Reviews for Deceitful Above All Things
XaldinIII chapter 1 . 1/14/2011
Nice. Although I really, REALLY wish you'd broken it up a little. For me, a oneshot equalled readitallinonesitting... I had no excuse to stop reading so I didn't until I finished!

Great story!
KnightlyLady chapter 1 . 10/26/2010
Um... You rock. Hardcore. I have never seen Axel characterized so beautifully. Just...chronically deceitful and unable to regret it, but still so *Axel* and funny in his diseased sort of way... And I love how this was mostly an angst-y fic(?) but incredibly damn amusing at the same time. I really can't believe this isn't more popular, because it's BEAUTIFUL. The dynamics between all of the members and the timeline and the Roxas and his porn magazine-it was wonderful. That scene was freaking awesome, by the way. Just the way everything was phrased... I laughed my ass off XD

This: "...gripping the coffee mug like he was trying to absorb the caffeine through his skin..."

And this: "Roxas, man, chill out," Axel said, thinking, okay, so this is why everyone calls him my wife..."

Pure win, that bit, lol.

And then it all kind of goes downhill (in a good way(?) though), and Axel is his snarky, observant self all the way to the end. It's taken me forever (I mean, forever. Like, weeks, and in those weeks I have perused almost everything on your profile and said nothing because I'm just a jerk like that, even though ALL of it is fantastic and deserves a lot more love than it's received) to write this thing, because I just don't know how to best express how wonderful this really is. I don't want to submit it because it's just not adequate. And I feel like I'm not mentioning the stuff that matters, and... Yeah.

So, I'm going to put me out of my misery, stop staring forlornly at this little screen that happens to pop up every time I open my browser, and end this with: You're an extremely talented writer and this story is breathtaking. Or something along those lines but possibly less corny.
Nocturnal Smile chapter 1 . 10/1/2010
This is gorgeous. I feel like I've been punched in the gut in the best way possible. Gah, I don't even know where to begin. Your imagery is incredible, so breathtakingly beautiful and it conveyed so much; it wasn't just beautiful for the sake of beauty, it really got you inside the mind of Axel. Speaking of which, I love how you wrote him: capricious and aware of it, I think this is the best characterization of him that I've ever read. The fact that I knew it wasn't going to end happily just added another layer of poignancy to the whole thing. I thought I couldn't love this any more than I already did, and then I got to the part where you included Pablo Neruda and was proven wrong.

Thank you, thank you so much for writing this. I wish I could favorite it more than once, it's definitely become one of the favorites of my favorites. I must go check out the rest of your stories now.
Canadino chapter 1 . 9/16/2010
Why did I just stay up to read this beautiful work of art. I wish I could write movingly like this.
Through These Eyes chapter 1 . 8/19/2010
So, I love this. That's really all there is to it. I started reading this at like 10:30 this morning (it's now 10:30 pm XD) had to leave for a while, and felt antsy all day because something about this just caught me. It really gives me a whole new perspective of Axel... But anyway, this is amazing, and even though it was written a while ago, I still felt the need to review it because I liked it that much.

Adjuel chapter 1 . 8/6/2010
I don't know where to begin. I was searching around for a good 8059 story and ran across 'The Keeper.' I was intrigued by the story, but it was late and I didn't want to stay to long so I decided to read one of your shorter stories. Somehow I got distracted by the links on your profile and I stared looking at the fanart people made for your fics. I clicked on amphiboly picture for 'My Girlfriend, Who Lives In Canada.' She said it was a must read (which I plan to do soon ) but I was intrigued when she said her favorite was 'Deceitful Above All Things.' I couldn't stop myself from taking a peek at the story, and after one or two words I couldn't stop.

In short, I ended up reading the longer 'Deceitful Above All Things' over 'The Keeper,' even though it was a YamaGoku fic like I had originally been looking for (and which was also shorter than this 20000 word novella). But I'm so glad I did.

I'll start the actual review now -.-' Akuroku is one of my top pairings, and I have never read a story that has made my heart hurt in such a way as this did (in a good way, of course ). I was so happy at the beginning, and yet I knew it wouldn't last. But, just like Axel, I harbored hope in my heart that maybe, MAYBE I'd be wrong. Yet, at the same time, this story wouldn't have had the emotional impact it delivered if you hadn't been so realistic and truthful. No other ending would have been fitting.

Your characterization was beautiful. Axel was perfect; no matter what, he never would have been able to let himself talk to Roxas and fix things until their relationship was too far gone, too damaged to be repaired. And Roxas is stubborn; he, once his mind was made up, would never let himself be persuaded by Axel's last plea, no matter how truthful he was finally being. He had turned his back, and that was that.

I loved how, until the bitter end, Axel kept his hope, and his cynical sense of humor. And I liked that there WAS still a little hope left in the reader by the end that "perhaps somewhere, in another life," happiness might be found. Quizás.

Beyond the story, your writing is aesthetically pleasing. Your prose is beautiful. It flows in a way that wraps the reader up and takes them into the hearts of the characters. I lived in The World That Never Was; I saw what was happening between Axel and Roxas in 3D before my very eyes. I felt the hurt that Roxas felt when Axel distanced himself and unconsciously made the wedge that grew between them. I felt the denial that Axel harbored in his heart and believed it myself. For this very reason I was able to not cry throughout the entire time I read this fic. But believe me, as soon as the last word was read, the spell you created was broken and I was crying my eyes out. That is what is so alluring about Axel and Roxas's relationship in the game; there is an unknown story between them, but it's shrouded in mystery and tragedy, whether one views it as just a friendship or more. (I suppose most of the mystery is taken away once you've played 358/2 Days, but it doesn't replace the friendship Axel and Roxas share and the sadness that is their lives as nobodies.)

Wow, I didn't mean to, but this is a 3000 word review. I'm sorry. I just couldn't stop rambling (in fact, I still want to, but I'll spare you the headache... this is longer than most of my school essays, and that's saying something ) In conclusion, I'm in love with you and your writing. It's amazing, and I have never read such a high quality fic before (and I've read PLENTY. 5-6 years worth) Thank you for sharing this beautiful gift .

On a side note, this is also a review for 'Heart Without a Girl,' which I read before this. I was blown away. I was curious about the pairing and the what world you could have set it in. I was surprised and delighted the world you created for Namine and Alice. It was just as heart wrenching and lovely as 'Deceitful Above All Things.' You fall in love with Namine and her sadness, and Alice and her childlike purity. It was exquisite. The ending broke my heart, and I couldn't help but hate even Axel, whom I love so much. It was beyond words as well.

All right, I really will leave you alone now. Keep writing these lovely stories, and I plan to look at your other work soon - after I've gotten some sleep. Now that it's 5:44 in the morning and the sun it telling me it's a new day, I'll shall try to sleep. Darn you and your elegant writing! C'est la vie... Until my next review XD

You've made me into a fangirl -.'
darkness fear chapter 1 . 8/2/2010
This is horribly, horribly beautiful. You know, I decided to read this because of its title. I was never big on Axel/Roxas, too... common, something like that. That must sound stupid. But everytime I read a good fic like this, it grows on me more and more. Anyway... I'm in love with the tone of this. It's almost serene, calming in an inevitable, heartwrenching sort of way. I barely know what I'm saying, but I wanted to leave a review that was more than my usual 'I loved this, it was gorgeous'... though I guess I'm just saying that same thing, only with more words.

I liked the full-circle resolution of it, the image of Axel and Roxas for the first time at the top of the clock tower (an aside; I don't get how everyone can do this! I'd be terrified of falling off). All of the ocean imagery really added to the story too, gave it more feeling. The end, man, the end... I knew what was coming, of course I did, because of the title... can't be a happy ending, but still "The ocean and the human heart, two things that were seemingly unknowable, endlessly deceitful, and – for him – ultimately unattainable. The only true heartless things." was like a punch to the gut.

Marluxia "Fuck, not that asshole"; and referring to himself in the "majestic plural" made me giggle.

Well, there was my feeble attempt at a review that has actual substance. This story was damn impressive.
Esperer chapter 1 . 7/31/2010
There are no words.

Thank you for writing this.
LostMySightToLight chapter 1 . 7/30/2010
I read fanfics day in day out. I read happy things, sad things, and all-around stupid things. When I read this I admit I was thinking 'this story goes on forever!' But when I read through the whole thing, I found myself unsucessfully holding back tears, trying to get ahold of my emotions. I was shocked at how much this story touched me, 'cause after reading as many stories as me you develop the ability to forsee all possible outcomes (i dont mean to though, I try very hard not to spoil the end for myself. but rest assured i enjoy it either way). However, this story seemed to dull my ability and I never saw it coming (except of course the parts that refer to the game.). I am puerto rican so the parts that were in spanish just instantly translated into english in my mind. I have to say the poem matched the story perfectly. But the words that reached out to me the most (as simple as i am) were: "Haría todo por ti."...Beautiful
The Anonymite chapter 1 . 7/2/2010
You, dearest Quillslinger, write like I dream of writing. I started off my worship of your ficdom with "My Boyfriend, Who Lives in Canada", and I loved it desperately, but this... /this/. Just wow. I knew I would like it from the summary, because calling them "Amnesias" reminded me of how Lewis Carrol wrote "The Hunting of the Snark" in six (or was it eight?) "Fits". He also wrote them backwards, but oh well, the connection still stands.

Sometimes I feel really bad for wasting so much of my life reading and writing fanfiction, because, unfortunately, nobody's going to be the Nabokov of AkuRoku, because only us crazy-beautiful addicts read the stuff. Then again, nobody but the crazy-beautiful addicts read Nabokov's obscurer stuff...

Anyway, what I'm trying to say here is that you're absolutely godly, and this fic made me cry, which is very, very hard to do where fics are involved. I've examined the canon story of Roxas and Axel myself, but I've never managed to get it anywhere near this perfect, because /this/ is perfect. Seriously.

I'll shut up now-just know, as I'm hoping you're already aware, that you are loved and fantastic.

- Anon
Corrina-Erin chapter 1 . 5/22/2010
This story actually, physically, made my heart hurt. Achingly beautiful, witty and all-around terrific. Neruda fit absolutely perfectly, and I loved your personifications. Thank you, it was well done!
ZannaBlack chapter 1 . 4/11/2010
This story is...beautiful. This is the second time i've read it, and I realized all over again why this is one of my favourite Axel/Roxas fics. The personification of Axel, Roxas and the whole Organization is just wonderful. It's amazing to me how you wove a whole new story around events from the game, and gave it a whole new perspective. Thank you for writing this, and I hope you continue writing such wonderful fics.
squigglything chapter 1 . 4/5/2010
I think this would be the first time I'm reading one of your works, so greetings!

This was really awesome, it was a good length and just fantastic. Your depiction of Axel is absolute win.

Totally fell in love with your writing style as soon as the first line of this story was processed in my brain XD I actually sat up straighter in my chair. hahaha...Well, it's been a really good read! Enjoyed it a bunch and I hope to read more of your works again soon. -thumbs up-
Individually Packaged chapter 1 . 3/13/2010
Oh wow this story is so powerful. I wish I hadn't started playing 382/2 days before I read this, though. It was hard for me to get into the fic because of the inconsistencies, but once I was in, I was in.

That was beautiful, thank you for making this fic. And thank you for using Neruda, haha. This is honestly the best Axel/Roxas fic I've ever read.
littlebluerose chapter 1 . 2/4/2010
oh my god, this was completely epic. I was really tired when I started reading it, but here it is, almost 2 am, and I just couldn't stop. 26-30 made me cry, but I'm happy about it. I think, honestly, this is one of the few and far between non-happy-ending Axel/Roxas fics that I adore.
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