Reviews for Naruto Arashiodori
Sir Cookie chapter 17 . 4/29/2013
Naruto is actually left handed in canon.
Sir Cookie chapter 4 . 4/28/2013
It's toad, not frog. It's like somebody calling a human, a monkey.
Sir Cookie chapter 1 . 4/28/2013
Kakashi can only use Raikiri 4 times a day. Raikiri is a stronger more powerful version of chidori. Kakashi used Raikiri against Zabuza.
WalkingStranger99 chapter 13 . 4/22/2013
All of the Sharingan wielders had, once again, gathered in Konoha. Tobi aint there
fgdg chapter 61 . 4/21/2013
more filler episode chapters
SonOfNenji chapter 57 . 4/21/2013
The conditions Tsunade forced upon Sasuke in combination with the cover-up she told the crowd would not work as well or as all.

He will receive his family fortune back to keep appearances, yes has to give it away (most of it the rest of it and more over slave labor) in good faith.

Well, good faith over what?
It would have made sense had Tsunade not publicly announced his betrayal as made on her orders; but who would just *give* ALL of his money away for free, without any apparant reason?

Ala: "Oh yeah well I was just in deep cover for 3 years, here have all my money and a kidney. Everything for the homeland, Lord Vad... I mean 'Hokage-sama' ".

It's a bad story, and smart and therefore *important* people would see through it like glass. It wouldn't hold up for a minute. It would need an additional cover up, which you never wrote.

Also, you never wrote any stipulations for Sasuke to keep quiet about his conditions. (Which will\would be a good source of conflict as Sakura finds out the truth, as well as Naruto, btw).
SonOfNenji chapter 56 . 4/21/2013
Do they vote like that on every promotion?

Because there are hundreds, maybe thousands (depending on the source) of Shinobi that would need it.

Also, Tsunade is being OC here. She has never been this ruthless in cannon, and you didn't deviate enough in a way that would justify her acting as grimly.

Unless of course, there was some ulterior motive for her conditions and tone towards Sasuke, since 80% of his money going to the village is slavery. Not to mention Naruto would never approve and they were always close.

Heck, she's been cold to him as well. As if she doesn't (didn't, previously when relevant- Exams) care if he lived or died, like a tool.

Additionally, you would need to add some explanation to the behavior of the clan heads. Some of them are harsh and display behavior stemmed in bigotry, yet the story treats them as either wise/neutral.

In particular; the Nara and Akimichi heads. Nara is an extremist, giving no justification to his sudden claims without any due consideration to other given opinions absolutely, while the Akimichi's belief that everything is a tool is self-contradicting: A tool cannot use another tool, as a hammer cannot wield a hammer; They cannot act independently, as they very often do in this story and otherwise.
SonOfNenji chapter 55 . 4/21/2013
The Fenghuang sequence was good, but too short and easily resolved.

Naruto got hit by a Plot Ball in that sequence (see: TVTropes), and gave a long uninterrupted speech to the bird, which it immediately accepted.

It seemed fake and insincere, and Feng would see through it.

It would have been more honest if the language was made more concise (though no less precise; rhymes are nice) to seem more like something this Naruto would say, while adding at least some description of body-language in between. Non-dialogue text, in other words.
SonOfNenji chapter 54 . 4/20/2013
That was a very boring and bland way to kill Karin.

Why was she guarding, anyway? She's not a fighter, she's a scientist.

Sad day when a major character dies like a mook.
SonOfNenji chapter 50 . 4/20/2013
Why was Naruto toying with Sasuke so much during the fight?

It did end in a near draw, but he had lots of chances for clean hits with a blade, especially when using his speed technique; but instead of using his mechanism he settled for normal punches!

Such large openings as he had are when critical hits are normally dealt!

Also, why did he tear the rope to shreds? That would imply using more than a few shuriken.
Isn't that overkill?
SonOfNenji chapter 33 . 4/19/2013
Sasuke's death feels like another cop-out.

It's sudden and inconsistent, as if you suddenly decided
'Hey, I don't want Sasuke in this story anymore; Insert quote: "Sasuke entered a forest and got killed by a wolf, THE END"'

Like that.

There's actually a trope for this, if you care to look.
SonOfNenji chapter 30 . 4/19/2013
Sarutobi Hirozen's death here also feels like a cop-out.

You saved him when he was originally supposed to die, and yet you still wanted to get rid of him.

Frankly, I don't find any logic sentimental or otherwise in his reasons for suicide. After all, his age has always been his mark-of-prowess, showing his his cunning and expertise via the simple fact that he's SURVIVED to such an age.

For a ninja of his caliber to simply die on a mission, S rank or otherwise especially when they could choose otherwise (you mentioned he had ANBU with him and he just barely died?) is nothing short of shameful, a permanent mark and a bad way to be remembered, putting emphasis on his weakness at old age, rather than how he even lived that long as previously mentioned.

On the other hand, I feel giving him a minor part in the story and allowing him to either die peacefully after having lived a full life would have been more sensible;

In the spirit of; 'I've done my part, now it's time to rest'.
SonOfNenji chapter 23 . 4/18/2013
That sword is really weird.

Are you saying it doubles the chakra the user puts into it? But then, where does it come from?
SonOfNenji chapter 22 . 4/18/2013
If he really was such a good shinobi; why would he continue fighting when he's outnumbered and outmatched, lost his element of surprise, and even allowing them to talk tactics.
SonOfNenji chapter 20 . 4/18/2013
Personally, I feel you didn't properly address the points regarding the Council of Judges.

First of all, I would recommend you read that scene again and then your answers to our concerns.

Now, regarding the whole 'Hokage's word is law'; it may not be and it also changes from story to story, but as a military leader it would make absolute sense that he/she would be able to promote who she chooses like in a real army.

(It would be rather stupid if I couldn't promote someone to send him where he is needed more because of politics, wouldn't it?)

Additionally, there's also the matter of *NEUTRAL* judges. These judges are supposed to *JUDGE* the contestants based on their merits and their merits only.

If they fail to do so as they did in this case, in a reasonable scenario; a complain could be filed and they would be fired. (That rhymes)

And again: If the council is supposed to be composed of people from many different countries with similar influence on the decision; how come Temari allegedly doesn't get promoted only because of her country of origin?

On that note; would this mean that every country could prevent other countries from being promoted while tested on their home turf?

So in the end, this smells of malarkey. It's just written in bad taste and doesn't make any sense at all once you think about it.

It's a cheap cop out if you wanted to keep the cannon roster while changing the exam itself.
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