|Reviews for Broken Mirror|
| Sora Tayuya chapter 9 . 11/11/2010
Well, this promises to look lively, the chapter length looks heavenly long. Excellent. So Demy is looking for the mirror, no surprise there. Of course…where would one find this mirror on this side of the world? …and I really, REALLY doubt that Dem can convince an angered/depressed/vendetta-filled Larxene AND Xigbar that he is actually the good Demyx. Especially Xiggy…oh gods…Luxord…
Oh…right…Marly’s death would have such an effect on Larxene…well, I am really liking the extreme emotional outburst here, their sadness, and pain is practically saturating the air with its fury. Awesome details, or at least, Feel.
Oh dear, what is Zexion doing?...well, this is actually bad in a sense, now if EvilDemyx comes back…well, I’ll try not to think about that.
This is cool…yet bad at the same time. Great that Zexion believes Demyx…bad that the only people who could possibly help him are actually all terrifyied of him…hate him…or want to kill him. Actually…everyone wants to kill him. Even his own subordinates…and heck, to top off his bad luck, I bet that if EvilSora finds Demyx, that he will be one of the few people to actually believe that this isn’t EvilDemyx and decide to try and kill him too. Oh goody, as Dem would say.
Hey, negative fire is cool. But…oh, poor Demy. He REALLY doesn’t belong in this dimension. Even though Zexion is the only one who will believe him for now…still, Demy is in SO much danger…aw…
This is an interesting moment with Luxord. Pondering where the Org is going to go, and how they have been and whatnot.
Hmm…this was a very interesting thing going on here with Luxord and Xigbar. I think that Xigbar suspects that Xemnas has finally lost it, huh? Oh dear…even if it’s true, it is a worrying thought.
Awww…that scene with Zexion arguing with Demyx really proved that Demyx is GoodDemyx…and it was really sad, all of the things that Zexion said to Dem. But…it was so true, it was wonderfully put. Great scene. The ending was really, really sweet though. Still…Zexion makes perfect points. This type of dictator situation…is exactly what Zex described. This is really, REALLY bad…Oh Demy so doesn’t deserve this…I mean, and now EvilDemyx is wrecking havoc on Demy’s world too…so now the whole thing has gone off-canon…so funky-ness is happing…oh…
Axel…hey! It’s Axel, good to see him! But…oh no…gods…Oh NO…no no no no NONO! OH GODS NO….EvilDemyx…oh no…oh…and Axel actually WAS the one to kill Zexion…so this…this is really…REALLY bad…
0.o OH. MY. GODS. The mirror…HUZZAH!HALLEJULAH! Erm…kinda. Oh no. Now NormalAxel is stuck (totally going to be confused) in EvilDemyx’s world with GoodDemyx…oh dang, this is really bad.
Worst. The mirror is busted now. This…this is very bad. Very. VERY. Bad.
Thank you kindly for the update, of course now that you have renewed my interest in this story, I am much more intrigued for an update again soon than I was previously.
| Shadowsonicstar chapter 9 . 11/9/2010
oh my god. This is amazing as usual :D I seriously had to do a double take when I saw this in my email alert though since its been so long since an update, but I'm glad you did _ I can't wait to read what happens next! Keep up the great work :D
| Sora Tayuya chapter 8 . 7/1/2010
I kinda thought that it was Sora who screamed when Xaldin was…well…
This cannot be a good thing for Roxas’ mental state… plus, it’s Demyx of all people. DEMYX. That sweet, almost lovable sitar-player who denied missing a heart sometimes and liked to rant to people about funny stuff, who liked to pull pranks on other members, who Liked his dysfunctional family… If I just witnessed my friend murdering my other friends like that (if, you know, they were from another dimension) I’d… well, whatever Roxas’ reaction is, I’d probably do.
Oh…and in the evil dimension Sora is a bad person too…so…it’s actually a good thing that Evil-Demyx realizes this by now, or else it would be awkward…but, how will he go about this since he knows where he is (or at least can fathom a guess)…?
I really like hearing Roxas talk, and the way you are saying it is perfect as well. All of your character actions and descriptions (minus the obviously hinted pairings) are extremely canon-based. Excellent. Of course, I would not be writing this part-by-part review if I didn’t already realize this fact. I only review in this fashion when I immensely enjoy the thorough and complete character-likeness in a story.
…oh! I just realized it. The only person (who Evil-Demyx probably won’t end up killing just because he’s technically Sora) who can let others know that this monstrosity before them ISN’T the real Demyx is Roxas, why didn’t I realize this sooner? I didn’t think about this option, but it is a remarkable one at that, and good.
…so, in the evil version of the world, …oh, let me guess, it is Roxas who wields the Keyblade and not Sora? That is why Sora had all of those knives and other…apparel, right? Strange, but, effective I must say. …*takes a moment to ponder a fact* … … … Oh, how in *Beep* does Evil-Demyx have the Keyblade? Stranger and stranger…
…Oh, I had almost forgotten for a moment that people from different dimensions are supposed to be opposites. So, in the Other world, Sora is the Nobody? That would explain why he was working for Demyx…he might have been Number Thirteen. Well…this is really, REALLY bad.
Oh…after hearing that in the Other world that Lux is dead… gods, I don’t think that I can handle dictator Demyx coming after each of the Org.’s remaining members and killing them again. Especially not Lux…
*After screaming very loudly in horror and attempting to swear throughout my house for about 10 minutes in denial, I finally return to see the fate of my dear Gambler of Fate and almost tear up again*
…it’s Xigbar, it’s gotta be…he couldn’t save him in the other world, so he could save him here, thank the gods…(plus that comment about Luxord being stalked a bit by the sniper)…and it turns out to be Xigbar, thankfully…
This was marvelously played out, a true work if I dare utter the words. I rarely give this praise to an author-person, because most plots are not this well thought-out or meticulous in their own right.
Hm…before I read further, from Xigbar showing Luxord the Proof of Existence room, he was there, saw the damage that Demyx had done (not necessarily knowing that evil-Demyx was the culprit), figured that someone was hunting down the members, and decided to keep a watch on his good buddy the Gambler (thank the gods for that). Oh, and do I detect a touch of symbolism with a bit of Luxord’s not being entirely destroyed?
…oh…Xemnas isn’t going to be interested in finding out that Saix is…well…
Oh…so Xemnas himself must have found out first-hand then…that is always the worst, when the others ask about the missing people and they are…
The worst part of this “destroying the Organization to get back at Zexion’s murderer” is that the guy who killed Zexion has kind of, well, yes, disappeared. I mean, by now there is only Xemnas, Xigbar, Demyx, and Luxord left in the Org. now that Axel’s gone and run off…so… *the bleakness of this moment hits me at this point*…oh…
…a thought, a horrible, insidious thought just occurred to me. If, in Our world, Luxord was saved by Xigbar and not killed, and in the other world he was killed, then… what if in Our world, Xigbar is going to be the first to…die…?
The ending is very ominous. So…I’m going to venture a suggestion and suppose that Larxene misses Marluxia, right? Well, then I’m going to venture another thought, not very pleasant but a very, realistic one, considering their world. Probably…those four, Zexion, Larxene, Xigbar, and Axel…they’re the only ones left after Demyx…right…? That’s…horrible…
But, that leads another thought to come to mind. Since they are going to go and Hunt and Kill Evil-Demyx, what happens when they find Our Demyx? …my hopeful theory is that someone in either world can find that blasted mirror before the escapees get to Demyx, so that they can kill the real Evil-Demyx and not the nicer one. Otherwise, well, I’ll not mention what could otherwise happen…
Well, it hasn’t Quite been a year yet. You still have about 17 days until a full year, so I am seriously hoping for an update soon. It seems to be a bit long overdue, unfortunately. Though, with this writing style, it is perfectly understandable that you would need some amount of time and/or concentration to be able and focus on this. I do hope that you can get more out, and soon.
| Sora Tayuya chapter 7 . 7/1/2010
The worst part is, I suppose, about Evil-Demyx being in Our world, that the Org. members consider him a ally, and of a certain, well, “peg”. This evil version of the calm, happy-go-lucky and innocent Nocturne has the perfect cover to easily utilize the element of surprise on the fellow members. It is frighteningly well thought-out and planned. And…has he killed Xaldin as well in his world? Gosh…
And, of course the evil version would get it quickly, though I give credit to the good version for figuring it out as well, though mainly it was through others telling him about “his” previous actions. The evil version always figures it out on their own, they are just normally smarter than their counterparts, or more quick-to-the-chase I should say.
…he killed Xaldin… … …
…oh dear…so, Saix is just is delusional…
Oh gods…that evil version is just going to keep killing off members one-by-one, isn’t he?...
| Sora Tayuya chapter 6 . 6/30/2010
*Stricken with shocked horror/sadness*
Oh gods… that *Beeping* Demyx killed Luxord…
*Many silence stricken minutes into the Proof of Existence scene*
…oh Xigbar…I actually…cried. Seriously, Cried as I slowly read this. Xemnas I could do without, Saix yes I do feel bad for… but Luxord? Oh gods Luxord…
*After a few minutes taken to recover the reader-person’s composure*
So…Evil-Demyx has at least figured out that things are different. He still doesn’t know as a fact that he is in an alternate world, so that is bad. Of course, he doesn’t care. Darn. Oh, and he’s going to kill Axel, *sarcastically* wonderful.
And I’m just That much scared of Evil-Demyx. Again.
Time to see if Saix will wake up, considering that Sora is the only guy who would actually save him, and only because he is totally busted up right now. Those are the only two reasons they helped Saix. Of course, now how does Saix feel about this once he regains consciousness I would like to know…
Hm…before Saix wakes up and begins going Berserker or something, I just thought of something. Perhaps he will realize that that evil…THING is Not my- I mean, our dear Demyx, and that it is an evil, conniving, self-adoring psychotic maniac from another dimension and let our dear friends the Restoration Committee and Sora know that. Hopefully. Otherwise…Saix would have a great time getting rid of an annoyance by throwing an enraged Cloud on the Good-Demyx if he ever returns…
Oooh, so a bit of Roxas resurfaces again…interesting…well, I hadn’t thought of that. That actually Could help get Saix to cooperate. …unfortunately, that is one of two of the only reasons he Would cooperate. Seriously, this is the possibly Worst member of Org. XIII that the Restoration Committee and Sora’s gang could have to deal with right now…jeez…
And, the strange image Sora is seeing, it may be when Roxas beat Saix on his way to leave the Org.’s castle. Of course, since that was Disney influenced, there was no blood or anything, but I bet that if Nobodies bleed (which is a popular theory, I know) that there Should have been a lot more bloodshed. Ouch. I actually feel…well, bad for Saix right now. Imagine that.
| Sora Tayuya chapter 5 . 6/30/2010
Oh wow…well, Demyx has a big problem. He’s obviously not as strong as his doppelganger, so that is bad when (yes, “when”, not “if”) they catch him and find out that he’s the “goody-goody” side.
And wow this entire scene with Cloud…and then Sora bringing in Saix and all, well, that was Very unexpected, to say the least…and amazingly in-character. All of the people have been thoroughly in-character, so I’m very excited to be reading this.
I really, really enjoyed this chapter, even with the mounting tension with discovering about Demyx. I really don't know how anyone can figure out the truth, they are just too different in their leagues of power (or at least skill. Good-Demyx Could be that good, he's just not actively trying to hurt anybody).
| Sora Tayuya chapter 4 . 6/30/2010
Woah. Okay, now I am Totally scared out of my mind of Evil-Demyx. He totally whipped Saix…SAIX,the Berserker…wow…
And Riku? Oh no…
Now, Larxene is…tamed? Oh gosh…how saddened is this world? This is all of my sincerity talking here, I’m actually serious for once. This is scary, downright frightening to read this, and whatever monster Demyx is on the “Other side”.
(Though, I like how he re-styled the entire Castle to be like his element.)
And poor Demy…he really is smarter than people give him credit for, huh? He gets that no matter what he does in this messed up world (that HE created apparently), he will be thought of as the enemy, well, because he IS the enemy, sort of. Oh jeez…this is horrible, Demyx doesn’t deserve this. The poor kid…
Others…? Oh no…just how many has Evil-Demyx killed? …well, enough to “tame” Larxene, and that Is a feat, a very, Very scary one at that. And now Xemnas and Saix are dead in that messed up world too, huh? At least he didn’t kill the Saix from Our world…gosh, if others don’t figure out that the Demyxs’ are mixed up, then there are going to be BIG problems….
| Sora Tayuya chapter 3 . 6/30/2010
Well, I was very worried about Leon there for a moment, and now I am very disturbed by the hintings of the world order back in the evil Demyx version world. And...if Evil-Demyx is That powerful...well, that is bad. Really bad. Especially when the Other-peoples find out that Nice-Demyx is there...
Oh, and I'm officially terrified of Evil-Sora.
| Sora Tayuya chapter 2 . 6/30/2010
Wow. This was...amazing. This is really, really well written.
The only thing that I can comment on is that (I don't know if you meant to and the button just didn't work or something or not) it would be a lot easier if you could Italicize the people's inner thoughts. Otherwise, this was really a wonderful read-through. I enjoyed it throughly.
| Sora Tayuya chapter 1 . 6/30/2010
Well, this sounds rather good, actually. Your writing style is very nice, good work. I don't read a lot of literal alternate universe stories, so I suppose that this is a good one to start off with.
I like how you used the song "My Sitar". It is such a strange, disterbing song, but the lyrics are Demyx's to a "T".
That sounds like Leon, and I feel really, really bad for Demyx getting sucked into this alternate dimension now.
Poor Zexion...it sounds like he's caged up. Oh dear...
Oh, and I read that you said that the people from Oblivion are supposed to be dead right now, but as I have read so far (as I write this I have already read the second chapter) I don't see how you can edit it to fix that loophole. I don't really care, because I like this plot though.
| Shadowsonicstar chapter 8 . 1/18/2010
~squee update! Please ignore the fact I finally noticed this got updated months later I can't believe that I had this on my favorites list but never the alert Anyways, great job as always :)
| Shining Sunny chapter 8 . 12/28/2009
Thank you for making this story. I couldn't stop laughing at the absurdity throughout the story. And, because of you, Demyx just became a new favorite character of mine. Again thank you for that enjoyment and I hope to see more someday.
| zeppelin13 chapter 7 . 8/26/2008
This is interesting. Please update! ]
| Sahxyel chapter 7 . 10/9/2007
Ho snap! This updated?
Wow...the evil emyx KILLED Xaldin. And Xaldin is, in my opinion, one of the strongest Organization Members too. Man, I can just imagine how bad Axel will get it when 'Demyx' finds out that he was the one who sic'ed Replica Riku on poor defenseless Zexy.
...Ah well, he deserves it. *insert evil smile*
You know, oddly enough, I felt sorry for Saix. And Xaldin. Who will be next in the senseless bloodshed? *hugs Luxord and Xigbar*
| The Reaver of Souls chapter 7 . 10/9/2007
SQUE! YOU FINALLY UPDATED!
I've been so looking forward to this chapter and you haven't disappointed me. Plz update very soon coz I wanna know what gonna happen with the other Demyx.