Reviews for Moving Forward |
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![]() ![]() Me gustó mucho |
![]() ![]() ![]() Kagome's mother seriously needs to move to france with her new husband and leave the Higurashi's alone now as she is no longer one of them... I have zero respect for that woman... she let her 15 year old daughter run around in a short skirt just asking to be taken so that woman has no room to talk about anything |
![]() ![]() ![]() don't you know it was former daughter in law as Mrs. Higurashi had married Grandpa's son a Mr. Higurashi they live at the Higurashi Shrine... woman in Japan don't usually work after the are married and grandpa took in his daughter in law and 2 grandchildren after his son died. so now mrs what ever would have to leave the Shrine as she is no longer related to grandpa she is no longer the Higurashi responsibility and now mrs whatever would be expected to move to france to be with her new hubby |
![]() ![]() ![]() you do know Kagome's mother has no room to talk she allowed her 15 year old daughter to run around feudal Japan in a micro mini skirt unable to even defend herself... I have no respect for that woman and you got some facts about Sesshomaru wrong he got his arm back before the defeat of Naraku along with getting a new sword one that is very dangerous and deadly if scratched... check of the episodes about Magatsuhi.. thanks to Sesshomaru Kagome's powers were also unsealed so she is even more powerful though she needs to train her powers |
![]() ![]() ![]() No se porque pero sentí estar leyendo un manhua historia |
![]() ![]() ![]() I know this was written a while agocough: Windows Vista reference) but I'm happy I found it. It is a fantastic story. Thank you! |
![]() ![]() ![]() Thank you for sharing this wonderful story with us! it was such a pleasure to read this well written SessKag fic of yours hope to see more from you! ja ne! |
![]() ![]() ![]() Great story! Well written! Wish there was more! I want to know what happens after! |
![]() ![]() ![]() So, got this entire story read and there are things I loved about it and things I didn't really care for. First off, you're a good writer in regards to using proper grammar and spelling and such. Your attention to detail is excellent and helped to draw the reader in that much more. I was impressed by that. I also liked your original characters, they fit well within the storyline without being over-the-top. Lucy especially was a great character. Not many writers pull OCs off well, but you managed. In regards to the plot itself, however, I felt it was a really weak at points. For example, your ending. Kagome gives birth to two full-blooded youkai and you don't explain how or why and then the story is over. Um ... okay? Then, there is still the fact that Inuyasha somehow becomes this bigshot producer and not once is it explained how that is possible. Inuyasha jumped through time with Kagome. He was a half-wild hanyou from 500 years in the past who had no proper education to speak of, and yet in just a few short years he somehow gained all the knowledge he needed - from basic elementary school learning straight up through the college career he'd have probably needed to learn how to produce movies - to successfully build a career. HOW? It would have made way more sense if he'd lived out those 500 years the same as the other youkai gaining the knowledge and skills he needed. The way you wrote it ... it just wasn't believable. At all. I also don't like that you turned him into an asshole. He was out of character. After everything he and Kagome went through, I don't believe he'd ever deliberately hurt her like that and I don't believe they'd ever hate each other. They'd still be friends, if nothing else. I can't help feeling you turned him into an asshole simply as an excuse to get him out of the way for Sesshoumaru to jump in, and that's just a copout. I've read other stories where it was handled so much better. Everything written by Forthright, for example. I guess I prefer stories where Inuyasha finds his place within a family, even if only as Kagome's brother. Kagome ... why did you make her so weak? She's supposed to be this incredibly powerful kickass miko who can purify youkai with just a touch, but she just bends over and lets Sesshoumaru basically RAPE her? TWICE? Why didn't she purify his ass? A few zings to his naughty bits would've knocked him back to his senses REAL fast. Or she could've just thrown up a barrier and knocked him through a wall or something. Oh, but then he couldn't have knocked her up with his demonspawn and then there goes all the drama and angst and the plot. So, yeah. Technically you're a pretty skilled writer, but in regards to storytelling I felt you could've done so much better. Don't get me wrong, overall I did enjoy the story, but those major issues there did tend to bug me all the way through. |
![]() ![]() ![]() Loved the Labyrinth reference, but his name is Jareth, not Jared. :) |
![]() ![]() ![]() I sort of don’t like how you turned Inuyasha into the bad guy. I’m also wondering HOW he ever became a movie producer in modern times. That would have required him to attend school, college, learn to read and write, learn how to live in modern world... That’s a lot of story you left out there and it doesn’t make much sense. Otherwise, it’s a good fic. |
![]() ![]() ![]() Kagome is really bratty in this. Extremely. Like... Inuyasha loved Kikyo and now he has a new girl. Get over it. |
![]() ![]() ![]() Fricken Sesshomaru what a stalker lol |
![]() ![]() ![]() Lol souta active and kagome drying up |
![]() ![]() ![]() Whoa that kiss certainly brings back memories |