Reviews for Idle
144829 chapter 1 . 1/4/2009
I like it. :) I loved the concept about being idle and all. :)
SakuraJade chapter 1 . 11/14/2007
Nice little one shot, very deep and serious, an interesting side to see for Nakuru since she was always crazy-out going in that form in the original show. Well written too. Rather short but I know that's what you were going for since it was a one-shot. From the looks of the dates on your other T&N fics you are relatively new to the T&N pairing. It's great to see another author take interest in writing for this pairing since they are so cute but so seldom focused on. I see you have one multi-chapter fic in the works too for T&N pairing and I hope you make more soon! I'm not much of a one shot person and most of the T&N fics are just that _ It'd be great to see more mutli-chapter, in depth storyline fics from you since your writing is really good _
Onomatopoetician chapter 1 . 11/3/2007
xxx chapter 1 . 7/22/2007

oh wow, this is soo sweet! :D and in a not overly-done way too! i really like this story; you did a great job on it. YAY!

but, if you really want constructive criticism, try looking out for your wording? there are a few sentences that could be clearer, or phrased differently, to create a better effect. just as examples:

1. "The intense rays of the sun illuminating her golden brown tresses piled upon her shoulders." - it sounds like the sun is piled upon her shoulders, not her hair.

2. "A boring day, he thought, even adding that anything is better than being idle like this." - maybe try: "It had been a rather boring day, he thought, and added that anything would've beat being idle."

but those are just personal opinions :D hahaha. you did a great job on it, so yeah. keep up your good work!