|Reviews for Shifting Sands|
| FabulaEstActa chapter 13 . 3/9/2008
Great story. I loved all the little nuances in there. You used different phrases and peculiar vernacular to definitely set the Gerudo apart as a distinct people. I loved the plot, incredibly written, spectacular. You added quite a bit of detail to this, from the rebel outposts spread through Hyrule to the formalities taken on by the people. This was a fantastic story. It felt like a living and breathing world.
| Davin Sunrider chapter 13 . 12/1/2007
Well, that was a nice ending. This was a great story overall, and this was a great way to end it. I liked the descriptions of the party, and also what everybody's going to be doing in the future.
I've really enjoyed this story, and I think this will be one I go back and re-read every once in a while. Great job!
| Davin Sunrider chapter 12 . 11/23/2007
Wow, what a great ending to a great story! Well, there's obviously going to be an epilogue, but this was fantastic!
I liked Link's struggle in the beginning. Never give up, right? Link's the kind of guy that won't go down without a fight, and he sure gave them one.
The parts on the altar were suitably tense, and the fight between Ganondorf and Sogolon was very well done. I liked this line here:
'Once he unleashed the Triforce of Power, she could count her lifespan in seconds.'
Darn right! It is a third of the most powerful magical artifact in the Zelda world, after all! But, true to form, Sogolon doesn't back down.
This entire chapter was very well done, particularly the ending. I've enjoyed the story so far, and I'm waiting for the epilogue to see how everything is resolved. Till then!
| Kokuryuha chapter 11 . 11/20/2007
o MUWAHAHAHAHA ok enough of that now, PLEASE UPDATE SOON! your story is AMAZING!
| Davin Sunrider chapter 11 . 11/16/2007
Great chapter. I really liked the descriptions you had in here, and also the conversations between Sogolon and Nabooru. Some of those insults were truly inspired. Reminds me of quarreling siblings.
I liked the usage of secret passages. Doesn't every big building have at least one secret passage in it? ;)
I also liked the scenes with Link in his cell, and how he realizes that there's really no way out. I've seen too many times where the hero magically escapes from his cell and manages to wade through an endless stream of guards wielding nothing but a rock or cup or stick or something. Although, I admit I would like to see somebody fight seven guys with just a boot. Maybe Jackie Chan could do it.
Ganondorf really has Matu brainwashed, doesn't he? I can't wait to see how this turns out; you've been building up to a really cool ending.
| Jackalman22 chapter 2 . 11/16/2007
Slowly but surely, I'm making my way through this story. I prefer reading things in chunks as opposed to powering through them in one drove; it makes for a much more absorbing read, in my opinion.
Anyway, Chapter 2 was definitely shorter, but still powerful. I'm really enjoying the depth you're portraying (not just with the Gerudo clans) with Hyrule and the main characters. I'm continuing to enjoy Sogolon's story very much. As for Link, I was a little troubled to see that he was easily cast aside and almost dispatched by a mere Dragmire warrior. Maybe I'm underestimating their prowess, but I was under the impression that Link was damn good at what he did.
As far as style is concerned, I'd advise making the character perspective transition a bit more explicit. The perspective changed from Link's to Sogolon's on the fly, and while I was able to follow, it did stand out as a bit awkward. A dashed or starred line goes a long way to keeping your chapters polished.
Either way, the chapter was still well written and very engaging. I'll be sure to add some more reviews later.
| Jackalman22 chapter 1 . 11/16/2007
Hey there. I just started reading your story, and although I've only finished the first chapter, I just want to tell you what a fine job you've done so far.
I'm actually new to and plan on uploading my own Zelda story soon, but before I did I figured I'd read a few stories I happened across. Yours seemed intriguing, so I clicked it and happened to enjoy it very much.
So far, I like the characterizations. Sogolon is definitely interesting, both in her pride and in the weakness of her predicament. I also like the characterization of Link; he's not quite a main character (in that the story does not take place from his perspective), but his righteous reputation certainly precedes him.
The history surrounding the Gerudo has never really been expounded upon in the games, and your eloquent and descriptive style seems to be doing it a lot of justice. Needless to say I'm going to continue reading this fic.
Keep up the good work!
| Davin Sunrider chapter 10 . 11/10/2007
All right, setting up for an epic confrontation. I liked the interaction between Sogolon and and Link in this chapter, particularly in the first part of the chapter.
“Thrice-blasted, wasp-brained son of scorpions!” That almost surpasses the other line like it.
The ending was good, with Ganon's manipulations coming to a peak. I'm really interested in seeing how this is resolved. Till next time!
| Davin Sunrider chapter 9 . 11/3/2007
“Twice-blasted, corpse-eating tunnel-spider!”
That's got to be one of the best lines in the story.
This chapter was well done. I really didn't see that thing from Matu coming, and the battle was also well done.
I didn't really see anything to critcize this chapter. I liked the scene with Zelda in the inn, and the ending makes me really want to read the next chapter. Update soon!
| Davin Sunrider chapter 8 . 10/27/2007
Some Gerudo history and some more backstory on Sogolon. All great stuff. Once again, I enjoyed your descriptions of the Gerudo society. None of the games really give them much in the way of culture, so fanfiction writers are forced to come up with their own ideas. Your version is one of the better ones I've seen.
I have a question, though. This chapter of the story seems to be pre-'Ocarina', while the rest of the story seems to be after or during the 'Twilight Princess' era. It's my understanding that those two games are supposed to hundreds of years apart, so If I got confused, I'm sorry.
Great chapter, and I'm looking forward to the next one!
| Davin Sunrider chapter 7 . 10/21/2007
Come on, people! I know I'm not the only person reading this, so why am I the only one who's bothered to review? It's simple manners. If you read something on this site, you're supposed to tell the writer what you thought of it! That's kind of the point of the site!
Anyway, to get to the chapter, this was a good one. I liked the interaction between Matu and his aunt, especially her making him overcome his prejudices, by yanking on his ear, no less. That was pretty funny. I also liked the scene where Sogolon talks to the little boy while washing the cloak. I liked this exchange especially:
“I didn’t know Gerudo did laundry,” he commented, looking as if it were the most fascinating thing he’d seen in ages.
“Did you think we never washed our clothes?” Sogolon asked without hostility.
“Nah…I figured maybe you made the people you kidnapped do it for you.”
“That really didn’t happen all that often, you know.”
Great stuff. I also liked the thing about Matu not wanting to eat fish. I look forward to him learning from Shad. That bit about him being the least threatening Hylian she knew was a good one.
Till next time!
| Davin Sunrider chapter 6 . 10/5/2007
This was a good chapter. I liked the discussion between Sogolon and Kero, and also some more tidbits about Gerudo culture scattered throughout the chapter. I like the whole 'fish-out-of-water' thing you've got going with Sogolon, and how she has to adapt to how the other people behave, and also how she tells them about her society.
These scenes are the best part of this fic, in my opinion. You still do action sequences really well, but the culture shock scenes are what I like best about the story.
Till next chapter!
| Davin Sunrider chapter 5 . 9/12/2007
Sorry I'm late reviewing this chapter. I haven't been able to get on the internet for more than ten minutes at a time the last few days.
This is another great chapter. I especially liked the fight between Ganon, Link and Sogolon, and the conversations towards the end.
I know I've said it before, but Sogolon is a very interesting person, and I like the sequences that show what's she's thinking.
I didn't really see anything that I thought needed improvement, but there was one sentence I would have used a different word than you did:
“Milady…did something I said upset you?” I would have used 'say' instead, but then I've been told that my wording is questionable occasionally, so maybe you shouldn't listen to me.
Waiting on Chapter 6!
| Davin Sunrider chapter 4 . 9/3/2007
Your original character just gets more and more interesting. I like her personal code of honor that she keeps to.
And Snowpeak Ruins! One of my favorite dungeons from the game. As I read through this chapter, I kind of wondered which rooms you were describing, because when I was wandering around in there, none of the rooms struck me as a ballroom. Oh, well. Everybody has their own interpretation, I guess.
Can't wait for Chapter 5!
| Davin Sunrider chapter 3 . 8/27/2007
Another great chapter. You know, I'm surprised that this story doesn't get more reviews, seeing as how it's one of the better ones in Zelda.
I'll just end with this: Ganon sure is one evil SOB.