Reviews for Betrayal
TodgeWatherly chapter 1 . 2/24/2008
This is i won't say interesting, but this is nicely done. A bit short but definitely intriguing. A very nice start.
dracomione12 chapter 1 . 11/1/2007
wahaha cool. :D:D
Ppeppzz chapter 1 . 6/30/2007
Oh please keep on going!
DramioneLurver chapter 2 . 6/27/2007
This story is coming along great! Please continue! I can't wait to see what happens. Btw, I loved your Prologue, so capturing. Nicely done.

Marmalade Fever chapter 2 . 6/26/2007
Hey, thanks for the review and the fic recommendation. This a good set up, so don't abandon it. It might not seem like you have many reviewers now, but this is only your second fic, so you haven't really built up a "fanbase" yet.

The writing is good, though there are a few minor improvements I would make, mostly in tightening up the wording.

Also, it kind of scared me when the prologue was so short. Usually that's a sign of amateur writing. So I'd recommend either adding it to the beginning of the first chapter or making it longer.

Good luck!

TodgeWatherly chapter 2 . 6/22/2007
pretty interesting so far. can't wait to see how it develops. keep writing!
Puddum chapter 2 . 6/21/2007
Hoohoo, how exciting! Keep a-writin', Allycakes!
IrinaWithAnI chapter 2 . 6/21/2007
Yay! Finally a new story. Very intriguing plot. I love the ending. I'm looking forward to more so I can be a lean, mean, beta machine. )