Reviews for Icha Icha Paradise CollectionBook 1: Lessons
Goldrune09 chapter 1 . 10/19/2011
fucking hot!
Lovestricky159 chapter 1 . 10/29/2009
i would've never thought...
Shayukico chapter 1 . 8/5/2008
Nice! Great idea! The ending could have been more detailed but hey, it got my attention!
Hatake Sienna chapter 1 . 7/11/2008
I agree this was hot. I thought the ending was actually quit funny in its own perverted way - I liked it, can't wait to read the others.
XxGothFairyLoverxX chapter 1 . 5/26/2008
loved it

and yes two girls getting it on is so fuckin hot

XD
Xhin chapter 1 . 2/29/2008
Review time!

Alright, first off, for the writing part of it, I presume that you were just starting out, and getting used to the whole writing thing. So you probably got better over time, and your more recent stories may seem written better than this. This was written ok, don't get me wrong, but it started as if you couldn't find the right words for certain sequences, and it almost sounded in my head that you were talking to someone instead of telling a story (Sorta like when you're watching a bad actor, and you're very aware that he/she is an actor throughout the entire movie). That quickly changed however when I began reading the middle part. I was soon engulfed into the story, sometime after the Naruto joke. The first part of your story seemed like more of a prologue to me. I enjoyed the Naruto joke that Shikamaru made however. It added a little life to an otherwise dulling perspective of the story. Just when the reader would get disinterested, you pulled them back in with an amazing performance. I don't however find the characters to fit completely story-wise. Sakura, nor Ino seems like they would become whore enough to throw themselves around the village like that-having sex with anyone who needs a lesson. It's very illogical. If your intention was to stick to character, Sakura would still most likely be in love with Sasuke. And Ino, may still have had a crush, but I suppose it's possible she could become a lesbian. Not Sakura though. This is minor, but something to point out;

the joke, if thought about, is also a highly unlikely situation. Why would Shikamaru hear some sex advice from Naruto? What kind of conversation would bring that about...? Unless they both have no problem with discussing their sex life with one another. Heh. I enjoy the story idea. The story as a whole was quite nice, and the porn throughout the story wasn't as consistant as I thought it'd be, which made me smile. There were subtle parts I enjoyed, and that made the active parts a little more... Acceptable. Subtle parts as in, Shikamaru walking home to find a note on his door, taking a shower, and spending at least a paragraph to himself, without it being completely engulfed by your main subject. It made the entire situation seem more alive and breathing. And gave room for your mind to dive back into the subject of the entire once again, which is porn of course. I guess in a porn, girl on girl action is always kinda nice, especially when you picture yourself in Shikamaru's situation. So all in all, the story section of the writing was quite nice, and involved. When Shikamaru didn't know what he was doing, I laughed. When Ino appeared, I was shocked. And when Sakura appeared I was even more shocked. It's basically a very good story. My only quarrel is the last part, and I presume you've seen it as well. It ended kind of rushed. And the fact that Shikamaru just came back from basically getting oral sex by two very hot girls and cumming, states that he probably wouldn't be in the mood to do it again. Not for at least 10 to 15 minutes. ;)

Review: On a scale of 1-10 this story scores a 7!
Nairo Xana and Jemmi chapter 1 . 11/16/2007
lol... "I think Shikamaru would be more the type to ignore foreplay cause he’s lazy (why do I think about it? Hello, pervert!)" nice... (and I agree with you)

This was almost more of an InoxSakura lemon fic, there wasn't that much TemarixShikamaru.

It was still good though

and kinda funny

Nice job
loveherleilani chapter 1 . 9/16/2007
It was hot and I loved it!

Good Job. :D

I also like your lookup.
CrystalICE1 chapter 1 . 9/15/2007
AWESOME! Iwould personally like to see a ICHA ICHA including Tsunade and Kakashi and Shizune. I think that would be HOT!
sexyinumama chapter 1 . 8/27/2007
I couldn't keep a straight face in the beginning, I'm sorry. But that was hilarious to me!
ProffesorZoom chapter 1 . 7/13/2007
HA HA HA HA!

Hot? I think not.

let me explain to you something.

when I come to the shikamari pairings area, I expect to find solely shikamari fics.

let me sum up your fic:

and Shikamaru are engaged to get married.

finds out Shika is hopeless at sex, so she sends him to some whores in hope he'll learn something.( a complete lack of love there, so why the fuck are they getting married?)

3. Shikamaru, for some reason unbeknownst to me(yours was incorrect and ridiculous) doesn't dump Temari, scream at her and then she actually helps him because she LOVES him, or become extremely depressed that she would actually suggest this, and kills himself. The fact that none of those things happen prove you fic is bad.

Ergo, I am right. You are are an idiot who has no writing talent. I am not.

and last, but not least: FUCK YOU.
TobisaruJC chapter 1 . 7/11/2007
Nice story...AND HELL YEAH TO GIRLS GETTING IT ON IS HOTTER THAN HELL
lightningstrxu chapter 1 . 7/2/2007
I don't know i was always partial to Tayuya Sasuke pairing
SoundsRight chapter 1 . 7/2/2007
O.O

i'm so totally speechless...

great story!
Yami Marik chapter 1 . 7/1/2007
That's a great story! I like it much better than your other fic and I'm looking forward to the other 3 chapters! Post the other parts soon please!
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