|Reviews for Going On|
| Sweetums128neo chapter 1 . 5/16/2011
First Please Teacher ficlet that actually was in character and not horrible. Awesome job. -thumbs up- :)
| Misaki Orihara chapter 1 . 3/7/2008
just a ouestion what does "teitai" and "Saiyu sen jiko yo"
| Saddletank chapter 1 . 7/1/2007
Don't listen to Myky and Pokemon Fan.
You have just watched ep.9 and responded to that ep with a short that exactly matches Kei's thoughts, as they were at that point in the series.
So there are more eps, are their Myky? And your point is? The point is this fic is a snapshot of Kei's thoughts and mood at that stage in his relationship.
And in that regard they are right on the nose. This _is_ how Kei was thinking. If he leaves Mizhuo he'll naturally wish to see her with a replacement companion - its how teen boys think towards girls. He has two male classmates, Hyosuke and Matagu. Hyusuke is in a relationship with Kaede which leaves Maragu whom he _knows_ has a crush on Mizuho, so its perfectly believeable that Kei would consider him a match for her if he quit the scene. You don't have to dig very far into Freud to see that.
So given that, and given the very mixed up kid Kei is at the end of ep.9, I find this short both right and quite touching.
| Perentie Fan chapter 1 . 6/25/2007
The random Japanese words kind of interrupt the flow of the story. Sensei is one thing but most of it isn't really necessary.
This fic has a good idea behind it, and I can tell you have a lot of potential, you just need to develop it more. And it helps to know more about the series before you write a fic (since the end of this fic kind of goes against how Kei enters his worst stand still in the series, when faced with how he can't be happy without Mizuho but can't live with making his friends sad either).
Also. some of his thoughts don't make much sense. Like Matagu taking care of Mizuho. She doesn't need to be taken care of and it would mean Mizuho having to inform him of her being an alien as well.
| Myky chapter 1 . 6/23/2007
Some advice,watch more episodes before writing a fanfiction.
Trust me beginner,it will really help you expand.
No ofence,but you're not that good.