|Reviews for Victim of Rape Revised|
| Tsuri-Born chapter 10 . 1/9/2009
aww awesome ending
| elsquire90 chapter 10 . 11/23/2007
good story... or remake anyway
| Lady Knight Keladry chapter 10 . 11/23/2007
cool, happy ending. i suggest you put the story as 'complete,' though.
| Ahava96 chapter 10 . 11/23/2007
Hehe. very cute ending :D:D::D:D
| The Beetle chapter 9 . 11/16/2007
Wow! I love it (not the killing of characters part of course!) it was really well written and held the plot line all the way through.
Can't wait for the next chapter!
| Ahava96 chapter 9 . 11/16/2007
OH NO! PLEASE HURRY UP AND UPDATE SOON. I CAN'T WAIT FOR MORE!
| Ahava96 chapter 7 . 11/4/2007
Well, so why can't they follow Alanna and Jon? I mean, if they know that someone's trying to kill them...
At least Roger is dying. *thinks* just don't leave Alanna Jon. DON'T*
| Lady Knight Keladry chapter 8 . 11/2/2007
i liked chapter 7, it was nice. a lot of foreshadowing, i see. update soon!
| Ahava96 chapter 6 . 10/25/2007
Hehe. This was a really good chapter. I'm glad that Roger's in trouble but I KNOW that he won't be hanged. I just KNOW IT. I mean, he wouldn't be. He'll somehow manage to sneak his way out of it, he always does...
Hehe. I can't wait for more. :D:D Good job on this btw! And keep writing!
| buttons7 chapter 1 . 10/24/2007
first of all, a few questions - well, i say questions, they don't actually need to be answered, i'm just trying to point out a few gaps/problems in the narrative:
where does the king suddenly materialise from in chapter one? is he just hanging out near trebond for fun?
how do you justify alanna becoming a princess?
why is alanna taking classes with boys and dressing like a boy, considering that in the books the tortallan court is shown to be very conservative?
why does alanna talk, act and swear like a twenty-first century schoolgirl?
why is faithful mentioned in chapter 2 when alanna doesn't find him until chapter 4?
you just don't have enough back-story or explanation in this fic, the plot moves really fast but there isn't much feeling in it because it's so rapid and unjustified. i felt like i had no idea what was going on. there's nothing wrong with the story's premise, in fact, it's quite a good, dark one, but i think you really need to put more effort into developing your ideas for this piece of writing to realise its potential.
| lili chapter 6 . 10/22/2007
i liked the rest, but the last chpt. seemed rushed. sori.
| Lady Knight Keladry chapter 6 . 10/22/2007
that was interesting. i didn't think we'd get to the trial so quickly. update soon!
| Ayana-llama chapter 5 . 9/26/2007
This is a good idea. But the flow of the story is really choppy and confusing. Get like your english teacher or an adult to read it over and give you some tips. You have a good writing style though.
| The Beetle chapter 5 . 9/26/2007
Wow! This story is so original (I have never read anything like it before) and I love your writing style-It makes an excellent read!
Love this and can't wait for more!
| elfsquire90 aka Susan chapter 5 . 9/25/2007