|Reviews for Lo and Behold|
| Winged Demoness chapter 5 . 11/27/2011
how could you just stop right there?
You know what things like that are called? cruelty. a fantastic story that just HAS to stop when its about to switch POV. I could cry. Really,I could.
| Saphire4260 chapter 5 . 4/21/2011
Awesome! That was great I love gow mariks always making malik uncomfortable! Lol anyway terrific job and you should definitely add a lemon!
| usagisama7874 chapter 5 . 4/9/2011
Oh my god, this is so good. I can't wait until you start working on it again. 3
| KekiAiKohi chapter 5 . 4/24/2010
can you update please~?
| akaisha0 chapter 5 . 10/9/2009
I am deeply saddened this story is discontinued! I have a habit of taking up my old interests after they're no longer popular..I should be used to this by now I'd think.
Anyway, I have to commend you. Brilliant! So often fanfiction is either stupid and horribly written or it's overdone with 5 adjectives and adverbs per sentence..you're not like that. You embody what I think fanfiction SHOULD be and you CONNECT with the reader while displaying your ability to write with good word choice, not letting dialogue lead the story, well-developed and kept personalities, everything.
Above all that that you mix pairings in such a way that we get a taste of everything without the characters being whores is fantastic. You also keep Malik from being a pansy-ass. Often I see authors dumb down Malik's character trying so hard to make the Marik/Malik relationship identical to the stereotyped Bakura/Ryou..you don't do that and that alone makes this story a million times better than most. I am at a loss of words..I can't even compose a well thought out review because..I'm just in awe. Never have I seen an AU written in such brilliance.
I need to comment in my disjointed thoughts my absolute favorite piece of your story: Marik. Often times he's not made insane CORRECTLY. You make him insane in such a way that implies the past you've set up (him having been hospitalized and gotten better). You can tell he's waiting to resurface and I was dying for the moment he would. You explain his past, he's incestuous (an utter disregard for societal norms is VERY common in this archetype), you've hinted at murder, how he talks so freely about the customer spilling coffee on himself, the twisting of Bakura's hand in the first intimate scene in chapter 2, the comment in this chapter about chopping Malik up and eating him himself...just..EVERYTHING. It's deliberate and wonderful. You write with a certain grace that is not over thought and seems to come quite naturally to you. A lot of authors here in ANY genre have a lot to learn.
Fanfiction is meant to have a distinct style. We're not writing award-winning novels and no one should try to mimic Clive Barker's excessive need for descriptive words..fanfiction is SUPPOSED to be amateur..and you do it perfectly. That is not an insult, it is a true skill to master and you've gone above and beyond. i hope there's more I can read even if this story is discontinued. Who knows maybe one day you'll come back to this?
| FreshFish chapter 5 . 10/25/2008
yep, needs a little MalikxMarik fondling..lol
| FreshFish chapter 4 . 10/25/2008
so far we have RyxMal are at least attracted in a one way, BakuxMal..yumm, YMxMal.. I like it :P, and YMxBaku.. yumm.. lol
I'm just excited to be a part of it. squeal*
| Alec Hoffman chapter 5 . 9/28/2008
Ugh! You have to put a new chapter up soon! You've completely sucked me into the story! I beg you, and...if you do...there may be a cookie in it for you.
Your diligent reader,
Alec S. Hoffman
| One percent chapter 5 . 8/15/2008
Oh NO! tell me you're not intending on leaving it here? I really got interested in those cases, and the suspense is getting to me! the aura is awesome and I don't have a clue on what's going to happen or why Marik accompanied Malik home, or even what's gonna happen since they are alone XD
You have to keep this up! I love it!
| One percent chapter 4 . 8/15/2008
Oh my gosh! Marik is so VIOLENT! I understand his brother: how could anyone right in their mind want to ahem with him? seriousely!
and interesting story really!
| One percent chapter 3 . 8/15/2008
I enjoyed reading this chapter! now, I feel more familiar with the characters, and they are really interesting! even Marik.
I hope that Ryou will have a bigger role to lay in the future chapters XD
| One percent chapter 2 . 8/14/2008
mind games! aha! I like that!
and the last comment was funny: Don't trip on your way out LOL
| One percent chapter 1 . 8/14/2008
Hey! I like this story and everything in it! it's just gonna be awesome XD!
| xnightmare'sxnightmarex chapter 5 . 7/3/2008
Awesome story! Please update soon! :D
| Falcon's Jade chapter 5 . 5/13/2008
While I've never read incest fics, I've recently gotten into bronzeshipping so now your fic just makes me both disturbed and giggling like the yaoi fangirl that I am. I really like reading this fic, continue please?