Reviews for The Moment It Began
Guest chapter 11 . 2/18
Guest chapter 27 . 2/10
Have you heard the phrase "poverty porn"? You chose to make this chapter suffering porn. It's common in fanfics unfortunately. For bigger drama authors ignore reason and have characters involved even act out of character, worse than in books, all to serve the sweet infliction of pain. A better writer avoids such cheap manipulation. Be better. Nothing in this chapter makes any logical sense.
AslansHow24 chapter 18 . 12/8/2023
the Severus going back on time stories are supposed to change him. I hate how he's pushing Lily away on all these stories
Jemma Blackwell chapter 27 . 11/15/2023
WTF? Who would send a teenager to see that? That is cruel beyond belief.
tfuinsah chapter 19 . 9/12/2023
What is with Snape constantly being beaten by kids? Wasn't this guy supposed to be a competent wizard, actively serving in two wars? Why is he little better than a child? It's like he's never been in a fight before.
Chelsea Greenwell chapter 119 . 8/16/2023
Voldey dying that way doesn't bother me nearly as much as the fact that you have prevented my favorite character Ginny Weasley from ever being born.
Chelsea Greenwell chapter 21 . 8/13/2023
I like this chapter. I have always thought that Lily didn't end their friendship over him calling her a mudblood. She saw him going in a dangerous direction, and rather than keep enabling it she tried tough love so to speak. I'm sure that if he would have stopped hanging out with the future death eaters after that she would have made up with him. He was probably afraid of being alone though if he stopped hanging out with them.
enmmar chapter 63 . 5/27/2023
nooooo please don't die man im to happy reading this
enmmar chapter 2 . 5/27/2023
omg please PLEASE don't make this sad later on or i will die inside, you know i've been trying to find sev x lily fanfics but i menn there is meny but there al sad and VERY hard to read. But i hope this is better then them i pray to god
Miva4 chapter 119 . 5/2/2023
Awesome. Best way for Voldemort to die. I can't stop laughing!
Miva4 chapter 71 . 4/30/2023
Severus had already done wandless magic earlier in the story, when he escaped from voldemort. He already knows that he can accioed his wand and even fly without a wand, so this chapter shows some inconsistency
Snape and Lily chapter 122 . 4/5/2023
I've been mesmerised for the entire time reading your story. I really really REALLY wish this would have actually happened in the original book (well, Harry Potter wouldn't even born then lol).
Anyway, I would like to thank you from the bottom of my heart for presenting this awesome work of yours. I've been literally glued to this and totally forgot about the reality. This story has been my constant companion since the last 3 weeks, no matter where I am, be it on the train, while walking, while working in the office, which is scary and not something I should do (guilty as charged). I am in depression now, because the story has ended. I can't believe it..It feels like a part of me has gone. I wish this story would've never been finished!
Grammar Fiend chapter 27 . 3/7/2023
It is disgusting and cruel that Dumbledore would take Severus home to see his mother still hanging. Sick! At least take the body down. I am truly sickened by this scene and such callous disregard for Severus’ mental wellbeing.
Jan chapter 46 . 3/4/2023
It would be just fine if you don't have a sex scene in your fic, but being pissy about it and saying 'nooo I don't want sex when they're so young', and they're sixteen? That's exaggerated and repressed, 16 y/o isn't 'so young'. They have sex all the time, and are just fine; contraception exists. It's not realistic to expect them to not do it. Also your being 'an adult' has nothing to do with it. You shouldn't have written that puritannical-ass long paragraph at us, saying things like 'I can't condone suggesting sex between teenagers', that's basically attacking us for suggesting something reasonable.
Lots of writers just don't have a sex scene in their fics anyway, and you had no obligation to include one of course, but there was no need to be like *that* towards the readers.
Anonymous Trixie chapter 22 . 3/3/2023
Hold the phone. A student used an Unforgivable torture curse on another student while he was incapacitated and he got merely expelled? Where was DMLE? Where was the press coverage? Where board of governors? At the very least that should've weaken Headmaster's standing among the public.
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