Reviews for Oathbreakers
anarithilien chapter 1 . 8/20/2007

[drops to bended knee and gazes to the heavens] Oh gods of the eternal world sometimes known as Aman, if you listen with the least bit of interest to us pitiful little readers of fanfic, please let this be the short story that puts those muses back to work for good and gives us Thundera stories once again!

[glances back to this story] It has been too long, but boy am I glad to see you! It was about a month or so ago when Jocelyn made a surprise visit with a little story she wrote, and I was saying to her then if only Thundera Tiger would post too I could die a happy fanfic fan!

Thank you for this wonderful little glance into the moments precluding the journey into the Paths. I absolutely love this portion of the book, even if it is told only in sweeping gestures. Actually, that is what makes it prime for gap-fillers like this.

You've conveyed quite nicely much of the worry that goes into being a part of this company. All Aragorn's followers are going into a dark place where no one else has ever escaped; outwardly they are doing it as a show of faith to a man who is to be king. Even still you have to think too that they would be worrying a bit that they've aligned themselves correctly. Call it one little glance over the shoulder before immersing into the total void. You've given us that.

Dialogue, as always, is a strong point for you. Elladan and Elrohir banter their feelings out nicely here, and I find myself wound into the course of their words. In that, you do something I can't do as it seems you have the conversation choreographed down to a dance. I love watching your players move. They say things I would not expect them to say and get to their points in ways I could never conceive. It's incredibly graceful, and I'm glad you've given us a chance to see again how you do it, even if we'll never really master it like you do.

In any case, I do hope the gods hear my plea and that we will see more of you. And if not, please drop me a line. Perhaps I could adopt "Fear" from you. I know it's not one of your favorites, but I like the little mop-headed monster.

My best to you always,

Anarithilien (aka Ithilien)
Viresse chapter 1 . 8/20/2007
I'm overwhelmed with joy when I see this story. It has been long since a terrific author like you to write a LotR story that focus on the twins, not to mention that it focus a bit more on Elladan (my favourite character)!

I think you describe the twins' personalities well and they fit how I portrait them.

Hope you'll continue writing, even better if the story contains the twins ;) Are you planning to update your other stories?
Nieriel Raina chapter 1 . 8/19/2007
EEK! how did I miss this? Hm? Somehow the alert got marked read in my inbox and I just found it whilst cleaning out. I saw your name and almost screamed in excitement! Then I realized it wasn't an update but another ficlet. sighs. Oh well. I do love everything you write, and I guess I'll have to wait longer for LLS. Poor elfy-poo and dwarfie-munchkin. *grin*

Anyhoo... this was very good, but kind of depressing. *shakes head* I know everyone keeps saying that, but it is! But it is also full of hope, if somewhat darkened by a dark moment. Knowing the outcome makes a big difference though. And having finally finished reading the Silmarillion (loved it so much I've now read it 4 times in 6 weeks!) this chilled me!

Elladan frowned. “Would you rather we compel a vow that is not ours to condone or condemn? Would you rather we be oathkeepers, as were the sons of Fëanor?”

“I would rather this war were put behind us,” Elrohir snapped. “I would rather be gone from this place. And I would rather you not compare our deeds to those of the kinslayers!”
Aranna Undomiel chapter 1 . 8/19/2007
I'm so glad to see you're still alive and writing :) Had rather given up hope to ever see you back (not that I have right to speak about times between updates ;) ) I so know about RL and writer's blocks...

Shame that it was a rather depressing story, at least it made me feel a bit down. But it did have your usual great writing stile.

Hope this means you'll be back for the stay :)
SCREAMINGwhispers chapter 1 . 8/18/2007
"Protect yourself from flamers: Flame Rising 1223755 is going to strike again, block FR. See the complete list in 'Make a Splash' forum."

If that's the F/R I know, he wouldn't flame this story. This is excellent!

“What do you fear, lady?”

“A cage. To stay behind bars, until use and old age accept them, and all chance of doing great deeds is gone beyond recall or desire.”

Oh goodness, though these are Tolkien's words, they are my favorite lines of the whole book.

"The night seemed to freeze at her words. She had made little mystery of her feelings earlier, but this open declaration took Elladan by surprise. He saw Aragorn open his mouth to speak, but before he could say aught, Eowyn was gone, retreating into the night. Startled, Aragorn took a step as though to follow her, but then he stopped, his face uncertain. After a moment, he swung around and went inside his own booth, his motions curt and abrupt. Sounds of movement came from within, and then all was quiet. Elladan was left alone in the shadows."

Woah. You're good. Really good. This description is awe-inspiring.

"She may understand too well,” Elladan murmured. “She sees herself as thrice wronged: once by Wormtongue, once by Theoden, and only moments ago by Estel. Three times has the task of waiting been placed at her feet, and twice she has obeyed only to see the constraints of that duty pull her further and further from any hope of valor. She has dwindled while those commanding her have risen in power and might. Will she allow a third time?” Elladan shook his head. “Were she in Edoras, perhaps. But not here. Not so near these shades.”

Intresting view! Never thought of it that way!

“To suffer the fate of the elves,”

Another intresting observation...

"“Elbereth guide you, Eowyn, daughter of the Mark,” he whispered, questioning the worth of his quiet plea in the face of such darkness. “The shades cast a wide net, and already I fear you lost to it. But mayhap you will find hope and oaths unbroken once the night has passed.”"

Ah! Loved it! Great, great, GREAT story! Thank you for the wonderfully entertaining work.
Elflingimp chapter 1 . 8/18/2007
Good but I found it got me depressed for some reason.
Sarahbarr17 chapter 1 . 8/18/2007
Excellent. Very well written, with a good knowledge of Middle Earth and excellent characterisation. Well done!

Happy writing!


Sarah x
all about tolkien chapter 1 . 8/17/2007
I always love seeing something new from you, but I have to be honest. I have lost hope of you ever updating anything. You will appear on scene and get our hopes up by saying you will be posting updates soon, post a ficlet almost as a conciliatory offering and then you disappear for the better part of a year again. You have done this for going on 2 years. I've just given up hope that your WIPs will ever be finished and that is a shame. We, your fans, do not care if the updates are perfect. You have left us hanging for so long we need something, even just an acknowledgement that they will never be done and give us a brief outline on how it ends. Please, something. You used to be my favorite author, but I can't count on updates from you so as I've said, I've given up. Even if you updated LLS or FND or NYE, I wouldn't read the update because then I'd be left hanging for another 2 years again. When they are complete, I'll be back. Please finish your fics.

a very disappointed fan
Maethril Aranel chapter 1 . 8/17/2007
Nice story! I like your use of language, and I love the twins. It's always nice to see fics where they interact in a way that stays true to Tolkien. It's a nice filler for ROTK; good job!
Aldalena chapter 1 . 8/17/2007
I received an Alert for a new story by you! Twas glad tidings indeed! Rejoice, for the wonderful authoress Thundera Tiger hath returned!

I do hope you will soon update Land of Light and Shadows. 'Tis my favorite story of your's! I have read it at least three times.

I was so ecstatic about your return (I thought something horrible had happene to you!) that I have sent this review without reading the story first! But I already know it will be as excellent as your other stories! Maybe I'll send you a PM after I read it.
Arandil chapter 1 . 8/17/2007
Oh! I am so glad to see you back here writing! (And I know how RL and writers block can get - it's just so unfortunate when it happens to so talented a writer who writes such compelling stories!)

What I liked about this story, besides the fact that it was elf-centric which makes me very happy, was the way it looked at Eowyn. She is often painted as a hero - which she was, ultimately - but it is usually forgotten that she not only ignored her duty to her people but disobeyed a direct order from her king. (Of course, Tolkien's writings are riddled with women who don't do what they're told to do). I like that you explored this perspective.

And the poor Sons of Feanor. Will no one ever get over that whole misunderstanding that was the kinslaying? Let it go, peredhil. There are worse people you could be compared to than the Brothers Feanorion. Talented, devoted to their father, strikingly beautiful - so what if they went a little berzerker near the end? Bygones...

Anyway, very nice. Glad to have you back! Cookies to your muses so that they continue to be cooperative!


Eisheth chapter 1 . 8/17/2007
Wow, that was simply capitivating. I love how you integrated the lines from the actual book in there so well, and manage to match the tone with similarly styled dialogue from the twins. It's a really well-rounded one-shot, and really well done.
EstSilvara chapter 1 . 8/17/2007
Very fascinating story, the twins' discussion about the history of the Rohirrim and Eowyn's actions is a very interesting take on the events in the book. Thanks for sharing this!
AqufIrindiglo chapter 1 . 8/17/2007
Nice story.

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