|Reviews for The Human Element|
| the grey mage chapter 15 . 4/13
Oh man, id have thought if you cant go to the law
You call in every favor with the villains you could
Or go zorpox
| the grey mage chapter 13 . 4/13
It would have been hilarious to have jean ask for grandbabies right there and then
| the grey mage chapter 9 . 4/13
That whole section between ron and shego here is kinda awkward.
Two rape survivors and these two having an intimate moment.
| Guest chapter 12 . 2/21
This story should end soon when Giddy, Ron and Shego realize all they need is DNA samples from 4 year old Ben Topher and Reggie to compare. They would prove that Ben is Reggie's son. Then all they need is a statement from the other and that would open the floodgate to the rest of the investigation with all the other girls that he took advantage of over the years.
I hope Reggie likes how the other inmates molest him in prison.
Also, Senator Daddy will probable be taken down when the investigation uncovers his part of the coverup in protecting his son.
| Winnie chapter 13 . 8/19/2017
I know this fic is fairly old, and no one probably reads it anymore, but Kim is irking me. No, straight up jerking me. She is soo ughhhh. Anyways, luv the fic and Shego and Mrs. Stoppable.
| Smiling Lemon chapter 20 . 4/13/2016
This is fucking awesome! I really want to see more.
| Bookfisher chapter 20 . 4/4/2016
Just reread this story , it is damn good, and got one of the better takes on the whole Ron/Kim/Shego triangle
| Sparity101 chapter 1 . 11/25/2015
I read a similar start to this, yet for the life of me I can't seem to find it
| Kakerot Bardockson chapter 20 . 8/18/2015
I liked it up to this last chapter then you lost me. I liked someone coverer a serious topic but at the end it was like you were trying to ell a second story or set one up
| BlackRoseFire chapter 20 . 7/7/2015
Interesting and awesome story. I really can't wait to see what happens in the sequel. I loved the wat that you had Shego, Ron and Kim interact.
| Lupus Macbeth chapter 20 . 9/5/2013
weirdness... thats about all i have to say on the matter... hmm. i really hope that Shego/Ron and Kim hook up.
| Lupus Macbeth chapter 12 . 9/5/2013
hmmm... i really like this detective guy... hehehheeeh he reminds me of Mahony in Tim Dorsey's Serge Storms novels.
| Riplakish chapter 4 . 7/10/2013
My favorite chapter so far-saying a lot as the previous 3 are excellent and just keep getting better. In addition to everyone else's comments, I'd like to compliment you on mirroring the "mother/daughter conversations" ala Kim & Shego.
| VVG chapter 11 . 9/24/2012
This fic is great!
When need more ShegoXRon! More Rongo!
| brindani chapter 20 . 11/14/2011
First off I’d like to say that when I get into a series I start to think on how some of the more unusual couples could realistically get together. I go through fanfiction and see what ideas others have come to in this regards and found that there is often a trend. The main love interest becomes uncharacteristically agitated for no reason and takes every opportunity to push them away while the shipped couple mysteriously have feelings for each other that just came out of the blue.
I’m certainly not putting these stories down, quite a few are pretty good reads, but that fundamental question of how could circumstances realistically cause it to happen keeps nawing at me. Usually story ideas start to swirl around in my head and become an epic story. This is what has been happening with RonxShego recently. Then I came across your story and every idea I had thought of to make it realistic was there and more besides. It was like reading the story I wanted to write, but so much better.
The main love interest reacted just as I would expect given the circumstances, there wasn’t the sense that she was the author with omniscient knowledge of things she couldn’t possibly know without being there. She was a character that only had what she experienced and acted upon it in concert with everything that happened. Feelings of not being good enough, comparing features to perceived love rivals, all things that happen in the real world every day.
And Shego, I can only say wow. You gave her character extreme depth and not just something thrown together, but rather realistic feelings and experiences that make her transition from hero the villain far more than that her brothers were annoying.
Taken in concert with Ron who said the right thing at the right time in the right way, it was like reading a concert, the melody blending together perfectly between them to become something far more.
The epilogue, particularly the last scene, felt a bit like a sour note mixed in. I haven’t read the second story after this as of yet, but that scene seemed so out of place, I’m still not sure I want to continue just yet. Just taken from this point, almost everything about it felt wrong. The story does a wonderful job of not only showing events, but the thoughts behind the characters as they experience those events giving us a wonderful view of how they evolve. This is particularly true of Shego, we see her loneliness, her feelings grow just a little more each paragraph. Unfortunately all of these feelings seemed to simply disappear in that one scene.
I’m not saying that Drakkan and Shego couldn’t do what happened, it’s pretty much cannon. What I’m saying is she was wholly with Drakkan during that meeting, there was not the slightest hesitance at all, in her actions or mind that one would expect to see there after all the events that had occurred. At the very least I’d expect to see a little concern wash over her regarding the end result of Drakkan’s plan and how it could affect the people she had so recently risked her life for.
I can only see a few ways that this could realistically happen. One is it’s played off a few of the previous scenes that mention information stored in her subconscious indicating that there are two Shego’s that inhabit her mind separated from each other. Second that she is a clone something I highly doubt given Shego’s aversion to cloning.
Next, it seemed as if it was suggested that the events that took place happened as part of the plan to get the devise. That seemed a stretch given the events and Shego’s reaction to them. First, Ron’s actions couldn’t have been anticipated and even if they were, it would have been a huge risk to Shego’s life that literally almost killed her straight out, through blood loss, and even an infection. Given the indicated level of relationship between Shego and Drakkan , I can’t see Drakkan letting her do something that extreme.
On the other hand, it could have been a play off of the events that did happen to their benefit. This is a little difficult due to the insight we see in Shego, we see her thoughts as she thinks of Ron and the feelings that develop. The feeling was there that she really didn’t have anyone to share a relationship with the depth that was developing. The last scene indicated the complete opposite.
Well, enough rambling on and on especially without reading the next story. For now, I’ll just restate how good this story is and thank you for taking the time and effort to create such a wonderful piece of art.