Reviews for Dead Last
lara5170 chapter 4 . 3/18/2022
I am confused. Naruto referred to him as a guy a couple of times in this
A Broken Person chapter 10 . 3/4/2021
First I have to say this is a great fanfic but I don't think I can continue reading it I knew it was sasunaru when I started and I know the writer has beef with sasuke and that's fine it's very descriptive and is really good at moving the story along but I don't think I should keep reading things that take things so far in the name of bromance I'm starting to piss my brother of because when ever he mentions his guy friends I smirk at him and start to snicker last time her threw his fork at me which made my mom think he's hiding something and is now made it her life goal to find out what I think is so funny and to see if he's hiding something also WIZARD (-)゚.*・。゚
Pimity chapter 1 . 10/11/2020
how drunk do you have to be to come up with trash like this?
loveofwisdom2 chapter 14 . 5/6/2020
That is for sure what Sasuke would do. Not give an F of what others think. I want to know what happens next.
loveofwisdom2 chapter 8 . 5/1/2020
I did not expect the last paragraph :0
loveofwisdom2 chapter 7 . 5/1/2020
You are good at sneaking things in that the reader would not expext. The Neko poster in Itachi's room. Well who would have thought cuz we haven't heard much of Itachi.
loveofwisdom2 chapter 6 . 5/1/2020
What the f just happened. Stunned...
loveofwisdom2 chapter 5 . 5/1/2020
I love how you stayed true to Naruto's character. He's loud, honest, friendly and obnoxious.
loveofwisdom2 chapter 3 . 4/30/2020
Aww while reading i was thinking there is no way things are escalating that so got me.
loveofwisdom2 chapter 2 . 4/30/2020
You have got to be kidding me. At first I thought ok maybe the new first year is Naruto but then i thought no way as he seems too pathetic. But the reveal was too funny.! Love it.
loveofwisdom2 chapter 1 . 4/30/2020
Love the first chapter! And that last line! :) so looking forward to the next chapter.
Vivaan chapter 2 . 12/21/2019
Dude, I just love love LOVE your sense of humor. Like damn, you know how to make people laugh!
Guest chapter 14 . 11/1/2019
The fic is pretty good. It reads like a shoujo manga, but you already knew that from your author's notes mentioning W Juliet and all the other mangas.

However, I have to say that I don't like Naruto very much. He's written like some type of Gary Stu. He's ultimate sexy, while being oh-so-sad and vulnerable. We're supposed to drool over him while wanting to mother him at the same time. He's got everyone in the world drooling over hm, yet at the same time, he has all these insecurities that we're supposed to pity him for. Poor widdle Naruto, he's an orphan who got dumped an doesn't feel like he's as talented as his bandmates. Will no one love him for who he is on the inside? All his fangirls only want him for his looks and his fame.

Canon Sasuke has the same problem, but do we hear him complaining about it? No, we don't, and still fandom thinks he should suck it up and get over the genocide of his whole family because he's popular with girls. Well, why don't we tell the same thing to this Naruto? He's popular with girls, so he should suck it up and get over the deaths of his parents and his unrequited love for Temari. After all, he got a new family with Gaara and the sand siblings, and he has girls constantly throwing themselves at him. He's just a teenager and he's already slept with over 40 girls. Like geeze, can't you just be happy Naruto? You get all the pussy you want, so what more do you need?

Naruto being a poor little rich boy is supposed to make him look deep, but I think it makes him look like a Gary Stu. The story is doing THE MOST to make him both sad and gorgeous, so that's where he crosses the line from normal character that we could imagine as a real person living somewhere out there into the world, to blatant fangirl fantasy wank material. You can't tell me fangirls don't love crying over bishounen. Well, Naruto takes that to the next level. Him being gorgeous and desired by all is half of the plot. The other half of the plot is Naruto feeling sad, lonely, and insecure. The whole story revolves around these things when he's not even the POV character. Sasuke is the POV character and the fic has BARELY touched on any of his problems with his father. Why are they so distant? Why has Sasuke repeatedly tried to run away? Instead, the fic is mainly focused on NARUTO'S backstory with Itachi. As the POV character, Sasuke's backstory is more important for the fic than Naruto's, but the story totally revolves around Naruto, so a lot of Sasuke's issues are ignored so the fic can continue to focus on Naruto.

I think that's how you ultimately know you've got a Gary Stu on your hands: when one character functions as a black hole, making the plot and other characters revolve around him, and sucking away any character development or plot points that don't belong to him. Most of the time, you forget Sasuke wants to be an actor and don't even know if it's something he still wants to do, or if he changed his mind once he met Naruto and his entire world (as stated in the fic) literally started revolving around Naruto. This fic is all about Naruto pursuing his dreams to become an even better musician (when he's already a world-famous idol), while Sasuke's dreams are barely mentioned.

You said in your a/n that the fic wouldn't be about acting and it would focus on music instead. That's fair enough, but again, your POV character wants to be an actor and you can't even do something to help him out with that. We can assume Sasuke will be successful at it because he's been so good at pretending to be a girl, but that's not the same as seeing Sasuke get on the stage or hearing him talk about movies and the theater so we know he's got a real interest in it and it's not just some teenager's whim. You can do at least that much for you POV character, can't you?
anon chapter 14 . 9/6/2019
Are you ever gonna post Naruto's Love?
revinzy chapter 3 . 2/9/2019
Freakinh hilarious! I had so much fun reading this lol
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