|Reviews for Poison to the Plate|
| Gumokoa chapter 19 . 4/12
Forgot to say... SEQUEL! PLEASE!
| Gumokoa chapter 20 . 4/12
Holy. Im impressed. Never before have I seen such a brave writer XD: Multiple personality disorders (or whatevs) huh? I looooooved it!
Well, there are a couple of plot holes, like, whatever the hell happened to Kira? It would be nice to know when he blended with Kith, and how Kith would deal with such amounts of unprocessed pain, even if it's just half of it.
What happened about the other half of the pain he had to process (the actual experience of killing and not just the knowledge of doing so)?
Why would CIA go through the trouble? For that you could add something like we-have-already-tried-everything-to-kill-him or something.
Another thing that I noticed (and to this day don't know if I love or hate XD because... hurt/comfort) is that you throw around the 'he started sobbing' thing a bit too much, which makes the reader feel like it's not important. You could just say 'crying quietly' most of the time and to add a bit of more efect, say 'bawling' when it is really bad.
You also seem to forget you wrote about somethings, like when Pen told L he could give him trigger words, but L figured them out on his own, or when Light was said to always be hot and then that he was always cold.
For Wendy and Aiber... I don't get why they exist XD. I mean, I read it at 3 in the morning some times, but I couldn't make out any importance of them other than the comic relief and covering plotholes
Other than that, I loved how you executed the actual disorder of Light and how every personality was completely different and unique. Especially the difference in age and gender (feminineness? Lack of masculinity? You get it)
And geez did I love to see L cry. *fangirl war cry*
I would say something about LxLight making this story a bit not serious, but lets be real, that's exactly what I came here to see XD Im satisfied.
(Btw... why is it called poison to the plate? Me is stupid. Me not understand. XD)
| ranoshi chapter 20 . 12/8/2016
Light speeding over into the waves to rescue Bonnie, Sayu's death, Light's reflection on his parents, Light deciding he wanted to live, L snapping at the kids, Matt noticing when L didn't expect him to, Light seeing again in the end and L's tears, I love all the little details you add to make this such an enriching story. It would be great if you ever did decide to write a sequel, but even if you do not, would you mind writing a summary or notes of what you had planned/saw for them after this story? Thank you for writing. Your thank yous at the end were lovely because it was personalized and made me feel a little close to the story and the people that help support you to make it happen.
| ranoshi chapter 8 . 12/7/2016
These revelations had my heart feel so heavy and sad. I don't remember reading things with multiple personalities so the interactions they are having with Kira's Light Yagami personality is riveting to follow.
| ranoshi chapter 7 . 12/7/2016
This is exceptionally...I don't know but my mind is blown. This turn of events is considered science fiction(?) right? It is crazy scary. At least I am more trusting of Pen now.
| ranoshi chapter 6 . 12/7/2016
Holy fucking shit, those sick fucks.
| ranoshi chapter 5 . 12/7/2016
Wedy was angry on behalf of Light right? That gives her points in my books. Do you refer to him as Kira in your mind when you write the story? I like the support L and Watari are for Light and look forward to learn more behind what happened to Light.
| ranoshi chapter 4 . 12/7/2016
Learning about L's past was fascinating. Light asking Watari to kill him made me scared for Light and want Watari to actually do it. I hate Nix for having to do with Light's trauma. Seeing Light have to go with the rest of his life by his pseudonym Kira feels desperately upsetting.
| kirasmatic chapter 20 . 8/10/2016
This story was so good. I'm a sucker for angst and hurt/comfort, so this fic was literal perfection. I see that this story was written in 2007 so that sequel likely isn't coming nearly a decade later. But if it did I'd be so happy. You're a brilliant writer, and I hope that wherever you're at now, you're continuing to share your story telling gift with the world. OK that was corny but yeah, thanks for writing this.
| Recolte le rhume chapter 20 . 7/27/2016
Too lazy to write a good review. But I liked your story !
| Rian chapter 20 . 1/20/2016
Oh god what can i say. I love love loveeee this story. I especially love your Light (or kira or raitokun or lucious or kith or whatever else left in there, really) here. I've always had soft spot for characters with multiple personality disorder (yes i still call it by that name. A lot easier to spell xD). It keeps things interesting. I love how your Light is a bundle of MESS, with capitals M-E-S-S, here. It's tiring seeing that stubborn bastard always in control heh. And i especially love your L here oh my god. you make him so much more human here without straying too far from his character, it's refreshing. It's nice seeing him being given the chance to actually be human for once!
This fic is a masterpiece and i love every bits of it. If there's anything i'd change in this story however, i would make Light Yagami as Light's name eventually. Idk, that name just has the effect on me (name fetish, anyone?) and it would be nice to see him coming back to himself but aw the ending isnt actually an ending and Light is already beyond repair anyway. I kinda get your rationality here so yeah. Im so glad that this story actually has a solid plot instead of the typical two genii venting out sexual frustation to each other stories. Some stories are niceee but It gets old after some time : And honestly I'm half hoping for you to write its sequel and half hoping for you not to (bcs i will end up doing nothing but wait for updates seriouslyyyy I'm obsessed like that xD) but this is such an old story and i doubt you'll write one but thank you anyway for writing this :) now excuse me while i go back to the first chapter and reread hahah xD
| Kaizen Kitty chapter 18 . 12/8/2015
sorry I still don't get what motive Nix or Miller or the CIA could have in Sayu's and Mogi's death...(it doesn't seem very productive) and why would they order Light to kill his whole family? Would they sacrifice so many lives just to break a captured mass murderer who was already broken? This just looks like extra drama to make Light look more pitiful and to put the limelight on this L/Light hurt-comfort scenario. The plot just...doesn't make much sense? Or am I missing something?
XD Also I like the prospect of all the Wammy kids living on a yacht - it would be very cool if this narrative could return back to them (if you could show some of Mello, Matt and Near too) - L and Light constantly arguing about Light's mental health problems gets a bit tedious after a while (when the conflict is so staged - Sayu's death - and when it is not interspersed with some comic relief from time to time).
Also, is Misa really alive? Or is that just another Wammy House orphan who was named after her?
| Kaizen Kitty chapter 17 . 12/8/2015
yes, definite mindfuck material right there ;-)
| Kaizen Kitty chapter 7 . 12/5/2015
XD okay noe this is just downright weird. It's certainky an original idea (haven't seen this in the Death Note fandom so far, so amazingly dark and uh...detailed?)... but it's not something I can actually believe is part of canon (despite the serious tone of this fic). It's a little bit over-the-top with conspiracy theories for me, and doesn't seem...plausible? There must be easier ways to assassinate L, if that was something the CIA wanted. And why would they even want that? L is their ally. Why kill him? Even at the risk of potentially setting a potentially dangerous criminal supermind (Light Yagami) on the loose?
| Kaizen Kitty chapter 4 . 12/3/2015
No, so far I don't thik Light is OOC. Light is very much himself in this fanfic - acting just as you'd expect he would act under the circumstances - characterization, You nailed it. Spot on. And L and Matt and Mello and all the other characters too.
:) I do think this is a rather dark interpretation of L's past...and I don't know how I feel about that yet. It's certainly intrigued me.
The writing style ... well it could help if you used more paragraphs instead of loose sentences? Also, I like the dialogue but the descriptive parts (the narration) could use some editing - as currently they do not display a very wide vocab, and some sentences sound a little awkward. Overall though, great job - this hath potential and I read on :-D