Reviews for Illegitimate
MonstarzGirl chapter 1 . 10/6/2011
You've gotta make this into a story!
beautifulmonster1318 chapter 1 . 7/6/2011
Your style of writing is really good! This is really interesting too. You should make into an actual story! I would love you forever. xD
Shiver 03 chapter 1 . 8/23/2007
good job! I really enjoyed that! I found myself reading it over and over again! LOL

Well Done :-)
harmoniusFrenzy chapter 1 . 7/11/2007
Hehe it gets me confused but the little mini-stories are fun to read.I think this is a pretty good uh..."story"-or "stories".:)
loonytunecrazy chapter 1 . 7/9/2007
very good
Tha Kalligrapha chapter 1 . 7/8/2007
You've produced a dozen or so premises here, and your writing is admirably good, but I'd like to see more. As it stands here, the story is too vague to convey any real message, yet it leaves the door wide open for continuation. I urge you to play some of these moments out a little further and see what happens.
acosta perez jose ramiro chapter 1 . 7/8/2007
I got lost a few times here, but dialogues and action were good.

Keep the good writing.
secretoftetra chapter 1 . 7/8/2007
hey that was really good! i liked it alot!