Reviews for Swaping Lifes |
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![]() ![]() ![]() omg u should really continue this story! |
![]() ![]() hurry with chapter 2 of swaping lifes please! |
![]() ![]() ![]() luv it. |
![]() ![]() ![]() thats realy good.. you posting any more chapters? think you should lol. could you read and review mine for me, dont know whether to bother putting up the third chapter /. thanks. x |
![]() ![]() ![]() like it keep writing |
![]() ![]() ![]() Needs work. Good to see it was published over a year ago, 'cause I know this isn't you. I'll be glad to help, Topaz! |
![]() ![]() ![]() lovely ] update please it is a tad short -redapples |
![]() ![]() ![]() love it please contiue |
![]() ![]() ![]() i like that you have edward living with his mom, elizabeth. most people when they have bella and edward switch roles put edward living with charlie. be careful when youre writing to keep it all one tense. you went from "i was quickly awakened" to "mom opens the door". it makes it a little hard to read if the tense keeps switching. personally, i would keep it past, except for quotes, which of course are present tense. great start! |
![]() ![]() ![]() please for the love of twilight UPDATE! PLEASE i am getting tortured! |
![]() ![]() ![]() POST MORE NOW! |
![]() ![]() ![]() Do update, this is interesting(: |
![]() ![]() ![]() Please continue this. I'd like to see where you take it. |
![]() ![]() that was great, but you really need to make more. |
![]() ![]() ![]() it is good forr the beginning i hope that things get more exciting |