|Reviews for Harry Potter and The Second Chance|
| Guest chapter 2 . 7/6
Ok, not sure what really is tjis story about, but realy a rerun of year fibe and he keep doing what the stupid realative force him to do is bad. Add to that you seems to think money is unlimited and pay the fat moron 500 to leave harry on the ally, then make it look him moronic by doing a realative good bargain by droping the price of a trunk to 400 and then pay 500. Really something is not good here, anyway a bad story with nothing to redeem
| Calmzone1 chapter 15 . 5/21
I'm actually very curious to see where you are taking this story. I have been enjoying it (I just wish that it wasn't full of fanfic spelling errors - except instead of accept, (location)there instead of (possessive)their, draw instead of drawer, back instead of bag or backpack, weary(tired)/wary(nervous or insecure), bleary eyed- tired, blurry eyed - not seeing clearly, and many more. I am trying to find out if it's google translate or if that is how things are spelled as English somewhere else - no offense intended, it's just really frustrating reading it as it distracts from the story
| English Major chapter 6 . 5/1
Opening quotations ("speech") should be directly next to the first letter of whatever your character is saying. No space. It would behoove you to review the grammatical rules of the English language.
| English Major chapter 4 . 5/1
You have some truly excellent ideas and some unique plot twists that I have really enjoyed. However, your English skills need some severe attention. One cat: cat. More than one cat: cats (NOT cat's). One Potter: Potter. More than one Potter: Potters (NOT Potter's). There are no apostrophes in pluralizations. This is Primary School English you need to review. Belonging to one Potter: Potter's. Belonging to more than one Potter: Potters' (or Potters's). The possessive requires an apostrophe.
Not only do you not know how to use an apostrophe, you can apparently not differentiate between homonyms: there/their/they're are misused almost every single time. To/too, were/we're, and your/you're are also consistently misplaced.
Keep writing! You can greatly improve your readability by paying more attention to every word you type. Please do not take my constructive criticism as a slight on your storytelling. You have talent for bringing your own characterizations to an imaginative plot line, and further grammatical editing can only improve your writing.
| madnessdownunder2 chapter 15 . 5/1
good start, I look forward to what you do next
| StoneTheLoner chapter 4 . 4/11
Re-tag this story with the appropriate tags that should've been on it from the start, angst and drama.
| NatNicole chapter 5 . 12/17/2015
I like your take on Ginny, and Harry's common sense in this (I think Rowling made her characters stupid on purpose for the plot's sake).
| Guest chapter 15 . 9/9/2015
Dud its ok everybody has a life some times its a soft rain somtomes it hales somtimes it monsoons k no big just keep youself ok great or awesome even the better you are the better your work will be and i prefer your health to work ratios got it.
| Guest chapter 10 . 9/7/2015
I'm sorry but I have to say this it really just pisses me off, u are just so fucking annoying plz for the love of God be original ur story is fine I don't care that Harry has powers, I don't care about his flip floppy emotions because he's Harry and he's a teenager, what I do care about is that ur having me read the order of the Phoenix all over again because ur to damn lazy to come up with ur own plot, so remember this if anything, Harry in ur fic has 1 years experience more than he does in cannon he isn't going to do the things the same way and be sure as hell isn't about to say the exact same damn thing he said the first time around, I absolutely hate it when ppl do that think up ur own shit that's y we have fanfiction!
| Kingfisher chapter 6 . 6/8/2015
Sorry but do you realise how hilarious your atrocious spelling. I hope you realise that by putting "rouge dementors" you're actually saying that the dementors are red. Rouge is French for red. "Rogue" on the other hand is the word I think you meant to use. You really need a beta or someone who can correct your spelling. I've so far put up with your incorrect "there" instead of "their" but this - this was too (not 'to' as you keep putting) funny. Rouge dementors. Yes Umbridge - there are no such things as rouge dementors.
| draco7347 chapter 15 . 5/29/2015
love this story please bring out new chapters
| Nemaya chapter 15 . 4/27/2015
I hope you haven't abandoned this story, even after 4,5 years of no updates. I look forward to more chapters.
| CheshireCatt13 chapter 15 . 4/10/2015
Just wanted to say that this was an enjoyable read and that I feel that it's too bad that this will never be finished. Regardless, thanks for putting the time into this that you did.
| R. A Cross chapter 15 . 2/28/2015
This story made me cry . I wish that you update this story because this one is a good a story
| Mmars69 chapter 15 . 1/17/2015
I just started reading this story a couple days ago but I really like it.
I hope you haven't abandoned it. Thanks for writing.
With 700000 stories out there it will be years and years before I have red all of them I hope to read.
Please, keep up the great work.