|Reviews for Moving Forward|
| utsukushi tenshi chapter 1 . 4/26
Thank you for sharing this wonderful story with us! it was such a pleasure to read this well written SessKag fic of yours hope to see more from you! ja ne!
| Rouge Vulpes chapter 65 . 2/8
Great story! Well written! Wish there was more! I want to know what happens after!
| Quickening chapter 65 . 11/26/2017
So, got this entire story read and there are things I loved about it and things I didn't really care for. First off, you're a good writer in regards to using proper grammar and spelling and such. Your attention to detail is excellent and helped to draw the reader in that much more. I was impressed by that.
I also liked your original characters, they fit well within the storyline without being over-the-top. Lucy especially was a great character. Not many writers pull OCs off well, but you managed.
In regards to the plot itself, however, I felt it was a really weak at points. For example, your ending. Kagome gives birth to two full-blooded youkai and you don't explain how or why and then the story is over. Um ... okay?
Then, there is still the fact that Inuyasha somehow becomes this bigshot producer and not once is it explained how that is possible. Inuyasha jumped through time with Kagome. He was a half-wild hanyou from 500 years in the past who had no proper education to speak of, and yet in just a few short years he somehow gained all the knowledge he needed - from basic elementary school learning straight up through the college career he'd have probably needed to learn how to produce movies - to successfully build a career. HOW? It would have made way more sense if he'd lived out those 500 years the same as the other youkai gaining the knowledge and skills he needed. The way you wrote it ... it just wasn't believable. At all.
I also don't like that you turned him into an asshole. He was out of character. After everything he and Kagome went through, I don't believe he'd ever deliberately hurt her like that and I don't believe they'd ever hate each other. They'd still be friends, if nothing else. I can't help feeling you turned him into an asshole simply as an excuse to get him out of the way for Sesshoumaru to jump in, and that's just a copout. I've read other stories where it was handled so much better. Everything written by Forthright, for example. I guess I prefer stories where Inuyasha finds his place within a family, even if only as Kagome's brother.
Kagome ... why did you make her so weak? She's supposed to be this incredibly powerful kickass miko who can purify youkai with just a touch, but she just bends over and lets Sesshoumaru basically RAPE her? TWICE? Why didn't she purify his ass? A few zings to his naughty bits would've knocked him back to his senses REAL fast. Or she could've just thrown up a barrier and knocked him through a wall or something.
Oh, but then he couldn't have knocked her up with his demonspawn and then there goes all the drama and angst and the plot.
So, yeah. Technically you're a pretty skilled writer, but in regards to storytelling I felt you could've done so much better. Don't get me wrong, overall I did enjoy the story, but those major issues there did tend to bug me all the way through.
| Quickening chapter 56 . 11/18/2017
Loved the Labyrinth reference, but his name is Jareth, not Jared. :)
| Quickening chapter 23 . 11/13/2017
I sort of don’t like how you turned Inuyasha into the bad guy. I’m also wondering HOW he ever became a movie producer in modern times. That would have required him to attend school, college, learn to read and write, learn how to live in modern world...
That’s a lot of story you left out there and it doesn’t make much sense. Otherwise, it’s a good fic.
| Koneko chapter 5 . 10/8/2017
Kagome is really bratty in this. Extremely. Like... Inuyasha loved Kikyo and now he has a new girl. Get over it.
| SessKagShipper2003 chapter 3 . 7/10/2017
Fricken Sesshomaru what a stalker lol
| BelleMorte1989 chapter 11 . 6/16/2017
Lol souta active and kagome drying up
| BelleMorte1989 chapter 7 . 6/16/2017
Whoa that kiss certainly brings back memories
| BelleMorte1989 chapter 1 . 6/16/2017
I feel as if the summary does the story an injustice and this is only the first chapter.
| Arisu-chanthehappykitty chapter 65 . 4/3/2017
Amazing I loved it xxxxxxx it was funny as well as serious xxx
| insanity1911 chapter 65 . 10/31/2016
Wow...I so loved this story...kind of a roller coaster trip but I loved it. Thx for sharing .
| natkyolee chapter 65 . 5/31/2016
It was really a nice ride
| kikiqqq chapter 42 . 5/31/2016
Both of them r so frustrating
| Undertheskys chapter 65 . 3/31/2016
LOVED IT, such an amazing story