|Reviews for The Death of Me|
| stigbot 567 chapter 1 . 5/27/2009
good story man ,
very interesting and it brings up questions like
who was the killers partner?
how did mona know were max was?
i wonder if you are intersted in tell the story of what lead up to that point cause i don't think i'm the only one here who's intersted to find out.
if you did you could put it after this chapter like they do in the max payne games were they have the end of the story first
| Ixyon chapter 1 . 10/27/2007
Good job, some really mighty lines :)
| Chronos Keeper chapter 1 . 9/19/2007
Good mood, good ending. Despite the spelling errors, it didn't detract from the fic.
Some of the turns of phrases took away from the impact, but didn't ruin the story. ("I heard the bang...", "The crimson liquid burst from my stomach...")
But the mood was spot on. Good job. Could use a little work, but it's got great feeling.
| the mighty lu bu chapter 1 . 8/26/2007
awesome, i almost felt i could hear his voice in my head, alos i loved this line
Lady Luck, fate, and the devil were having a three-some
made me laugh, a couple spots i didn't quite get but you really got the feeling of the story.