PB

I LOVED IT!I really can't tell you how much I enjoyed this and how impressed I am with your work! It was so much fun to see through Ron's eyes and watch his growth. I have laughed out loud, teared up and smiled all the way through this! I don't know what exactly you do in real life but you have a REAL talent and gift that I am so happy you have shared with us! I am in love with your other work and can't wait for the last chapter of Faultlines. Please know that your work is appreciated and don't stop writing!

I just adored every word of this story. I sincerely hope you give tqp another chance. We'd hate to lose you on account of no reviews.

Pinky Brown, this SFOGI is cracking me up! You are absolutely spot on with the teen boy insight!

Pinky Brown- I have found that I enjoy feed back from authors just as much as authors enjoy reviews, go figure.

So here's the review you asked for (on that other site).

1-You make Ron a little more insecure than I thought he was.

2-I didn’t think Lavender was a slag like some portray her, just an “air head” girl with a crush. (too bad he loves Hermione)

3-I am glad that you too saw that Ron was tired of Lavender by Christmas time.

4-Hermione is as much to blame for the length of this fight as Ron is, he did try and talk to her after the Christmas break.

5-Hermione has just as many insecurities as Ron concerning their relationship. These were chapter for me when I read HBP.

6-I loved Ron’s month long plan in April to break up with Lavender. She should have taken the hint after he stopped hanging out with her after her poisoning.

7-I agree there was plenty of hints in HBP that Ron and Hermione were together after the break-up. I was surprises when DH came out and they were still “just friends”. I loved the “have to take a book back to the library code”.

8-Your story seemed to stall a little after the battle and Dumbledore’s death. I know there would be a lot of feelings and questions with everything that happened, but it was too long and slow for me.

9-I hated the “break-up” I know they had to help Harry, but they sure made it hard on themselves, didn’t they.

Well, there’s my review in short. I really started writing one nearly as long as your chapters, but decided I didn’t have the talent. I can’t wait to finish your other story, good luck in finishing it and in all your writings.

Hello!

Just finished your story and wanted to let you know how wonderful it is. You have some brilliant one-liners all the way through - Maybe I could hold his coat in reference to Ron helping harry made me laugh outloud and that hurts right now as I have a couple dozen stitches along the side of my face and neck! I think the story has loads of strengths: Ron's voice is very good, I like your take on his relationships with family members, I think both the beginning and ending are very strong. The mid-section fluctuates a bit - I thought you got the typical teenage boy enthuasiasm which ROn showed early on with Lavender dead-on (I think it might have lasted a bit longer), I thought his early reflections on being poisoned were good, I just thought it might have had a more lasting effect. I thought Harry would have slipped into the Diary more - I know Ron was looking for a place to write about Hermione but with all the stuff Harry was sharing about the horcruxes, even if Ron didn't write what Harry was saying, I think he would have reflected a bit on what he could. Ron is a chessmaster - I think the growing picture of Voldermort would have interested him somewhat, maybe not as much as Hermione's knees (he is a teenage boy), but at least somewhat. Almost despite himself. Would Ron see the similarities between V and Harry? How would a boy from such a warm loving family view Voldermort's early life, his choice to kill what family he could identify, would he have some understanding for V's need to take a job which offered real earning power - to have some nice material things? I think Ron would have refelcted on these things. Finally, though I'm usually a canon girl, I thought your development of the seven week romance lovely and believeable - it coud have happened exactly that way (and might have made the camping much more bearable, the horcrux less weighty, changed a lot I suppose).Finally, I thought the ending was brilliant. I know you disliked DH, but I still think that you could really do a great Ron's Diary about that whole period of time - you certainly have his voice spot-on. I've greatly enjoyed reading this and hope to have the time to read some more of your work. Take care, heather

I absolutely loved it. Every single word. I can't even tell you how many times I laughed out loud at Ron. You seriously have a gift for writing the mind of a seventeen year old boy. I loved especially his thoughts in parentheses when he and Hermione have their Argument, and he basically agrees with her through the whole thing. So funny. And very sweet that he was carving their initials everywhere.

Their visits to the girls bathroom were an awesome touch, and their secret code about the library was inspired.

There's much much more that I loved and I'm planning a re-read where I promise to review every chapter. Just know that it is absolute perfection and I can't believe that this story was rejected anywhere.

Now, go finish Faultlines so you can put me out of my misery. :)

It has been such fun reading this story! Just wonderful, as are your other two. Forgotten favorite line from May: "I love it when she laughs. I have to keep thinking of things to say to keep her laughing. I always wondered what the point of me was and it turns out that's it." Kind of sums up Ron at his happiest.

I like the way the first 3 weeks are so full of the ups and downs of just living life. The red high-tops and the knickers poem were the best! :-) But then, in one day, that normal life ceases to exist, and is replaced by horrible uncertainty. It is a good ending, though, because we know they are all wonderful, strong and courageous kids and they will be successful! Thank you for the wonderful read!

Side note on Ron/Anna: OK, my twins are 19, and I can promise you, if either of them were to bring home a 26-year-old I would Freak Out(inwardly, of course.) Yes, I know there are plenty of happy couples with even twice that age difference, but they are Not My Kids. Which makes absolutely no sense whatsoever, since I guess I would consider Ron my kid much more than Anna, and he is the one who is older. So never mind, just finish you beautiful story your way and I know we will all love it!

Thanks for the link. Enjoyed the chapter - I think you've nailed the convuluted reasoning of a teenage boy. And you've cheered me up despite my stitches...

Lots of fantasticness this month for Ron & Hermione! Favorite lines:

-I'll never say (the f-word) in a church again…

-Lavender's shoes. They were like an early warning system. Clatter, clatter, clatter… "RON!"

-Malfoy...I hate him, but I don't actually want him to die, especially before I can beat the crap out of him myself.

-"You were brilliant today" - Yes, I have heard that before. Anna says it in "Faultlines." Hmm. Searching for meaning. (She is much too young for him, by the way. IMHO.)

-Those three minutes are like some sort of Quidditch World Cup Final of snogging; I'm Bulgaria and she's Ireland, and we are just the best in the world.

Those are a lot of favorites, aren't they? Oh well, I will enjoy it while it lasts! :-)

Such a fun chapter! Mercy, Lavender! (tee hee) And Ron's awkwardness with her is hilarious!

I loved the conversation with Hermione about "Is the good answer yes?" She is just dying for him to make a move, but ends up having to take matters into her own hands. Actually, Ron's 2-step plan fell into place without him having to do anything at all but wait 30 days. (And just be himself.) :-)

Hi PB,

I saw this story at the Quidditch Pitch and I really really liked your Ron story. I tried to leave a review at QP and think it did not work...(me and such stuff just don't work...). As I have no patience when it comes to wait for updates, I googled a bit and found your stories here. So, you see: here is a fan of yours!

I basically hoped you would continue with something from Ron's view for the last book. I love his funny remarks and him being totally confused about the whole emotional stuff. Poor guy!

Go on writing - I love it!

Sadness. It didn't help at all that I knew how it would end. Very well done.

Aw, Ron & his emotional roller coaster! We can really feel his exuberance, in contrast to last month's depression! He survives poisoning, can't remember 2 weeks of his life, and the most important thing to him is that he and Hermione are talking again. :-) LOVE IT! Also love:

-his whole description of how his head & mouth felt when he woke up, funny!

-how it felt holding her hand, "so I just lay there holding her hand, and that seemed alright to me. It felt nice." Sweet.

-and his visit to Hermione's muggle community. "Actually, let's face it, it's not Muggles generally I find so fascinating, its just one in particular." So cute, Ron!

Oh, alright, three Galleons, six sickles and a chocolate frog, and that's my final offer!

lol poor Ron and his low self esteem. Bloody brilliant line, mate!

OMG, YAY!

wow.. you did such a good job here! i'm like all giddy and stuff!