|Reviews for Clip my Wings|
| Guest chapter 8 . 1/3
is it me or hinata realy look phatetic in this story and neji being OOC he look stupjd when he scold hinata gey mad at her then offer her a piggy back ride then hinata getting angry in neji but when he offer her a piggy back ride she accept like nothing happend ?
WTF ?! gomen but it really is confusing on how neji and hinata act in this story
| usagkawaii chapter 1 . 6/23/2013
AHHHH, where are the other chapters? :( I absolutely love this fic, and I'm sad to see it end. But I don't really expect another chapter after like 6 years. x) But I won't complain, because you might be dead and that would make all of this really awkward...
| DanBrownfan chapter 13 . 6/9/2013
Waaaa I read and It gets better!
| Zerrrrrobi chapter 27 . 6/9/2013
I enjoyed this story a lot, although I have some complaints. I would have loved if the story simply remained a childhood/early adolescence, light romance, without anything serious like sex/pregnancy/wedding, especially since Neji and Hinata are only 14 and 13 in this story (alright I could have agreed with the smut though).
After they had sex, everything became too dramatic and somewhat out of place and especially Hiashi was somewhat out of character. Hiashi is a restrained man and he would never barge like that and yell in public, so that everyone would hear that his daughter is pregnant. He wouldn't make a scene like that, he would just call Hinata (and Neji) in private and ask them about it.
The parts after the sex were almost like a soap opera, but I still loved how the bond between Neji and Hinata was portrayed.
I think my favorite parts of the story would have to be the scene where Neji teaches Hinata how to stand on the surface of the lake and the scene where she dances in the rain, before he kisses her.
Those were nostalgic and almost dreamlike, so simple and pure and the same time.
I would have loved if the entire story remained just a repressed, sort of sad, forbidden romance between two people who've went through so much pain and hate together, who eventually slowly fell in love, but were too restrained to go further. That would have been typical for both Neji and Hinata.
Still, I enjoyed the story nonetheless. And I truly hope you will find your time to update this, although I highly doubt it, given that there are 6 years since this story was updated.
| aurora0914 chapter 27 . 6/3/2013
NOOO! They should do it, but make it so no one finds out! Plz update, this is a great fanfic. But 6 years have passed! Where are you? This is a very loved fanfic, and you've abandoned it! Shame on you!
| aurora0914 chapter 17 . 6/3/2013
how old are they, out of curiosity?
| Haruka Uzumaki21 chapter 27 . 5/8/2013
great chapter can't wait to read more next time.
| Goofy Hubby chapter 10 . 1/22/2013
You flip flopped on this ! You said that they completed the chunnin exams in the beginning. But besides that the story was very well written.
| luv-u-alwayz94 chapter 27 . 12/22/2012
Please update its been 5yrs since youve updated this fic :-$
| construct. crit chapter 27 . 12/21/2012
When I first started reading 'Clip my Wings', I thought it was off to a very promising start, unlike most of the NejiHina stories that fill the archive. Your descriptions were decent, character analysis was accurate, and the plot itself was believable and engaging. But then...later on it felt like something just slipped. I've noticed that throughout the story, your spelling still remained the same (don't you have spellcheck?), and your author's notes at the top and bottom of each chapter often distracted me. I'm not trying to be rude, but they are rather irrelevant to the story itself.
I don't know if you plan to continue this fic or not, seeing as it's been five years, but hopefully the next time you update (if you do), we'll see better results as a writer from you. Decent story overall though.
| green-mao chapter 27 . 11/24/2012
My dear favorite writer Melanie... it's sad that it seems you have dropped your beautiful fic since it has not been updated for 5 years already. :( But I am still hoping (but it's such a slim chance)... I hope nothing bad has happened to you... You are a good writer and i hope you would finish this and make more wonderful fanfics or maybe stories of your own and be rest assured that i will pleasantly read them... sentiments from a sad reader. T_T
| alysha.a.kent chapter 27 . 8/29/2012
I love your work! i can't wait for you to put out a new chapter! i hope that you can do it really soon!
| ShinigamiRiku chapter 1 . 8/4/2012
ohh i love it
| kandita chapter 27 . 6/2/2012
I liked this s lot. It's a pity Neji are Hinata and Hanabi didn't kill Hiashi and those annoying council members I truly hate them
Please update soon it's five years already...it's way OVERDUE to be updated :)
| super love chapter 27 . 1/27/2012
This is actually a really cute story. A few errors here and there but nothing really big. As for the reactions of hinata's and neji's friends to their relationship, I would say that some of their friends are very stupid. This is a couple that actually makes more sense given their background, family values and traditions and what not regardless if one thinks it is incest. This couple is more likely to happen given the rules of naruto world. Pure bloodline. Duh. Age wise, they are young but given their choice of occupation they don't exactly have a long life expectancy. Look at obito. He got owned by a rock. What was he 10 or something years old. Look at Tsunade's kid brother, her fiancee, and the 4th hokage. All dead. Death rate is like 99% or something in their world. So their friends being disgusted with hinata's and neji's relationship is a bit strange. It is something neji and hinata shouldn't be really doing at their age, but it shouldn't be such a big deal to the point of being ostracized. Still a good story. I really hope you find your inspiration to finish off the last chapter even though this is also a good chapter to end off from but you just had to tease your readers with one last chapter so now your readers are waiting.