|Reviews for Invitation|
| bilingualkyuubi chapter 10 . 7/24/2008
so does ino love choji or is she using him.
| bilingualkyuubi chapter 9 . 7/24/2008
bad move, right one to explain the boycot and counter the friendship argument, bad one to make in front of girlfriend.
| bilingualkyuubi chapter 8 . 7/23/2008
ah, protective garra, it is rather cute.
| bilingualkyuubi chapter 7 . 7/23/2008
yeah shika is a playa
| bilingualkyuubi chapter 6 . 7/23/2008
i can't tell if you are trying to make ino jelous, or protective, but i guess that is a good thing.
| bilingualkyuubi chapter 5 . 7/23/2008
that was odd, really odd.
| bilingualkyuubi chapter 4 . 7/23/2008
birds move unpredictably, phonelines don't. phone networks are difficult to set up in isolationist societys. non industrialized societys don't need motorized transport. think final fantasy, they have all this high tech stuff and you either walk or take public transport, similar to what it is like in japan, and any society that values nature and leaving no trace so heavily.
temari is a heartless bitch, you don't make a bet after the bet conditions are met, i doubt he would collect what she owed him if shika was lying or if he died in transport (no good brother would do that when his sister was hurt emotionaly).
| bilingualkyuubi chapter 3 . 7/23/2008
oh thats cute, child love where one thinks it is friendship and the other thinks its love, just like the adult friend zone.
| bilingualkyuubi chapter 2 . 7/23/2008
i like this chapter, i think it is odd for him to say certain things publicly, but shika is a genius of the battle field not the hormones. and i like temaris argument with kankuro, i could really see a sister making the same claim that they really do feel for their boyfriend (or in this case curently potential boyfriend who we all know will be so in the end), yet my girlfriend is just a bimbo, though i doubt i would date anyone my family would hate because people who get along with the family get along with me, but still sisters are crazy like that. so yes your interactions are very realistic.
| bilingualkyuubi chapter 1 . 7/23/2008
i would have to say that your creating the relationship seemed weak or odd, i don't know i mean it really does follow what could happen in real life with her being invited to diner and then her bringing him food later all over a basic atraction to each other, but just the speed at which they start talking about chorting seemed off character for the personalities of the two, with how lazy shika is and how stubern temari is i would think they would be in denail for a while longer. but after the initial part the interactions between the too was very good, and the teasing was well done, just early i guess. realy in cannon the way shika acts with temari is similar to how kurenai is with asuma, a relationship is implied with how they are seen together and deny any special relationship. but this is fanfiction, and it apears you wish too avoid bush beating and get to the entertaining family and friend interactions.
| saiyamar chapter 22 . 7/13/2008
I was trying to find this story to add to my favourites! It took me about two hours but i found it again.
Anyway really well done with this story. I read it first about half a yr ago and i still remembered it which is why i was looking for it in the first place.
Very good story and i hope you write many more!
| opEd-girl chapter 1 . 7/1/2008
I liked it. good writing, good dialog. My only criticism is (and this is only my opinion) that I think some of the way Temari spoke was too forward and perhaps a little too loose, to me she seems more reserved and almost shy and in a way too proud to admit her feelings so openly.
I did enjoy the dialog about shikamaru's wife not being to pretty or too old, that was a good read.
keep up the great writing.
| rachel chapter 13 . 6/30/2008
i dont like to review but this chaptr was so awesome i had to.
i love the story.
i love that shikamaru told temari
temari and shikamaru are meant to be.
love love love.
| xlolyunyun chapter 8 . 6/30/2008
i ended up laughing at the end of every chapter.
i love this so far.
i look forawrd to reading the rest.
much much much love
| Lcuky Naruto08 chapter 14 . 6/29/2008
i like how u use Ossama as on of the clan names in Suna and they live in the desert. nice connection there.
By the way i LOVE ur story this on has to be my in my top 5 favorites of urs. the other ones r a mothers love (both of them) and the hokage great ond powerful (both of them).
i have to say ur my favorite author on fanfiction and i havent read any other fanfics since either feburary or march. whoa a really long time.
i like how this story is playing out. cant wait to read the rest of it!