|Reviews for My Girlfriend, Who Lives In Canada|
| komakumair chapter 6 . 1/26
(sighs) I know this is an old story, but I'd been out of the fandom for a few years and wanted to get back into it. This was recced to me.
I mean, it's pretty average. Some spots shine brighter than others, interactions with Axel flow nicely and come naturally. Other parts, mainly interactions with Olette and Hayner and Pence, come off as forced. Olette's character seems- skewed. She seems to be playing into the tired Hyperactive Obnoxious Highschool Popular Girl trope, which is honestly a bit out of left field. And every... single girl in the story, with the exception of what we see of Namine (thus far) falls into this same characterization. Which is also a shame because there aren't that many girls in KH to begin with, but this is an axel/roxas story, so I can let a lack of meaningful women slide (laughs). But the Denim-Skirted-Flirt-Kairi and Man-Eating-I-Know-What's-Best-For-You Olette... eurgh. Those character types by themselves aren't bad ones, but when the non-AU characters aren't like that at ALL, it's just... why...
I like Axel a lot in here. Sufficiently engaging and charismatic with a unique flare to him :)
What I don't particularly appreciate are the... kind of unnecessary condescending references to the feminist movement? It totally rips me out of the "flow" of reading and makes me wince, take a break, and prep myself before I can soldier onward. It doesn't seem in-character for the speaking characters, and is kind of irrelevant. It feels like the author is shoehorning their personal views into the character's speak, rather than letting the characters speak for themselves. Which is unfortunate, as the opinion is kind of disgusting to boot, but not particularly surprising given... well, I feel like there's a lot of internalized girl-hate going on in here, from the hoards of cooing hive-mind women... I mean, ugh.
I guess I'll...
close out i guess...? Which is a shame because the kissing scene was really splendid.
| Guest chapter 1 . 1/7
It's me Kaxian again. Forgive the typos. I'm gradually turning into a grammar Nazi so I freaked out when I saw my typos and there was no option to go back and fix them. Heh.
PS: Did I mention how awesome this fanfic is?
| Guest chapter 1 . 1/7
I freaking loved this *.* I like oneshots and drabbles better, but this was so good! Do good that I actually finished reading all chapters, not getting bored for one moment. I liked how Roxas's character in this AU world of yours. And his background story. I have this on my bookmarks and go back to read my favorite parts, or just the whole thing again.
It's been so long since you wrote it's probably pointless saying this, especially your days as a KH fanfic writer are done, but I always fantasize about having a sequel to this. Axel and Roxas finally going to those vacations. Imagining how they grew as a couple, if they found obstacles in their relationship. Also, how his family reacted to his coming out, and how Namine's MS progressed. And his new social life, because he obviously went on to attend college. Well, a sequel.
I really enjoyed your writing. It was so professional. I felt like reading JK Rowling or something xD Very fine words and everything. I HATE, when a story's plot is good and is well organized but the grammar makes my eyes bleed. I don't even finish them. Well, that's it for my review. Kaxian
| the-true-Freya chapter 13 . 12/16/2013
thanks for the fantastic read
| Mimi the Brave chapter 13 . 9/9/2013
Awesome. I should probably write a coherent review after getting some sleep, it's again 3 am in the morning.. but let's just get it out, your story deserves a few more minutes of mania-driven brain activity! Brilliant fanfiction writers like you are not good for my insomnia issues. I loved this story, I loved the family setting of Naminé as Roxas' sister, I loved your super smart eloquent writing style, and so on. I really feel like drinking more coffee again, Axel's addiction seems to have awoken my old one. I loved his green hi-tops. I'm actually new on the AkuRoku ship, but captain, you got me hooked on that cruise! (that was so bad just now, sorry)
And you even threw in the SoRi for good measure, you're just a saint. With halo and all. (no that was angels...)
Lovely story. Real cool. I identified both with Roxas' 17 year old rage and Axel's end-twenties laid-back kind of crazy. Seriously tangible characterization, is what I'm saying.
Well, I sound like a 16 year old blogger, I should probably stop now! I'll hop over to your profile now. And about your story taking three years to finish, that doesn't matter one bit since yo it. I haven't ever finished a single fic, which is really not something to brag about.. ok I'll leave it alone now. On the off chance you're still active here, I'd like to let you know you're a kickass writer and I hope you get around to writing something completely of your own, because this story already had the potential to be a book itself.
| Fan.Ficton.Love chapter 13 . 8/18/2013
This was a really good story. I really enjoyed it. I loved the conversations Roxas had, especially between Roxas and Axel. I also loved the clothes you described Axel wearing before the incident in the mall. I would have loved to hang out with them. Thank you!
| Acyseis chapter 13 . 7/20/2013
Whoa. Like, I have no words that I feel aren't understatements for how much I love this fic. I've been seeing it around a quite a few people's favorites and I finally got around to reading it and my mind has been napalmed, blown, backhanded, and bandaged right back up. This is definitely one of my favorite fanfictions that I've ever read! 3
| Renamine chapter 13 . 7/15/2013
Because it would be messed up that I didn't review this fic, I have to say: this is awesome.
There, I said it. Even though I'm not really familiar with these games (although I want to be), I enjoyed this even when I clicked it on a whim. A lot. You did a really good job, and I'm kinda sad it ended abruptly. But oh well, you're still great.
| MoonlightLilyPad chapter 11 . 7/13/2013
I was reading again this story because I had a feeling that I was already forgetting it even though I read it just about a month ago. The first time round I read it I completely ignored the comment about tv tropes... However, this time round, I wasn't that lucky. I googled it and now I'm currently heading right down the road of the foretold "systematic failure" at nearly 80 miles per hour.
By the way, just in case it wasn't obvious by the mention of me re-reading the story, I think it is awsome. I really like your style of writing, you know? It's neat.
| noire-lycanthrope chapter 13 . 6/29/2013
Brilliant fic! I love your writing style and the way you set up Roxas and Axel's relationship (and how they met). :) One of my all-time favourite AkuRoku fanfics.
| LiveToLie chapter 13 . 6/21/2013
Good story. I think I've read it twice now? I can't remember, I just recall the title from some few years ago. I have to say, the wit in the dialogue was one of the things I enjoyed the most about this story. Axel and Roxas' quips back and forth were hilarious most of the time and it was their interactions that I continued the story for. That being said, if I'm going to review, I'm going to review the whole thing.
One of the few things that bothered me was the neatness. Like many of the pieces of writing referenced, your writing is very detailed, often times echoed with extremely long sentences and exaggerated metaphors. Not that there's anything wrong with that. During the first part of the story, this worked very well in your favor. But during the second half, when we were introduced to more action instead of conversation, it made things rather slow and boring. Example, Roxas' panic attack. It started out very exciting, but was eventually so worn down with words that I mostly lost any adrenaline associated with it. Sometimes short and to the point is better, especially when things start to get exciting. Another thing that was slightly bothersome for me was all the detail that was put into his high school group of friends, or even his sister and father. Not to say these characters weren't important, but they felt more like set pieces. There was no... background to them. The most exciting conversation he had with any of them was when he was apologizing to Olette and she was vulnerable. Because we were beginning to get to know her. It was almost as if we were expected to care about these characters without even getting to know them, which is very difficult to do and makes me want to skip their parts until I can get to the Axel pieces because he's that much more interesting.
Those are the only two bad things I really have to say however. Your vocabulary is phenomenal and I loved listening to the word choice used by the characters, even if their speech was a little advanced for persons of their age. And Roxas' dry back thoughts were always entertaining, if not sometimes long winded. Overall, one of my most favorite AkuRoku fics, actually probably my favorite for the pairing. I don't know if you'll get this review, seeing as this story has been posted so long, but if you do, I hope you continue to keep writing and I thoroughly enjoyed this story!
| PrincessofXing chapter 13 . 6/21/2013
I wanted to wit until I finished the entire thing (in one night I might add) to review this. Your writing style is so beautiful and to be able to convey practically a lifetime of a novel into thirteen short chapters is almost godly. Your character development was fantastic. The chemistry and the story and struggle of Roxas and Axel's relationship was perfectly paced, not rushed,and so well written that in chapter nine when Roxas was like I can't because you're my best friend I cried - literally tears falling, weeping. I stayed up til 3:41 am to finish this. Please continue to write such beautiful pieces.
| no exits chapter 13 . 3/23/2013
I absolutely love this. It's been quite a while since you finished everything up, but you definitely deserve all the praise you could possibly receive, even now. The relationship was, in my mind, very realistic and your writing style is casual, humorous, and somehow heartbreaking (when it needs to be!) all at once. Amazing story, thanks for writing, and keep up the great work!
| chicagoxpillowz chapter 13 . 2/10/2013
i suppose this one of those fanfictions that i've been avoiding for a really, really long time. i'm not entirely sure why, but maybe it was due to the over-whelming praise and my fear of being let down by good potential, or something. i don't know.
however, i am *extremely* glad that i decided to give it a try. better late than never, right?
this is one of those stories that i feel everyone needs to read. luckily, i started reading it at the perfect moment of my life. the first love of my life declared we take a break right while i was reading chapter 6 and, for some reason, that chapter just described how i felt so perfectly. all of roxas's emotions perfectly mirrored my own for the rest of the story, and i was just so, so happy that i finally had someone to relate to. though he's a fictional character, i felt the pain, and i understood the pain he was going through. and reading this genuinely made me feel less lonely.
the sheer amount of substance you managed to placed into 13 short chapters amazes me. each character had depth, and the storyline was simple and straight to the point. i love (and envy) your ability to make stories as closely linked with reality as possible. like, even though it was told from roxas's perspective, and he was an english major, his descriptions of things didn't deter me and weren't so verbose or romanticized that i wouldn't be able to read it. it was simply perfect. perfect because it was genuine and human and tangible. i don't know. i'm prolly not making much sense.
just thank you for writing this. i really, really needed it. it's helped me cope in ways i never thought a story could. this is something i would like to print and place in my shelf for other troubling times in my life, as i know they are bound to come. you seriously got me through something that had the potential to make a shell of my former self by simply creating something that i, and likely a lot of other people, could relate to. i love you, and i love this story very much.
again, i can not express my thanks enough.
please, never stop writing. you have a gift that i can only dream about.
| Theresalwaysacatch chapter 10 . 1/25/2013
'Kay, well I was gonna be one of those people that reads a fanfic ages after it's been completed and feels that a favorite is enough of a nod to the author. BUT after seeing all the T.S. Eliot references (especially Prufrock-ahhhhhhhhhh), the bookfag in me jizzed all over everything and I went from really liking this fic to absolutely loving it.
Just thought you should know. ;)