Reviews for Demonic Nemesis
Dragon Man 180 chapter 2 . 7/30/2007
Nice chapter. I vote for special weapons, they're so cool! I think Naruto could be able to see Hinata is interested in him thanks to his new senses and hopefully he'll wise up to her crush on him soon. I really want Hinata in the harem because she truly cares about Naruto and having his love would make her much stronger.
Xi3 chapter 2 . 7/30/2007
Are we going to see Kyuubi as a human? I didn't catch if she has a human form or not. Also, it would be nice to see her as a main player in the Harem, along with Anko. They just fit so well together. Anko got basically the same treatment because of Orichimaru's betrayal, and Kyuubi has been with Naruto since birth basically. It especially works if she already likes and respects him, and vice-versa. And due to your own explanation of summoning contracts and the use of Kage Bunshin, it is feasable for her to "get out" for a little while, much like a summon. Anyways, I cant wait for the update! Is Hiashi going to end up as an evil, sadistic, conniving bastard? Love the story!

Xi3
sandmonkeys chapter 3 . 7/30/2007
i vote taijutsu style maximizing use of claws... like a weapon style being changed into taijutsu because he has real claws and doesnt need metal ones
keios's legion chapter 3 . 7/30/2007
I'm liking where this has the chance to go. I'm also going to go for weapon training. You can never have too many sharp objects.
Veldin chapter 3 . 7/30/2007
Taijutsu and make it somthing rare intresting story hope to see more soon
Lupus Tenebrae chapter 3 . 7/30/2007
You're not the only one who hates it when people substitute a chapter for Author's Notes...but this time it's clearly understandable, so I forgive you. ;P HAHA! I think that Taijutsu would be more benificial and more exciting at this point. Well I'll await the rewrites and the next chapter with much anticipation! Very good story, by the way!
Zoroz chapter 3 . 7/30/2007
lol i was trying to remember what those bits of your story sounded similar to but i couldnt, meh kool story anyways so i look forward to your new chapters :)
A chapter 3 . 7/30/2007
Tai jutsu
Voidknight chapter 2 . 7/30/2007
This is a great story. I think he should do both training from the kyuubi. Continue posting more chapters.
Narutomaniac chapter 2 . 7/30/2007
Great chapter I really enjoyed it and as for training I'd say he should do Ninjutsu/Taijutsu(if he had like Lee's speed he would be awesome picture him running so fast no one can see him with a Rasengan in his hand when he learns it of course) training with Thousands of Shadow Clones which would give him like months and months of training in like a day. I was wondering will he find out who is dad was and then have either special training with Jiraiya on the side to learn his family jutsu's or just get a scroll and learn them with Kage bushin no jutsu helping him? In case you didn't notice I really hope he finds out the secret to the Kage Bushin No Jutsu, because I hate that Kakashi was such a bastard that he didn't tell Naruto about the secret of the move when he first became Narutos sensei, he would have become so strong if he had known that secret. I truly hope to continue reading this fantastic story in the near future.
spedclass chapter 3 . 7/30/2007
i think he should have Taijutsu and a weapon.
Narutomaniac chapter 1 . 7/30/2007
Great chapter I'm really enjoying this story it has immense potential. I hope he knows the secret to the Kage Bushin No Jutsu so he can train better and become stronger much much faster.
Kyubbi-Sama chapter 3 . 7/30/2007
Weapon!

Good work and please update soon!
TehSpaz chapter 2 . 7/30/2007
THis is a very good story for only 2 chapters. You don't see too many like these, there mostly written by those who don't take it seriously and devote nearly a whole chapter to thanks when they can just send it to the people who reviewed. I see you have a little problem with dialogue, instead of "Sarutobi said" its "Sarutobi", learn to work on that.
Morriganna chapter 2 . 7/30/2007
When someone is finished speaking, you need to use the correct grammar for it. For example, you had this:

“You can’t be serious Naruto.” 3rd

You are supposed to say:

“You can’t be serious Naruto,” said the Third Hokage or said the Sandaime.

Just saying the name alone after speech is lazy and it makes the story look bad. I think the story has potential, but being lazy where it counts never helps.
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