|Reviews for My Gilded Life|
| shin obin chapter 14 . 7/31/2013
Except for the bit about polygammy I enjoyed it.
| shin obin chapter 8 . 7/31/2013
Ew. Just. Ew.
| Thunder Stag chapter 8 . 7/29/2013
I'm sorry, but you forget that Harry and Ginny had approximately seven years or so to really fall in love and get married. This was in the nineteen years later part, of course.
| Guest chapter 11 . 7/19/2013
I find the Addams Ex Machina to be a bit too much for my suspension of disbelief. More likely is that the protagonist somehow manages to rig a time turner to allow him to travel farther back and more than once, and that he and somebody he infects with his metamorph blood create the identities of the Addams family. That would explain all of Morticia's knowledge about Gilderoy.
| Guest chapter 9 . 7/19/2013
It's interesting how Gilderoy isn't going on a crusade because the bible says to suffer not a witch to live. Or is starting a revolution merely the first step in a master plan towards it?
| Guest chapter 8 . 7/19/2013
Gilderoy is ineptly overconfident. He would be a Gary Stu if reality went his way any more than it already did on most of his assumptions. It's almost like that random omnipotent being (skysaber) that inserted him into Gilderoy is manipulating events to make him seem always right with his harebrained ideas. Anyways, movie dementors didn't seem to have eyes with which to see a basilisk with anyways.
| uo-chou chapter 14 . 7/13/2013
Good work, thanks for sharing! I would be interested to read a sequel if you feel like writing one. :)
| Numbuh six-sixtysix chapter 14 . 7/10/2013
Hmm. Not a bad fic. Certainly not bad. I noticed a few times you had a British character use an American phrase, and, I'll say it again, keep extant religions _out_ of your fics. Especially when it comes to deriding one. _Especially_ especially, when that one happens to be the biggest (IIRC) faith going. You aren't Monty Python, and this is not Life of Brian.
That said, congratulations, you merit further reading.
| Numbuh six-sixtysix chapter 8 . 7/10/2013
No, no, your chapters are good. It's just you're not linking in your rants very well. The one about killing was okay, as you had yourself explaining a moral issue to a concerned 11 year old Harry - a brilliant attempt at a character development scene. The Snape thing, however... Well, you even mention in-character that it's sort of unrelated. What the problem is, is it doesn't do anything for the story. It disrupted the flow, and turned into an actual rant from you (the writer) about a subject, rather than a rant from you (the character), which definitely broke my suspension of disbeleif. As I said previously, it was better suited to the Author's Notes than to the chapter.
| Numbuh six-sixtysix chapter 7 . 7/10/2013
Yeah, it's probably best not to bring religion up so much. Aside from the highly controversial nature of the topic, there is a slight problem with it. Granted, as you say, most wizards couldn't do logic to save their life, but you have just convinced several very rational people. Or at least, talked them round enough to alter their habits, which is a not insignificant acheivement. See, excepting Genesis, any and all miracles can be explained with magic - so why should we beleive in divine interference when a wizard hiding under an Invisibility Cloak seems more likely. Christ himself could simply have been a powerful wizard who had access to a few potions (Draught of Livng Death, anyone?).
And your in-character explanation is severely flawed. You claim to have verified the source of the commandment. No you haven't. At best, you tracked down a second-hand account of the incident. Told by a person who was interested in a very famous guy. You earlier mentioned what happens when people take an interest in famous people - things get exaggerated.
As for the prohibition on tea - what? You are banned from imbibing any drink made from boiled plant matter? I can (sort of) see my way to understanding that with regards to the tea made from the tea plant, but 'herbal tea' is a catch all for a drink of water that was boiled with some form of plant in it - logically, if you abstain from that, you should also abstain from soups and possibly even stews, as they are very similar items.
Next, your justification for all of this? 'Because this guy said so'. Doesn't quite work so well when we have just had a huge rant hinging on that that is a bad justification.
Which brings me to my final point. The rant against Snape. That should not have been in the story. It's your justification as to why you beleive Snape acts as he does - if you feel it necessary to explain why Snape acts so, put it in an Author's Note at the end of the chapter. Other than that, simply _show us_ how Snape is acting, and let that guide us to our own conclusions.
| Numbuh six-sixtysix chapter 6 . 7/10/2013
Okay, a couple things -
"The idea that 'the road to hell is paved with good intentions' is Catholic doctrine, and is not correct. You won't find it anywhere in the scriptures. They made it up long after they stopped claiming any revelation from God."
As a general rule of thumb, avoid naming and shaming actual faiths. People tend to get upset. Especially when your justification is, in itself, a rather contentious point. There are good arguments, drawn from Scripture, that point out problems with going sola scriptura.
" therapeutic memory work to correct the harm done Harry by his childhood."
Yeah, I'm going to have to agree with Ted on this one. Ignoring my instinctive 'stay the hell out of my head!' response, there is just something ineffably _wrong_ with that - largely tied up with concepts of 'self', and the limits of free will. I let the thing with the coma victims slide, because you removed a small piece that was causing actual harm to their well-being, and there was literally no other way to go about it. Here... Well, there were other options available to you, which most certainly should have been explored.
| Nebresh chapter 14 . 7/10/2013
Interesting storyline. Though I think that you went a bit overboard.
| Numbuh six-sixtysix chapter 2 . 7/10/2013
Err - question; You mentioned in chapter 1 that you get knocked out in the process of receiving all of Lockhart's memories. Yet here, you mention that you suspect Lockhart has an easy way of doing things, and are happy to be proven right. Surely, if you posessed his memory, you would know all this anyway? Unless you are suggesting he memory charmed himself as a defence against Legilimens finding out - but I don't really see that working.
Other than that, this is a very interesting work, which I will now carry on reading.
| PsyckoSama chapter 1 . 7/9/2013
Andrew Joshua Talon just wrote a new ending to this fic. It really wraps things up with what I'd personally call a happy ending! :)
| Nanishi DJGT chapter 14 . 7/7/2013