chapter 13 . 8/1/2009
Absolutely awesome. I can't wait for the next chapter... ohohoho. ;)
| Nuitari Aquarius chapter 13 . 7/30/2009
He chuckled and silently congratulated himself on another stroke of genius.
Why do I feel YOU could have said that while writing? :p Smells like a good idea to keep on writing this story .
But that's not the point of my review. I really liked this chapter, for the 'special' relationship between Zaknafein and Artemis is growing stronger; they're not simple rivals anymore. That's really curious about them, but, yeah, they're falling in love. And you make that credible. I mean, Zaknafein and Artemis in love, that's not the easiest scenario ever. At all. So congratulations.
And now, I am really curious about Jarlaxle's plan. What's in his mind?
So... thank you for this damned cliffhanger. Can't wait!
Update soon or you're dead XD.
| singvogel chapter 13 . 7/29/2009
Gahhah it's finished! And I like it :) I still have no idea how Artemis and Zak could ever overcome the problem of their very different preferences, but maybe I should leave that to Jarlaxle. He seems to have everything in hand. The last two bits had me smiling. It was kinda like: Ah well I have to keep the children occupied, before they can seriously hurt someone.
And I just love Kimmuriel :)
| Ziggy Sternenstaub chapter 13 . 7/29/2009
I wasn't expecting this to appear until at least a week or so from now, so let me just say that it
was a delight to see the 'New Chapter' announcement make my inbox this evening! Let's just hope
that I am able to sufficiently evaluate your work. :)
First off I would say that I agree with the length. Ending with Jarlaxle scheming and apparently
arriving at a solution to the myriad problems which becomes clear in this chapter seemed
appropriate. And I'm not just saying that because I really wanted to read more KS. ;)
The writing is smooth, but I would say that the dialogue could have done with a more thorough
beta. I could see that your beta had only given it a quick glance. I'd say that if this happens again
you might want to have another person give it a second look.
Now to the story!
The sun was already rising when Zaknafein sneaked back into the tavern room they had rented
earlier that night.
Aww, you know the proper past tense of 'sneak.' I love you!
“I didn’t expect you to come back,” Artemis said, his back turned to Zaknafein. He sounded
surprisingly awake, as if he hadn‘t slept at all, but at the same time quiet and almost uncaring.
I like that this is cold, but not too cold. An excessively hostile reaction would suggest a level of
hysteria not native to Entreri. That he is already bracing himself for abandonment demonstrates
both his lonely past, but also his strength, his ability to carry on even in the face of potential
heartbreak. And also avoids making him sound like a clingy girl. ;P
Zaknafein flinched in surprise. There was no sarcasm in Artemis’ voice, and the thought that
the assassin really meant his words made him shiver. He didn’t know what to say, so he
remained silent, waiting for Artemis to explain himself.
Nice. Again, we see vulnerability, but quietly, guardedly. Zaknafein is aware that he might have
hurt his lover and dislikes the notion, but he's also unlikely to breakdown any time soon.
"He said exactly what you told me he‘d say.” Zaknafein made a pause, his eyes never leaving
Artemis‘. “It doesn’t change anything about us.”
Nice. The situation is almost completely resolved with just these few words. Nicely reflects the
terse, outwardly stoic nature of both characters.
The drow was by now quite capable of reading Artemis’ often hidden invitations and moved
into the offered embrace. Resting his head against the human’s chest he sighed.
That's just...um. A very, very pretty picture. Zak being cuddled by Artemis. Aw.
(Excuse while I go commit ritualistic suicide for my shame).
“I’m glad to see that he hasn’t lost his principles, but he confuses me. He talks, he behaves like
a human. In a bad way,”
This is a bit of rough dialogue. "In a bad way" sounds very simplistic, child-like. You might
want to go back and re-phrase it.
Artemis snorted, but he tightened his embrace in what could only be described as a possessive
This is adorable! (Where did I put my katana, again?)
“I would be surprised if you did. I told you you’re nothing like him.”
Not wanting to confirm nor deny that, Zaknafein simply said, “He was quite appalled that I
won’t stay with him on the surface.”
Interesting how even Zaknafein can have a bit of tact! He knows that he does have at least a few
things in common with Drizzt, so he just lets it slide so as not to upset his lover. I like how
you're showing their rapport, their growing affection, in these small gestures, instead of
descending into mush. Nicely done!
He snickered even more when Zaknafein punched him lightly in the side.
I really, really like this. A nicely masculaine, testosterone-fuelled bit of playful agression. There
should be more of such things in slash. Kudos to you.
“As if I needed my son’s approval. He almost fell over when I said I liked you; he probably
would have died if I had told him all about us.”
Again, this dialogue is very American English colloquial. I like the sentiment, but it should be
stated slightly differently.
“Don’t worry. Since I insisted that I had to keep an eye on you for Jarlaxle he extended that
invitation to you.”
Hee. And how many lemons would I have to eat before my expression approached Drizzt's while
he was extending that invitation?
Artemis couldn’t have been more surprised if Gromph Baenre had asked him to come over for
a cup of tea.
I like this because it makes reference to a comparison relevent within the world of the story. It
grounds us as readers more deeply in the narrative and aids in the suspension of disbelief.
“What about harming him?” Artemis asked nonchalantly, unsurprisingly earning a glare from
You're still walking the line between Zaknafein's shock at Drizzt's new life, and his very real
love for his son. It's good that you remind the reader that his affection and concern and both
genuine-despite your own dislike for the character.
“And although he is a curious brat, I doubt that he will check if we really use both of them.
Ahah, a curious brat. And that is exactly how he would remember Drizzt. We must also consider
that Zak still thinks of his son, even if unconsciously, as someone extremely young- if
precocious-even younger than he still is. And in fact possibly might underestimate him-which
could lead to some trouble here.
“You told him that you would return to Menzoberranzan,” he said quietly.
This was the perfect time to bring up this issue. Just as it was starting to look too idyllic for both
of them, the problem of Drizzt becomes real, and now we are confronted with the fact that
neither is comfortable in the other's world! That they have very real problems to face garners
reader sympathy and prevents their union from being too easy, too predictable.
“We could work as mercenaries … There are regions where nobody cares what you are as
long as you get the job done. Where even we could find a challenge or two,” Artemis
suggested, but he knew that it was not what Zaknafein wanted. The drow hated everything about
the surface, the sun, the weather, the noise, the population … Giving him something to do
would not change that.
You worked this reference to the canon future for Jarlaxle and Artemis in nicely. An effective
Seeing that Artemis realised this himself Zaknafein did not bother to reply, but simply
embraced him and held him tight.
Again you've effectively demonstrated that both characters are generally silent-and that their
likeness of mind and increasing closeness are able to convey their feelings without the use of
A wonderful little plotting session with the drow back home in Menzoberranzan, and you demonstrate their cleverness by having them expose the weakness in Jarlaxle's instructions. I like how you show their callousness through their conversation-they refer to Zaknafein, Drizzt, and Artemis as things rather than as people.
And ending with the pupper master! Who admittedly might not always have all of his strings in order, but who will no doubt quickly take command once more. I can't wait to see how the plans of Kimmuriel, Rai'gy and Berginyon will unfold, and what Jarlaxle will do about them.
| Pen-Name-Kitsune-chan chapter 13 . 7/29/2009
Please update soon!
| Adia chapter 13 . 7/29/2009
Well, this update just made my morning :) Yay! This was a shorter chapter which was a pity (because I always want more!), but I think it was necessary as it was pulling together a lot of strands needed for the next parts of the story.
The Artemis and Zak scene was rather lovely and I especially like that you brought in some additional conflict into their relationship.
And, I LUV YOU JARLAXLE 3 Hehe, I really, really like that you have him (and Kimmuriel & Co.) plotting away in the background. Especially Jarlaxle since he is playing matchmaker. 3
| dlraist chapter 12 . 6/20/2009
Update, please. I love this story. Artemis Entrei was always one of my favorite character's, and when I saw this pairing I just had to read it. The story was really good and I want to read more!