Reviews for Merman |
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![]() ![]() Well, I doubt you'll get this review, considering how old this is, but this was very, very good. I'm gonna go read the companion piece now. |
![]() ![]() That was lovely. I wasn't sure about Sara at first, but using her as an outside observer worked beautifully. Of the "Will and Lyra" find a way to each other" fics I've read, I think that yours is the best. Very nice, and nicely done. |
![]() ![]() ![]() And then you only wrote one more HDM fic :( I hope that - wherever you are and whatever you're doing - you are at least still writing. |
![]() ![]() There are some times I give up on writing my stories in such detail. Then I find a story like this, and like Will, I am reminded of what I must do: entertain and teach, using my art and words to enrichen people's lives. Just like Celerity did when she/he wrote this story. |
![]() ![]() ![]() Absolutely the best HDM fic. Possibly the best fic on the whole website. This story honeslty brought me to real tears. You're going to make a lot of money as an author some day. When your first book is published, e-mail me and let me know! ] |
![]() ![]() ![]() Beautiful. And brilliant. I really like Sara; she's a very funny character and stays that way the whole time. Similarly, Will, Mary, and Xaphania are all in character too, which I love. (One of my pet peeves is fanfictions that are OOC and don't warn you.) You have really good descriptions "The plants crouched in humped and striking shapes around the border" and "...the way he said it made me feel angry that people used the same word to describe petty things like lousy weather, or bad holidays" for example. Please please please write more like this! This is going on my favorites list! |
![]() ![]() Truly one of the best fics about HDM. Really. Well written! |
![]() ![]() Wow! Really well-written - a LOT better than most of the mushy reunion stories. Except you should have explained how the reunion worked. Aside from that, excellent! |
![]() ![]() That was great, Celerity :) Really well written, and the outsider view was done very well. I'm sorry I took so long to read it! :D |
![]() ![]() ![]() That was a remarkably beautiful story. You're a talented writer, and the choice of telling it from a distant 'outsider's point of view enhanced the prose. Lovely job, I'd really like to see more from you. |
![]() ![]() Beautifully written. Thank you. |
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![]() ![]() ![]() Thank you, thank you, thank you! Thank you for doing a fic where the main character is not Will or Lyra. Thank you for giving Lyra and Will the final happiness they deserve. Thank you for not losing a single emotion or taking the easy way out and making this shallow, instead of filled with depth and reality. But most of all... thank you for just writing this story. |
![]() ![]() ![]() That was well written! good job :) |