Reviews for TEACHINGS
Guest chapter 1 . 8/7
I cried the whole way through you are really good at emotions in these keep it up I love this
anon dork chapter 1 . 12/31/2014
This is incredible! well done, I especially love what you did with leaving out the quotations and how it shows that Ed can barely form a thought and is "out of it", whether from the a. shock of the situation, b. tiredness, c. concussion d. All of the above. it's a very clever move and made everything very realistic. (I apologize for this anonymous dork blabber but for srsly your stories are just lovely)
ColdBlooded98 chapter 1 . 9/28/2014
The story's always a bit less confusing with quotation marks around the words people are saying _'' unless that's the style of the story, not sure. But the story itself, definitely liking it. I really love/hate these kinda stories where someone ends up taking a bullet for the other, the way you wrote it, it made my heart twinge a lot ;w;
Ruby chapter 1 . 5/7/2014
I liked it a lot and I thought the intro was really amazing. if anything I think maybe putting quotes around the talking would be helpful, but everything else is great :)
xXxRizaHawkeyexXx chapter 1 . 7/26/2013
That was a sweet story! Love ur parental! Royed!
RainFlame chapter 1 . 6/7/2013
I really like the style you wrote this in. It really wasn't confusing at all, which surprises me! Excellent work C:
Starsmith chapter 1 . 5/23/2013
Liked the style! The ending was the best!
Cartoon Cow chapter 1 . 5/8/2013
i was wondering about the lack of quotations but yes it was very clear to me who was talking and who wasnt. Great story well portrayed )
Shiroi Ichigo-chan chapter 1 . 5/5/2013
Aaaaaaw! You portrayed that confusion wonderfully! This was awesome! Short but sweet!
Thank you for writing this!


Shiroi Ichigo
Moon6Shadow chapter 1 . 11/30/2012
The confusing way of writing fits the story perfectly, particularly if you consider the fact that Ed's suffering from a head injury, probably a high state of shock and watching someone who always seemed untouchable dieing.

I really enjoyed the writing style since the confusing manner of Ed's thoughts really highlights the emotional aspect and draws the reader in.
Amarissia chapter 1 . 11/4/2012
Beautiful story, very touching. Thank you for it.
Wolf chapter 1 . 8/31/2012
Love it! I love the more fathery kind of Roy to Ed. there's so much slash of them. But I see him more like a father figure (who won't really admit that he cares as much as he does). Nice to see some fics out there that agree.
too-much-inspiration chapter 1 . 8/2/2012
The confusion was conveyed well by the vague style. It gave the whole passage a rather distant, fuzzy feeling, especially with how you didn't use any character's names except when they were talking. You did a good job applying the style and keeping it obvious where people were talking even without the quotation marks. My only complaint is that Ed seemed a little bit too confused and weepy, but that easily explained by both the head injury and the assumption that this is a pre-series story.
flaminghotalchemist chapter 1 . 8/28/2011
I really liked this story, especailly the way you formatted it. It was a little confusing when I started reading it but then realised what it was that you had done. Well done. :)
riptocs chapter 1 . 6/27/2011
I'm super impressed with how well the style of your writing went with the air of confusion in the story! It was as breathtaking as if I was actually there, feeling what Edward felt. I would love to try writing like that sometime, though I doubt I could make it work as well as you did.
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