|Reviews for Inner Chaos|
| Nalini chapter 1 . 9/26/2016
Omg... I don't even know what just happened. Did an old person just sit down next to me and start babbling about his life's story?
I so hate it when people assume the first chapter is the best time to have the exclusive interview on the new characters/topic/ superpower, etc.
And as matter of fact the 2nd,3rd ,4th, and 5th isn't the time or place to do it either because it gets overwhelming if your given so much info at a time. Sprinkle it out... Give the character some time to grow, let us readers get to know the person before he tells all.
falling asleep while reading the first chapter isn't the best way to go.
| Guest chapter 5 . 2/1/2014
| Random Chick chapter 2 . 12/17/2012
Oh, yeah! ShikaTema4EVAAAAA!
| Gundam Kaiser chapter 6 . 7/15/2011
Sad that you've stopped writing for this fic, but I can probably understand where you're coming from. My relative, MechaUltimaZero, kinda quit a lot of his Naruto fanfics too, although that had more to do with lack of motivation and irreconcilable plot issues.
Anyhow, my one beef with this fic is that I don't believe there was an explanation for how Shikamaru and Hinata know about Naruto having the Kyuubi unless he went and told them, and even then, the event was never touched upon. Discarding that, however, it's still a pretty good story, and if anyone has/will adopt it, I'll probably support them too.
| Neliel Tu Oderschvank Espada 3 chapter 6 . 6/29/2009
i'm inerested in adopting it
| Slytherson chapter 6 . 12/9/2008
please write more inner chaos! Keep writing!
| Tsukoyomi13 chapter 6 . 12/1/2008
Oh god...crap another adoption...Gah i want to but i barely can get any of my other stories going...but it so good...but he won't...crap...
Kyuubi:...and what do you think your doing?
Tsuki: heh...funny you should ask...heh..heh
Kyuubi: thats not another 'adopt me' fic is it...
Tsuki...no...hey look is that fox nip...
Kyuubi: im not falling for that...you have too much on your plate alrea-
Tsuki: *throws fox nip*
Kyuubi: MINE *runs after*
Tsuki: okay I'll take it...one adopted FFVII to go please.
Kyuubi: you adopted didn't you
Tsuki: yep -
| Aranami Gouka chapter 6 . 11/23/2008
you suck dude. i was really enjoying this story.
| The Elemental Dragon Emperor chapter 6 . 11/23/2008
When some one adopt it can you let us know thank you
| Gravity The Wizard chapter 6 . 11/22/2008
| vaayu chapter 5 . 11/17/2008
This story was okay. I like to tell you the whole "mask" concept makes no sense.I could understand Naruto not wanting to reveal his true ability but what does being dead last have to do with it? He could pass himself off as an insignificant no-name rather than as a weakling. "Dead Last" draws as much attention as "Genius". Also, if Hinata was as good as she was, she has no valid reason to hide. I can imagine Naruto feeling the need to hide his power but she has no excuse. There is no reason to let herself be seen as a "failure". This concept has been repeated so many times to a point where it's cliche. Also, I personally didn't like how you treated Kiba. I don't know why so many authors want to bash him. He is arrogant, I give him that much. But he is not evil. He doesn't deserve such "punishment". Even Sasuke bashing is justified but Kiba bashing is unreasonable. Also, you seem to be heading to a super powered Naruto fic. Don't do that. Give him limits. This story has potential . Don't ruin it. Update at the earliest possible.
| HolyKnight5 chapter 5 . 9/23/2008
Hmm...update, pretty please?
| Cursed Evil chapter 5 . 8/28/2008
| Iseriad D'angouleme chapter 5 . 7/28/2008
since i have yellow hair does that mean that i'm really powerful?
| Shikan kitsune chapter 5 . 6/22/2008