|Reviews for A Moment In The Sun|
| Hannah chapter 1 . 2/20/2013
You should have ended with something where they look into each others eyes, and Neville Decides to lean in to kiss Luna. THAT would be a nice ending.
| A Catholic Girl chapter 1 . 5/24/2008
Very nice story. I added it to my Neville Longbottom C2.
| 93 Diagon Alley chapter 1 . 12/25/2007
Excellent work! I liked that a lot. :)
| stinkabhel chapter 1 . 10/4/2007
| werewolfinlove chapter 1 . 8/23/2007
| xlostangelx chapter 1 . 8/21/2007
Aw, that was so cute! You should continue it with their camping trip!
| TheGirlWithKaleidoscopeEyes chapter 1 . 8/20/2007
aww that was sweet! :)(:
| coors1977 chapter 1 . 8/20/2007
I don't read Luna/Neville fics-up until DH, the two of them never really perked my interests enough as standalone characters to really warrant a fic (or even ficlette). However, when your alert popped up in my email, I knew I needed to read. I'm so glad I did. I absolutely love your characterization-how you make them so true to Rowling, just a bit more fleshed out.
The only thing I'd recommend (and it's purely grammatical, not at all having to do w/ the plot, etc) is you seem to depend very much on comma usage in this story. I haven't noticed it in your others, but in this one there's a very high comma count that isn't necessary. Semi-colons and dashes could & probably should be used in places.
But that's just a very small nit I needed to pick that you can take or leave at your discretion. I loved this story, regardless!
| Noc007 chapter 1 . 8/20/2007
Cute story. I liked it!
If you have the time, check out my own HP fic "Bittersweet Symphony" )
| 118118118 chapter 1 . 8/20/2007
Aw, that was so adorable, I absoletely loved it!
| AriesPrincess-Slyffindor chapter 1 . 8/20/2007
aw! i like their pairing