I must say I find your story lacking...as for plot, a small one, not equal to any of the actual games, as for grammar, multiple mistakes, but most of all, your story hardly even fit a short story length; it was not even five pages! I think you must work on another story, perhaps one with a better plot.

Interesting, although I have to say it needs work. Minor errors it the work, most being that you repeated a sentence. Reasonable, though, I look forward to seeing more work.

Nice story. Can't wait to see more. (though you did repeat a sentence in one part of it, I believe it was, "there was something in the forest". Didn't know if you meant to do that or not, but just a heads up.)

it was cool hopen to here more from you