omg! as you can tell from my pen name i am a huge fan of max ride. i love star and this story is so origanal unlike anything i have ever read on fanfiction great job and keep up the great work

good story.

I'm not sure wether ot not it ended...

Did it end?

if it did

NO

if it didn't

YAY

I love this story, its inspired me to write my own!

I better get to work on that one...

OnyxSand, look me up please :)

an ok chapter.

lata

you could have gone with a better way of describeing stars powers but all and all a good chapter . movin' 2 the next 1.

Fangfire18

great chapter cant wait to read on

No...I think I mentioned the jeb-is not the voice already. That was near the begining. Slipt personality is a side effect of what ever they did...hope it will wear off. But off course, I love my fanfic. A I love making things pscho-thrillers like movies. And Iwill try to give her a weakness like someone said. My original fanfic was planned as having Star, like the real Star, me and my Breathless stories. Star from Crystaralight, named Serallina and magical. Not a science experiemnt. But in this story she is.

~*Star* (the real Star) As for Darkstar, she's like the evilish part of me.

yup, splitpersonality. I was right!

Other than that, I am clueless. Jeb isn't the Voice? Is that your own idea, or am I accidentally getting sneak previews into MR4? (which STILL hasn't come out yet here! GRR!)

Anywho, update!

OMG! O

DARKSTAR! Ohmygawd Star. SHES SO EVIL. O

She has really good lines too haha. The "lets play dodgeball!" and the simple "... I helped him. D" lines were so evil-yet-innocent at the same time. IT PWNED. XD

WRITE. TEH. NEXT. CHAPTER. I. MUST. READ. MORE. MORE!

Hehe.

WHAT? Evil? Waitaminute... Does she have a multi-personality now? Is she gonna wake up fine, but then turn into Darkstar at random moments for the rest of the story?

Cool. Keep writing! I loved it! The OC could have been a disastrous mary sue but you pulled through and managed to prevent that. I'd like to see at least a little Faxness and a tip, it'd be cool if she was left slightly injured in the accident, since if her powers are increased then itll be a rare success. (Remember Iggy? His "enhancement"?) Also if you can, say, make them go into town and have a run-in with a friend from Star's past, or some umorous run-in with say her ex? I know I'm rambling. Sorry. Good story, and keep writin'! Will you R&R mine?

OMG Cliffhanger! great chapter, and happy late birthday! update soon!

-CheshireMax

Well, crap. that sucks, i thought all the erasers died? update soon!

-CheshireMax

That was a really good idea for how to get into the hospital! update soon!

-CheshireMax

I love this chapter! I think this is the best one yet! Great job! I can't wait for more!