Reviews for Dark Time In Tortall
drak chapter 3 . 5/29/2009
really interesting, want to read more! Good story

drak
drak chapter 1 . 5/29/2009
a good alternate to what night have happened if Roger had overthrown Jonathan. I like it.

drak
stkbooklover chapter 3 . 3/8/2009
oh my word I LOVE THIS STORY! this is really good, you have to finish it, i can't wait to see what happends to kiki and alice!
Elfsquire90 chapter 3 . 9/7/2007
good chapter I love your stories
Cruel Irony chapter 2 . 8/31/2007
This is good! Please keep going!
Guest chapter 1 . 8/29/2007
sounds like a good story! keep posting!
Mickeygee chapter 2 . 8/29/2007
wow, great job! :) i can't wait to read more... keep posting?
Elfsquire90 chapter 1 . 8/20/2007
good chapter I hope you do update this seems like a good story
dragonelemental chapter 1 . 8/20/2007
Well very short chap so not much to comment on but it looks promising so far! I've got one little constructive comment about the way you've described Alice and Kiki. The descriptions are very mechanical and separate from the story, you should try and blend them in with actions of the story. For example, 'Kiki had dark black hair and brown eyes.' could be changed into something like, 'Kiki pushed her dark black locks away from her face revealing her fierce brown eyes.' It just makes the story flow a bit better. But great otherwise! Looks promising!