Such a good story. You write so well and get into the heads of all of the characters perfectly. I love your Rei, your Asuka, and your takes on Kaji and Ritsuko Akagi.

You said you wanted feedback, I can't praise enough this story and say how much I enjoyed it. If you ever decide to continue it, even if that's slow, and in small bits at a time, I'll be waiting in anticipation. Thanks for this creation.

I miss this story! Please update it!

okay so a relatively long time ago I found this fic and I power read the first 5 chapters. I faved it but didn't review because... I realized this was probably dead...

I don't think it will come back just because I reviewed every chapter but... I think it's worth a shot because this is hands down the best 'shnji goes back in time' I've ever read. I will be reviewing all other chapters every week or so, because I'm making the review as detailed as possible, pointing out spelling and grammar and then putting opinions, as I do with the living stories.

I hope you read this and get back on this someday.

This is arguably one of the best fics I've ever read, I love the way you are retelling the tv series by alternating certain events, but at the same time doesn't diverge too far from the source material. Very awesome characterization with the cast as well. It's a lot more believable and doesn't make them OOC. I look forward to what you have planned next chapter and hopefully you overcome your writer's block.

Man, this has got to be the best stories on Evangelion in

I mean like, it's beautifully well crafted and i hate to see it on hiatus (or on another prospect; dead). Like people always say, a story isn't a story until it ends!

P.S. I hope that 1 fav and follow boosted your morale man, I would love to see this story kicking ass in the near future. Peace

Excellent story so far, too bad it seems either in hiatus or dead. Hope it is continued at some point.

edit: paragraph 6, word 'facing' should be 'racing'

B

Yes all of the yes you need to come back to this and finish this I would love to see the ending of this fix you made I hope you come back to this soon.

For some reason there are a fair amount of words mashed together, was the space lost through some formatting error, or just sloppy writing?

"The thing you have to understand…no…that I think you do understand, Shinji" Kaji said emphatically, "is that we're only, at best, half civilized. This…thin veneer of civilization we share is the only imaginary line that keeps us from acting out our own darkest impulses. It allows our 'humanity' to resist justifying butchery."

My my, Kaiji has hidden depths, he is almost quoting Leviathan's loke.

So, I'd like to start this review off on a positive note by saying that I absolutely enjoyed this fic. I'm not one to read Evangelion fics (they tend to either be massive, angst ridden fetish fuel or filled eith enough character bashing to make Chuuni Exam Day look tame), but this one caught my interest, so I decided to give it a shot... And I'm glad I did.

The characterization here is not only spot in to canon, but actually improves upon it in many ways: Shinji is still Shinji, but he's also different, having learned and grown from the absolute HELL he was put through in the main timeline; Rei is very much that awkward, emotionally stunted girl who has just a hint of "inhuman" to her, but you've fleshed her out in such a way that shows she is not only still utterly human, but possibly more human than anyone else in the series; Asuka is her normal "Tsundere" self, but the torment that she went through that turned her into the fiery redhead we know shows, even when it isn't in HER POV. The way you've written these characters, even the minor ones, shows a very fine attention to detail that many writers lack, and for that you get a thumbs up in my book.

However, one of the things that... turned me off, so to speak, was your punctuation. Or, rather, the lack thereof. I know you said you didn't have a Beta for most of this and that gave you some conversion issues, but the sheer NUMBER of punctuation mistakes I just unacceptable. It is very, very jarring to be reading a sentence and then suddenly move into another, unrelated thought without any warning, and, while the strength if your characterization and interaction made up for enough to keep me engaged, it was still an issue. A big, distracting issue.

Thy being said, this is still a solidly written, if not exactly well edited, story, even unit isn't finished, and I very much enjoyed reading it. Overall, I'd give you a 7.5/10, with our characterization and character interaction making up the bulk of that- if you were to go through this and fix up the punctuation, you'd have gotten more, likely a 9 or so, but that is immaterial.

Thank you for the enjoyable read.

It's dead. May it rest in peace.

please update

Well, it's been a while since you've updated, but I hope that you didn't abandon the story. It's a GREAT piece of work, really. The way you have the characters playing off of one another, and the fact that you have them so well in character - honestly even Shinji, considering that he's been through Hell already, that usually gives you a bit of a spine.

Again, the story is great, and I hope you aren't throwing it out.

Keep Writing, Keep Rocking!
~Undeadmonkey8