Reviews for Is Fuit Sua Premoris
goldpiece chapter 1 . 7/31/2007
Thank you for submitting a piece for the July Challenge. Good luck and I'll see you at the finish line.

Goldpiece
Melissa chapter 1 . 7/29/2007
My main criticism is the Latin is off. Although, the title is what initially lead me to read the story, but in sort of an annoyed way, which is unfortunate.

The verb form is incorrect (a first person singular) and suus is masculine - "is erat sua primoris" would be closer. I would suggest even considering the use of the perfect "fuit" for the imperfect "erat."

The story itself, however, is fine.
saturn567 chapter 1 . 7/28/2007
beautiful, yet sad