|Reviews for Naruto|
| Trekiael chapter 3 . 7/2/2007
Thanks for the review reply and for being so nice in it.
Ok, first, I have to tell you something. Kishimoto is not an only child, he does have a brother, a twin one! XD and this other Kishimoto also wrote a manga called Satan 6, if you wanna check it out. Poor guy got insulted for supposely copying Naruto's style, but hey, what more can you expect from twins? XD So yeah, his manga's style is really close to the first narutos.
I find it funny how what would have been of utmost important in the manga or another fic, Naruto freeing Sasuke from orochimaru, happen to be only somewhat of a minor fact, somewhat because this is what helps Naruto to come back to reality and minor because well, this is only his imagination. You still wrote this part really well, good details and realistic but not awfully long and boring.
Is Sakura trying to kill Naruto so she can finally get ride of him while not being frowned upon for being a bad grilfriend, ya know 'oh my boyfriend died!' typical victim type. I wonder.
I like the part about Sasuke insecurities, he might be determinated, but he's still very much human.
Naruto making Sasuke finish shaving once he wake up? Hell yeah! That would totally be him! XD Though, considering the circonstancies, i'm not so sure. Naruto being blond, you really have to either touch his face or look closely to see his stubble. Whatever XD
Oh the part with Itachi chasing Sasuke with a gun was awsome! Though, I didn't immediatly thought about a video game, more like a game they did as fucked up brothers XD Maybe I'm the one who's fucked up? Anyway, poor Sasuke, his usual pride take quite a bit of damage in your fic.
About pairings, I dunno if you planned any side ones in this fic, but well, I know your other ones, and you basically always use the sames. Hum, I know that too many yaoi pairings is hightly improbable in reality exept when well, you're openly gay and make friends in gay bars and stuffs, and I also know that it's annoying to have people to try and force you to like a pairing, but well, I'll be a brat and do it anyway, so sorry in advance. ;;
I know you like NejiTenten, but personally, I find this pairing boring as hell. Good point is there that as a side pairing, they'll never be any action so there's no need to crate any dramatics between them...But nejiGaara is way more interesting even if highly improbable.
The other contestable one being KibaHina. I didn't hate this pairing immediatly, but seeing it used almost always in SasuNaru fics, it really gets on my nerves, it seems like the easy way out of Hinata's love for Naruto, like LeeSaku, but it's even worse because Kiba is never like the teasing friend he is to her anymore, just a blushing fool. And this pairing is too much like a cliché anyway of the good guy and his princess. While ShinoKiba is such a rare pairing, despite being so interesting, almost like sasuNaru but perhaps easier, not as much history and all behind it.
And to finish for those few authors that have absolutly no qualm about using more than just SasuNaru and kakaIru as yaoi pairings, how many dare using yuri ones?
Alright, I'm done bothering you with that. Sorry, I felt like rambling XD
Anyway, good chapter again! Hopefully Naruto's gonna ba awake in the next one! (he's going to think Sasuke is molesting him in his sleep or something if he wake up in the 'shaving position')
good luck for the next! Ja ne!
| Resting Sovereign chapter 3 . 7/2/2007
You totally got me there!
While I was reading the Itachi and Sasuke part, I was like (O_o). Hehe.
Anyway, I wish Naruto goodluck! Tell him to keep twitching or something. I would love to see his reaction to the 'real' Sasuke.
*waiting patiently for your next update XD*
| Michi P chapter 3 . 7/2/2007
Aw Sasuke's concern for Naruto's wellbeing is so CUTE! XD
As for SasuNaru, it's not that I don't like it, it's just I don't really make a habit of reading it. Actually, practically the only time I read it is if it's you writing it (not trying to suck-up, I swear. It's true!). I've read MOST of your works, like "To Hear Your Voice Again" (one of my absolute FAVORITES, ever), and the "Roomates" series and "Pyromaniac." I was ok with the SasuNaru there (not in THYVA, but everything else) because you write it SO GOOD. You're amazing. Really.
Anyway, looking forward to the next chapter! . and happy Canada Day to you too!
| wittyying chapter 3 . 7/2/2007
Wake up, Naruto! WAKE UP!
I still am marveling how different the characters are in the "real " world. Sakura's just uncool and Sasuke and Itachi actually have a NORMAL brotherly relationship. And Kyuubi's a cat! It's weird for me, it's going to be so much weirder for Naruto if what he thinks is reality is the ninja world.
Looking forward to the update.
| Shinij2004 chapter 3 . 7/2/2007
OMG OMG OMG OMG, You are evil lol. I wounder when hes going to wake up, pleasepsot soon
| sexineko chapter 3 . 7/2/2007
cliff hangerss! i hate them, but i love you for writing this story.
I like the idea, and i like the OCCness of the characters XD
cant wait for the next chapter, aweesome story XD
| Kaikouken chapter 3 . 7/2/2007
Yay a new chapter! *does the happy dance*
Annoy me? Haha nothing or no one can annoy me, you can try. But I never get annoyed. Never. XD Besides it is I who annoy people. lol
Oh yes I know, people generally read and just go away, so it is nice if anyone takes time to review, then the writer can take time to answer them. I do that too. You are not crazy, you are sweet. _
I know, about the idea, but don't give up on it. I know you won't, however I'd still at least say this once. Don't join the abandoned fanfic club. XD I am hyper without chocolate so don't worry. I don't get scared either. Er, unless you start writing SasuSaku that is. Ew.
Ah yes, it is a dream, or is it? I mean of course right now, according to the chapter it looks like Naruto is dreaming, and people do have very good imaginations sometimes, but, I have my suspicions. I always have them so it doesn't really matter, but I tend to look too deeply sometimes.
When I read the first part of the "Real" world where Itachi was kicking Sasuke's ass in the game, I was surprised for a sec, thinking what happened to the lovey-dovey Itachi-nii? But yeah, a sentence later I understood that they are playing a game. lol
Uchihas are fun, really. You can make Fugaku a stern man but putty in the hands of Mikoto, you can make Mikoto a really sweet and yet dangerous when provoked woman who can make the Uchiha men run with tail between their legs. Itachi-nii is the very caring and yet bizzare brother and Sasuke is Sasuke. XD
Because of their portrayal in manga, when someone writes them normal, they become a lot of fun. XDD
Now about the first part, where Sasuke is "rescued". I loved the way you executed that, not too drawn out, meticulous details given and yet they were not dragging in any way, in fact that made it look so awesome. Sai and Naruto's cooperation was love! The glimpse of Naruto's desperation and his mental dilemma, brief and yet amazing.
The fact that Oro-pyon went down similarly as he did in manga, that is, with unexpected ease, also makes it that much more amazing. Sasuke waking up and the whole staring business...lol
I am worried about the burn. And I really don't think that you are going to put Orochimaru down that easily either. Like in the manga, I am sure Kishimoto-sensei is planning something nefarious. XD
It doesn't really matter though, this is your story, your timeline. Whatever happened in manga, doesn't really matter here. I think you should go with your timeline and screw the manga. he he he
Rambling... I do nothing but ramble. -_-;; And you know something, I read your reply at least fifteen times before accpeting the fact that you really meant it. XD
I am such a nut.
That reminds me, KakaIru. *rolls eyes* I echo the sentiment here, how do people see something between them? Hell, there is no interaction there! How the hell will they like each other if they never even talk? It is almost as ridiculous as GaaNeji. I mean, how did people even come up with GaaNeji? I am sorry if you do like it, then again, I don't think you do. I love, love, love GaaLee and as far as I think, so do you. GaaLee is just far too cute.
GaiKaka...bad mental image, but it has more substance than KakaIru.
I have read a few nice KakaObi and YonKaka, and they are somewhat plausible too. So yes. XD
Let's elope, but I am a very perverted little girl. Well not little either... almost 20. XD But very perverted. XDD
Kiba! I love your Kiba! Everyone loves your Kiba! My idea of canon Kiba is tainted with your Kiba. That is how much I love him. lol
And here, he is being so Kiba-like. He is not obsessed, he is their friend, but he wants Sasuke to move on. I can understand Sasuke's dilemma too, holding onto something like that. But the truth is, the only difference is of the worlds. Naruto won't give up on Sasuke in the "Ninja" world (XD) and Sasuke won't give up on Naruto is the "Real" world. *nods at her stupid logic*
I have read your every other fic...*cough* but by the time I really came to ffnet, you were doing the Challenge, and when I registered and started reviewing, you were wrapping up the Challenge. So I waited and waited for you to start something, so that I could start bothering you. XD like I am doing right now.
Sai. Sai is love! I didn't really like him before, when he used to badmouth Sasuke and made fun of Naruto's penis size. lol
But recently, after developing dislike for SaiNaru, I really started looking at Sai and just, just fell in love with the guy. He is just so... awesome, for the lack of a better word. XD
But Sai and Naruto are like brothers. And there can be a little love from Sai's side, because Naruto is like that. He makes you fall in love with him. But other than that, Naruto is too busy with Sasuke. That is why, I love, love your Sai portrayal. He is done perfectly.
Then again, you do everything perfectly. XD
Ah yes, I know. I do that too. Finding humor in the darkest of situations. I laugh at my problems, make fun of them, ridicule them. It makes it easier to deal with them sometimes. That is why Angst/Humor is also my favourite genre. They just go hand in hand. And you are really apt at writing them together.
*cough* whenever am I getting to the point? The shaving scene. Sasuke's devotion and feelings leak from that scene. Arashi's presence also makes the scene profound and in turn makes me love it.
Hand twitch was fun. Also, I don't know how many people would notice it, was it the same hand that got injured in the "dream" world? *giggles*
Tsunade-sama! Waii! She is one of my favourite characters because she kicks ass! And here, she is beyond awesome. lol
Loved her characterization. _
I still have much to say... and yet I feel that this review has gone over thousand words... I feel it. Yup, 1077 words so far. O.O
Well, I am sure that I am burning your eyes now, but heh, I am going to continue anyway. Because I can't stop. T_T
Naruto's mother is such a genuine character. She is a normal, sweet, caring mother who just wants her son back. Her dependence on Sasuke is touching, it shows just how precariously balanced her hopes are. How fragile her control is, if Sasuke gives up... she would break.
Of course now that Naruto shows improvement, everything changes. She relies even more on Sasuke and eventually this will come in hnady I think.
Sasuke's hope (before the twitching) was dwindling. Kiba's words, his family's concern and everything was getting on his nerves. Ah... love the way you portray things. *sigh*
See, I am literature student, Engish Literature. It is my job to analyse things. I often times don't because not everything is worth it, but when I come acorss something like this, I can't help myself, I get so engrossed and excited, if I don't talk about it, I go all crazy. You don't want that do you? hehehehehehe...
But... seeing the length of this thing (I really can't call it a review anymore) if it bothers you, I'll try to stop myself. It will be hard...*sniff* but I'll try.
Though I don't mind spoilers, predicting is fun. And about the anime, I stopped watching after the first few episodes. Because I had seen all the guys and it is a waste of time since Sasuke isn't showing up any time soon. Besides I'm a bitchy manga elitist. XD
*cough* anyway, thank you so much for posting this chapter and if by chance you are still reading this... it was really, really awesome. I love your writing even more now, if that is possible.
And, uh, sowwy for the rambling...I loved the chapter. *coughs and runs away*
| WhiteRoses13 chapter 3 . 7/2/2007
YES! WAKE UP, WAKE UP, WAKE UP, WAKE UP! You so had me with the video game thing...I thought Itachi had (finally) killed his family...but I guess that's what you were aiming for.
| Shi.no.Tenshi.desu chapter 3 . 7/2/2007
oo you have to reveiw soon anyone who reads this is going to die waiting for you
| CreativeStrive1025 chapter 3 . 7/2/2007
Dear god, Sarge. You never cease to amaze me with your chapters. I mean with this one, I was on the edge of my seat the whole time freaking out. It’s a wonder I didn’t fall on my ass while reading. :] Haha, It was awesome. Go Naruto for almost waking up. Hopefully he will because I’m liking his parents, and to see them break down would be so very sad. :[ Minako and Aashi have something so adorable about them being parents and I’ve become very fond of the mother.
Next, Naruto’s hand twitching while Sasuke is on top of him and leaning forward. :cough: Must hold all the dirty thoughts that I just came up with. You would think I would have thought them while reading huh? Well I didn’t actually and that really amazed me. I believe I was just to lost in the story.
The plot, Ugh, I love it dude. The concept is pure genius. You are wonderful for even thinking it.
Anywho, Great job on this one. I can not wait to see more. :]
| schadenfreudekid chapter 3 . 7/2/2007
thanks for the reply. writers who reply to reviewers rock!
anyway, about this chapter, it seems that you're laying the ground for the story because the pace of this chapter was a little bit slow.
anyway, still looking forward to your next chapter!
| FlashDrive chapter 3 . 7/2/2007
OMG! YOU UPDATED! :Is happy: And on CANADA DAY! HAPPY CANADA DAY TO YOU TOO! (Even though I don't live there...) Lol. I loved this chapter. Especially this part:
"“If you’re dreaming of something kinky, keep it in your head. I don’t want you going hard while I’m sitting on you, I might get the wrong idea.”"
Seriously. I LOVED that part. XD Lol. Great chapter overall. I'm excited to see if Naruto wakes up in the next chapter. :Poke, poke: (Hint: That was me attempting subtlety. That subtlety replacing my normal request of "PLEASE UPDATE SOON!") :D I love this story! X3
| cutiedogsapphire chapter 3 . 7/2/2007
Im so happy you updated . by far this was my favorite character, you know nobody puts Naruto's family in it, but you proved it was ok .
| dotdotd chapter 2 . 7/1/2007
I really like it! I need the next chappie... ...
| snarfy chapter 2 . 7/1/2007
This is great! You always write the best stories!