Reviews for Demonic Nemesis
john chapter 3 . 8/4/2007
An idea about the Kyubi knows about Naruto's scroll so she should probably know how to make or find more of the special ore it is made this to TenTen's father along with some made up smithing process that reguires a considerable ammount of Naruto's blood and you have an indestructable sword(that can only be touched and used by Naruto and his bloodline) that has whatever special abilities you want it to,because of Naruto's blood used to make it
The Holistic Detective Agent chapter 3 . 8/4/2007
Zanpak-to

Hinata not in harem
xXDeidara-chanXx chapter 3 . 8/4/2007
I love the idea:

Naruto a medic-nin!

Vote:

Hidden weapons

Hinata not in Harem

Lovely chap, really great!

XD
sujjin chapter 3 . 8/4/2007
while id like to see a special sword just to see what you come up with its your choice,

and i think hinata should be in the harem, you already formed a small start when you had him sneak in her room.
Ping-Pong chapter 3 . 8/4/2007
Voting:

Zanpak-to or Special Sword (I'm sure Naruto could find something quite special about his heirlooms, and try to make it original, the weapon I mean, like the sword isn't just a Death God's weapon or what not)

Hinata in Harem (but please don't put like 10 or 20 people in the harem, I wouldn't know how you would manage that, just make it realistic)
hibiki96 chapter 2 . 8/4/2007
Noo! Hinata really shouldn't be in the harem! (Personal Opinion) But if she has to, I can deal with it... Great chapter though, I really liked the history thing! Update soon!
AnimeMaster168 chapter 3 . 8/4/2007
Great chapter. It's got a lot of character development in it and I like the creativity of the punishment that Naruto's going to be subjected to courtesy of the Hyuuga. As for the poles on the weapons, I'm thinking that since Naruto's got the training with Iruka, then there's the training with Kyuubi, and then he has that hole hokage and medic thing going on, putting in a weapon would make it a cluttered with his training and the things he learns. I mean, if you really want him to use a weapon, just make it so that it's not something that he depends on a whole lot. And for the voting for if Hinata should be in the harem or not, I say put her in. You already have a great setup down for the fourth chapter and it would be the perfect place to put in Hinata and Naruto's relationship to grow since he's going to be over there everyday for a month. Have her peeking at him while he does the laundry or something in the beginning and then maybe in later chapters, he comes and starts his punishment, Hinata decides to help him, while she's doing her thing and helping with the laundry, she gets clumsy and drops water over him while taking a bucket of water to some place, and a big bubble/water fight ensues drenching both the kids and the other's that are doing the laundry too. It'd be pretty funny if later the two get reprimanded by Hiashi and Naruto's stuck doing the laundry for another month. That'd be a pretty funny chapter. Of course, that would be much later into the story when Naruto and Hinata have become more comfortable with each other and Hinata isn't fainting and blushing as much around him. Well, that's just a suggestion from me. Even without that, the fic is going great and I'm looking forward to the next chapter. Hope it's up soon.

AnimeMaster168
Virus chapter 3 . 8/4/2007
Hinata in the Harem please. Update soon.
blood1234321 chapter 3 . 8/4/2007
Guns or projectile weapons
sploft chapter 3 . 8/4/2007
nice chapter, i like how you make all of your chapters long ones.

for the votes i'd say a special sword and a hinata in harem, also try improving on you spelling, the error i've seen most is a bad spelling of barely. other than that your doing great keep up the good work.
nevets309 chapter 3 . 8/4/2007
Hm not bad idea about training with the Hyuuga.

About the poll for Hinata, i'll say not to put her

in the Harem. It's not that i don't like naru/hina pairings

but it's a liitle hard to write them getting together and

make it realistic.
Boejangles chapter 1 . 8/4/2007
This is for Chapter 3!

Okay for weapon I say go with author choice.

Heh I dont really care weather Hinata is part of the Harem of not. I guess it depends why and her personality.

Anyway I am liking the character development. This is the first fic i have read where Naruto wanted to be a medic nin and I like it.
Kai Dragoon chapter 3 . 8/4/2007
Story looking good so far. As for weapon only one I'm against is Zanpak-to since the Bleach crossoverness is like the thing this year and rather not see bankai in every other Naruto fic I read. So other then that pick whatever.

Hinata in harem, he already seen her panties so why not. Plus it could be funny if her closet pervert side leaks out on occasion.
lambadi chapter 3 . 8/4/2007
I love the story so far, it's so hard to find a story I truly take my time reading by sometimes re-reading paragraphs over and over to make sure I don't miss anything. All of your chapters are well thought-out it flows quite nicely, except for a few parts, one of which is in the 1st chapter where Kyuubi begins describing the advance in his senses. In the dialogue before that it is never mentioned, and then it immediately jumps into how his senses are so much more powerful. It's not a huge problem, but fixing it next time you update would be nice (or before then as long as you don't go making it look like another update happened when it didn't :P)

For the polls, here's my votes:

Author's choice

Hinata in Harem

For the weapon, I truly hope it's a good weapon that would work for the story, and you aren't picking some obscure weapon that has limited use and requires a completely different approach to combat. I'd rather prefer one that flows from one form of combat to another, but I suppose a large part of that is how you write the fight scenes.

As for Hinata being in the harem, I'm partial towards NaruHina (where proper emphasis on how it got to that point and/or subtle changes in personality from early canon are shown) and I think with the little groundwork you've laid down in the Hyuuga views slightly changing in this chapter, that it would be acceptable to them, possibly even encouraged.

I also hope Tenten is in the harem, along with FemKyuubi, which would round off nicely with Hinata completing it!
anon chapter 3 . 8/4/2007
Hinata not in harem. If her sister was put in eventually, I could live with that, but not her.
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