BEST EVER 3

I am not one to leave harsh reviews, if I find a story lacking I will refrain from comment more often than not. However, with this fic I am making several exceptions. one being that I almost never review a fanfiction's first chapter; only reviewing on the latest update. I started this fic because I was intrigued by the summary and the number of favorites and reviews that it received. After, of course, reading through a couple pages of reviews and finding more praise than anything else i decided to read it; pushing off the bad reviews as people being nit-picky. I find no problem with the name of Kurama; you calling him Zangetsu is fine in my books, however that only applies in the case where you intend to do a Bleach crossover in some way. You did not mention, nor mark any sort of intention towards such a thing. I understand if you wanted to name the fox SOMETHING in order to not simply call it 'kyuubi' or 'nine-tails' all the time but you could have either looked up the fox's name or called it silly things such as 'fluffy' or 'fur-ball' that other authors tend to do. The characterization of Kakashi is very much off, I have read and LOVED other fanfictions that had his characterization off as well, but your's seems to be an entirely different character, not thinking like the Kakashi in the manga OR anime would, IN ANY WAY. Not to mention that Kurama seems overly nice and sharing with Naruto. If Naruto's life really was that much in danger than the fox would have healed him before telling him any sort of story or explanation, though I understand partly why you explained it at that time. Speaking of Naruto, your characterization of him is so terribly off. He is in no way a cruel or murderous person, and would not simply hate the entire village, including those he considers precious, just for the act of one person. Gaara's character was also slightly off but not to the extent that the others were. Tsunade is the only in character person that you wrote as she would defianetly act like that should Naruto die. Though she would probably kill Kakashi or throw him in T&I instead of let him wander free. I appreciate what you were TRYING to do with this story, but you just did not accomplish it with that characterization as it is. You would need more character development to even attempt what you did here, and you had NONE. Not to mention that your grammar was off to the point it was painful to read certain parts. You also misspelled Konoha as 'Kohana'. I am not going to lie, I only read the first chapter, and maybe your plot, characterization and spelling got better as you went and that is why you have such an extensively large number of favorites and reviews. I don't know. But I don't plan on finding out. I liked what you planned to do, but the execution of that plan is lacking in vital parts and despite the fact that, yes, this IS an alternate universe it does NOT explain your lack of grammar skills, your failure to PROPERLY explain character development and your over-estimated skills in characterization. I am terribly sorry for the harshness of this review, but I need to warn people of what exactly they are getting into should they wish to read this fanfiction. Maybe when I have time to kill and am in a fanfiction slump with nothing else to read will I come back to read this fic in its entirety, but as of this moment I find NOTHING about it compelling enough to make me want to continue, nor crave for more.

Kyubi's name is not zangetsu Ichigo's sword name is Zangetsu

welllllllll, at least you finished it. the story itself was fine but i feel that you should of labeled this as a crossover. i do not like that you turned naruto into not naruto with a main stream character.

very nice story

Not bad but a few things left unresolved. Kinda hoped it would be longer. But good work nonetheless.

When kyuubi said his name all I think is WTF

Kyuubis name is Kurama not Zangetsu

Damn awesome story know it's probably an older story, but still I enjoyed reading it so keep up the great work!

I have to say I loved the entire story. Thank you for sharing this wonderful story of yours.

This is one of the dumbest stories I've read. You completely perverted the characters of naruto and kakashi. And gaara had almost no influence in the affairs of his village till much later. That, and you stole the name of the nine tails from bleach. PS: your grammar sucks.

Very nicely written and very interesting.I hope you type more interesting fanfictions.

Loved it!

now that is a hell of a story I give you my respect.

_Black Pitbull

Sorry but...Not convinced. Your characters are both OOC and flanderized as hell. Plus, I'd like to point out that Shinigamigakure would translate as 'village hidden on the death gods'. That is silly.