Reviews for Jail Bait
Sweeter chapter 3 . 9/3/2009
Gr. You need inspiration! HUH DO YA PUNK!

1. Either Shuichi gets raped and is really really sadly broken about it. And Yuki looks at Shuichi all broken down on the floor and feels sorry for him because Shuchi reminds him of himself. I don't want this. Whenever rape is optional in stories (unless I want some super angst which I don't really want in this story right now) I try to avoid it.

2. Shuichi is ABOUT to get raped/beaten up/whatever and Yuki saves him. Shuichi gets all starry-eyed and in lurv and Yuki tells him not to get to cocky just cuz he saved him and calls him a brat that can't defend himself.

Number 2 is way better! I follow up to number two is Shuichi getting mad and all Shuichi like and then eventually asking Yuki to teach him how to defend himself and Yuki eventually agrees after much pestering. Shuichi eventually finds more about Yuki and the story progresses to when they're finally happy . . .

It's proven that Shuichi is NOT GUILTY for the crime.


Therefore I'm pretty much sucked dry but three options you can use for the lead on for option two is that

1. Shuichi begs whoever supplied the evidence to give up the case and Yuki is all, ‘No you’re innocent. You should get out. I don’t deserve you. I have my books but you need your family’. Not sure how this one ends up.

2. Shuichi gets out of jail and waits for Yuki until his sentence is up. (Well they got jailed at different times right? Seeing as Yuki is older. I’m not sure how much but he is, right?)

3. Shuichi is proven not guilty and he devotes himself to prove that Yuki only killed the real Yuki-dude in self-defence. It’s proven. Yuki gets out.


1. They live happily ever after.

Hope I helped _ I’m full of great ideas but I never have the determination to do it. I hope you do, and even if you don’t use my ideas, you’re still inspired by them and write many a more chapter.

But the last option still applies no matter what. K?
sally chapter 1 . 10/10/2008
more more more more more more more more !

I love it please write more prety please
linnea chapter 3 . 8/4/2008
update, i command you! this is a really good story, and i am waiting patiently for some smutt!

thank you.
kaname-luvr chapter 3 . 5/30/2008
saddlebreed chapter 3 . 5/2/2008
You have to update, you got me all excited about your story and then 'BAM' NOTHING. you can't do this please i beg you update.
mio 4ever chapter 3 . 3/8/2008
aw man, I wish you would update this. I like really like it. I hope you get your inspiration back.
Niftyii chapter 3 . 3/7/2008
lol, I get that feeling all the time :) well have fun at the anime convention :D hope inspiration or new stories will come to you xD
keegan94820 chapter 3 . 3/6/2008
T.T I'm sad that you might not continue this and encourage you to continue but if you really are uninspired then that makes me even more sad. I wouldn't mind a new Grav. fic however, so long as Suichi is the main character, he's my fav!:]] I like the car wreck fics the best and was hoping you would do a short fic about Shuichi being in a car wreck. Idk i like those fics a lot. U don't have to but hey whatever you think is good is fine with me! :]] Please continue this story! And start a new story! the pressures on. ;]
D chapter 3 . 3/6/2008
aww but this was so original i really wanted 2 see what whould happen come on .. even if it sucks a lil at least try to keep wrighting this story it really is sounding so good PLZ:(
Cumcakesxxxx chapter 3 . 3/6/2008

I want an update.

I got so excited when I saw the chapter alert... TToTT
Captara chapter 3 . 3/6/2008
No! Come back! Don't leave me! Maybe you might get a spark or something *cries*

keegan94820 chapter 2 . 3/4/2008
I see that it has been a while since you last updated and idk if it's because of the weird dead computer incident or what but i really really love this fic! PLEASE UPDATE! even if you have to fix your computer by youself. :]] I like the last scene but have Yuuki save him before it gets to graphic please... I can't stand poor Shuichi getting hurt... in that way at least XD. PLEASE UPDATE AS SOON AS POSSIBLE!
P chapter 2 . 2/19/2008
whens the next chaper coming out? this is good nd i wanna find out wut happens
u guess chapter 2 . 2/3/2008
it's a really great story, please continue with it! i'm really looking forward to the next chapters, and the smut(?)

keep up the good work!
Guest chapter 2 . 12/15/2007
ohh i really like it, it's really good! i want another chapter!
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