|Reviews for Goldilocks and the Four Heads of Houses|
| CYMKK09 chapter 5 . 10/8/2009
This is totally a brilliant work!
| fieryhairedmaiden chapter 5 . 9/1/2009
| tartan-angel chapter 5 . 7/13/2009
This may just be the best fanfic ever. It is absolutely hilarious and, the thing is, I can imagine this actually happening within the books.
If only JKR thought of this too! :)
| MinervaB chapter 5 . 6/30/2009
Oh! That is definitely my favourite story ever! Bloody brilliant! you are fantastic! that was pure genius, that was! great fic! great!
| Hajiscello chapter 5 . 2/2/2009
That was really funny! I broke down laughing every other second!
I'm a big fan of Severus/Lily, but light Severus/Minerva is always fun.
| Sinkme chapter 5 . 1/24/2009
omg that was hilarious
i'd love to see a follow up (unless there is one and then im going to go read it now)
| Kelly Chambliss chapter 5 . 12/18/2008
Chapter 5 -
You do a lovely job with Flitwick; his character rings very true - gentlemanly, perceptive, kind. Pomona continues to work well, too; I like the hint of badger-ness in her. I also like the way you return McG and Snape to their usual selves, but with that nice touch of vulnerability.
The scene with Fred and George is well-placed: just the bit of vinegar we need to return the world, as Sprout says, to "normal."
I love the smile of the "Very Lucky Man."
One error: "omniscient heart-shaped confetti" - I think you mean "omnipresent" (unless they're some magical "all-knowing" confetti)
A superb story all around; this is one for the "keeper" file.
| Kelly Chambliss chapter 4 . 12/18/2008
You do a fine job in varying the narratives in each chapter to show how the different people observe (although I did think that perhaps the re-cap went on just a little too long in this chapter). I like your characterization of Sprout, and the MM-SS scene is hot! Pomona is right about teachers needing to be actors, too. Love Snape mouthing "help me."
Britpick thing - I believe that "sure" (instead of "yes") is something of an Americanism.
| Kelly Chambliss chapter 3 . 12/18/2008
Chapter 3 - a grand McG chapter, with another of your perfectly-crafted endings. Personally, I always wondered how Minerva justified allowing Harry to break the first-year-broom rule *g*
ISuch a fun scene to witness. All of fanfic is a form of voyeurism, one could argue, and I enjoy being an explicit part of it.
| Kelly Chambliss chapter 2 . 12/18/2008
Chapter 2 - You manage the pov shift beautifully; Lockhart is so perfectly self-absorbed and foolishly arrogant. I love how quickly he decides that Severus really wants to be top to Goldi's bottom. And of course, how well he knows the "ritual." It's all just so. . .endearing!
Great lines and details -
"He almost wished someone could take a photograph of them; a document of this moment of highest passion."
(You don't need the semi-colon, though; a comma would do, or maybe a colon)
the "superb hand balm" - all part of the ritual, right?
"the secrets of manly love"
"nay, the friendly card-carrying cupids" - of COURSE Goldi would say "nay"; great touch
"Gilderoy only opened his mouth slightly and waited for The Kiss.
"And waited." - Perfect placement of "and waited"; love the capitals
| Kelly Chambliss chapter 1 . 12/18/2008
Oh, my, too funny. Most fanfic humor is just silly; it's the rare story that can be funny and reasonably canonical/serious at the same time. Your sense of character is so sharp - both Snape and Lockhart are priceless. (I enjoy SS's "light" reading - "complete with accurate engravings," indeed.)
Here are just a few of the lines that had me laughing aloud (a feat most fanfic accomplishes only unintentionally):
-"of course Lockhart was not interested in an ancient teacher with one hand missing"
-"that certain ex-Death Eater glamour"
-"Those curls looked fresh off the hair rollers"
-"He retreated one step and felt something hard and cold against his back. Damn, the wall."
-"He was a former Death Eater, after all, and might just forget about that former any second now."
-"There were literally sparks in the air."
And my favorite: “Let me show you what ‘Magical Me’ is all about…”
Only one possible false note - I don't think Severus would use the phrase "for sure" ("you will feel my displeasure for sure" - too informal/juvenile, I think. And is it quite British?).
| Hypnobarb chapter 5 . 11/21/2008
Delightful ending with hope for the future!
| Hypnobarb chapter 4 . 11/21/2008
This is better than killing Lockhart.
Not only does Snape humiliate him (which Lockhart may not understand is humiliation), but Snape is going to get the girl!
| Hypnobarb chapter 3 . 11/21/2008
Oh, I love this! That sly wench. I knew Minerva could be that kind of a girl, if she wanted.
| Hypnobarb chapter 2 . 11/21/2008
Can we watch Snape kill Lockhart?
Rushing onto the next chapter.